[Softballpup12]

User: WolfWinter
Name: Magnus
Gender: Male

This is my first viscet as a guest artist! I'm really excited for this month and decided to start it off with a mysteriously misty bud. That's what's inspiring our contest this time around,
so for this contest, I want you to tell me what they're hiding within a 400-word limit. I'll be looking for...

~Character Development
~Creativity and Uniqueness
~And finally, how well you integrate any extras into your form

As mentioned above, you'll be allowed two art extras and two writing extras, with each writing extra containing a 500-word limit. Additionally, if you prefer writing to art, you can exchange each art extra for another 300 words. I'd like to see these used as a fluid extension of your form, and only when necessary. If the character created in the original prompt isn't bettered or made more clear by your use of the extras, then they are unnecessary. Prettying up is allowed. If you have any questions, feel free to pm me! Here's a skeleton form...

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The end-date is set for October 15th, but extensions will be allowed!

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[Vluwu]

]Username:[/b]
Name: Wave
Gender:
Gender for Breeding Purposes:
What are they hiding?:
(Extras)

Ooooo, mark!

[Soll]

Username: Soll
Name:
Gender: Male
Gender for Breeding Purposes: Male
What are they hiding?:
(Extras)

wip! res!

[Thebattleangel]

Username:
.Skye.

Name:
Myst

Gender:
Male

Gender for Breeding Purposes:
Male

What are they hiding?:
You approach the viscet with caution, not knowing what he would do if he spotted you, the only sound in the room was his paw slightly shifting from book to book, his lean body was glooming over the book case, he snorts and turns suddenly causing your heart to leap into your throat,
"What is your business here?",
He asks in a semi irritated and demanding way, you didn't dare move an inch, his eyes seemed to stare deeper and deeper into your soul every second,
"Forgive me, sir, I am y/n and I come with a question",
You say stammering between words, your throat becoming dry,
"Go on",
He replies suddenly intrigued into the conversation,
"Y-y-you seem too hide in here an awful lot i-i-i was wondering about w-w-what you may b-b-be hiding?",
"Young child, you are not ready for such a tale, no one is",
"B-b-but sir I-i traveled all this way",
You begin loosing hope, the very reason you had came on this journey was to find out why he had taken refuge in this tower for many years, he shook his head, his eyes returned to yours,
"OK young one, I will only tell you because I admire your determination, come",
You follow him as he walks, leading you into a dark eerie room which smelt heavily of ash, a great stained glass window stood in the center of the far wall with 5 viscets on the bottom half of the window and what seemed to be a dark evil present on the top half, one was blue, another red, the third was green, the fourth was a transparent blue and the last was brown, we walked toward it,
"This is the battle of the ages",
"Woah, the legendary elemental warrior's?!",
You squeal excitingly,
"I thought it was just a tale!"
"Indeed, the guardians of each element had to defeat a great evil bigger then themselves, however, we all survived by finding our inner power",

---Extra writing (1600 words)

"But that's not right",
You reply confused,
"The tale spoke of only one surviving",
"That's because no one of the elements has told you the true tale young y/n",
"Wait, did you say we before?",
He nodded his head,
"I am Myst the lighting guardian and the other four are Phoenix the fire guardian, Cynder the earth gaurdian, Bleu the water guardian and Tia the green guardian and together we were going to defeat the greatest of evil, but the problem was it was Tia's father, Comet, or as he calls himself Lord Comet",
You sit down engaged in his tale looking from him to the stained glass window.

The city of Kowhi was a relatively peaceful place, that is, when Lord Comet wasn't attacking, which was about 90% of the time, every passing day the news would come on with the same information, "Good morning citizens of Kowhi! Our experts on Lord Comet have confirmed that there is a 95% chance that he will attack today! So stay safe indoors and keep tuned for the latest", in a way you could say that the city was pretty predictable, especially the attacks, Phoenix, Cynder, Tia, Bleu and I were high school students, although Bleu was considered a brat or a midget, she was and still is very intellectual, hence why she was younger then all of us in the secret warrior group, although it wasn't much secret to the city, us being their hero's and all, we all had our advanced mechanisms based off our spirit animals, Tia's was a lime green dragon, the most powerful of them all, Phoenix possessed a tall standing phoenix equipped with the most powerful of automatic guns with bullets of fire, Bleu had a shark submarine made out of an indestructible metal, Cynder was our ground fighter, she had many swords in her possession made of many different kinds of metal, some were embedded with lava, but were still the same size as the others, if not lighter, some with a dark matter only she could contain, if others tried they would potentially die, all of her swords had one thing in common, they all had the mark of the purple dragon carved into them and mine was a trex, the dinosaur with the most powerful bite of any terrestrial animal of any time period and one of the largest known carnivores on land, Cynder and I were the ground troopers, Tia along with Phoenix would take to the sky's and Bleu would be beneath and using the element of surprise although our mechs are indestructible we are vulnerable, especially Tia, since her father was absent while she was growing up, she had no one to teach her he to throw, catch or anything of the sort and no one knew that she was the green warrior. Tia had the most difficult life out of all of us, she had no mother, she lived with her aunt, she was constantly bullied because her father was always trying to destroy the city and everyone blamed it on her everytime he came back, she had never had any legitimate parents and the only time she got to see her father was when we were preventing him from destroying the city, then came her 16th birthday.

All 5 of us had the same class first period, history, we did really like history, don't get me wrong, its just some days you stare out the window just waiting for the attack siren to go off, today was one of those days, we were learning about the history of Anzac day, only problem was that when the teacher explains something she forgets that she had and says it for a second time, she's a nice lady it just can really get on your nerves sometimes, my sense of sound was focusing on the sound of the clock ticking away each second, I was so bored I felt like taking a nap in the middle of class, which was what I was trying to do, until the attack siren went off,
"Duck and cover!",
The teacher shouted, frightened,
"Can we have a bathroom pass?",
All 5 of us said hurriedly, standing up from our desks,
"W-w-what are you cra- y'know what just do whatever you want",
She said while hiding under her desk, we looked at each other, knowing what one another was thinking, we ran to the door, the rest of the class hiding beneath desks, we ran out into the outstretched hallway, the walls covered in useless posters from years prior, the other parts of the walls that weren't smothered with posters had rows of shiny orange lockers, but ours were no ordinary lockers, we ran up to them, my locker was placed in the middle of our row of five, in the rest of the school there were rows of up to ten, ours were a once in a lifetime thing apparently at our school, but we never dwelled on it, it was our duty to save the city, in each of our lockers were a button, which opened a shaft down to our "lair" where our mechs were kept, we all pressed our buttons and were sent down to the lair.

When we enter the tubes we are changed into our suits, so no one could identity any of us, we all had the same suit designs, just not the minor details of the elemental colors and symbols, our mechs were emphasised in that room, the minor sunlight would peer through the roof that would expanded to let the airiel mechanisms out, there was a dock in place for Bleu's mechanical submarine shark and a outstretched door for me and Cynder,
"OK guys, looks like my father's back..... Again, for the fourth time this week, as usual, so double time",
Tia said approaching the metallic green dragon,
"Ughhhh, do we ever get a break from this guy, seriously",
Bleu replied groaning,
"Bleu, a warriors work is never done",
Phoenix countered,
"Can you guys quit blabbering and let's go already!",
Cynder said, sounding impatient with her magma embedded swords held in her two front paws,
"Agreed",
I inserted into the conversation, all of us got suited up and were ready to rollout,
"Let's go!",
Tia shouted, everyone had left at the sound of the words but Tia and I didn't,
"Hey, Tia",
"Yes Myst?",
She replied, sceptical of what I was going to say next,
"How're you feeling?",
"Just fine, everyone's father forgets their birthday right?!",
I shook my head, she sighed,
"No, I'm not OK",
"You'll get through this",
She nodded and took to the sky, while I met up with Cynder,
"What the h took you two so long",
Bleu said through the inbuilt walkie talkie system of the mechanisms,
"Just talking",
I replied,
"Oh sureeeee",
She countered sarcastically,
"Bleu, this is not the time for your sarcastic anticts",
Phoenix inserted, she groaned,
"Phoenix the fun ruiner",
Cynder teased,
"Okay all, Cynder, Myst take the ground troops, Phoenix, take the air troops, Bleu, you know what to do and I've got Comet",
"Why can't I take Comet this timeeee",
Bleu moaned,
"Just shut up and play your part!",
Cynder yelled silencing her, Comet had really prepared so to speak for us this time, he had mechanical warriors the size of mine, which wasn't a problem for my Trex but it was intimidating, we quickly destroyed all his ground, air and water troops, so we met up with Comet and Tia, Tia had already shot multiple missles at him, destroying his mech, the whole city was watching the battle,
"Why are you here on this day",
The green warrior demanded,
"I-i-i ermmm, wanted to find a restaurant I went to 16 years ago, but I forgot its name, it was the one that you pay money and the chef gives you what he wants to",
"Its Channing's, are you sure there's no other reason why you would be here on this particular day?",
"Oh, there was this adorable baby",
"Yeah, yeah, go on",
"At this amazing sushi place 16 years ago",
"Are you kidding me, so there's nothing else you lost in the city on this day 16 years ago",
"Nope",
"Well, why don't you just leave the city and get out of my life!",
"Uh oh",
Bleu said beneath her breath,
"What?",
Tia lifted off her mask, Comet had no words,
"The green warrior is Tia?!",
Someone in the crowd said almost guiltily, another fainted,
"That's right dad, remember me?",
"How could I not",
"Really, then what's today?",
"Mothers day?",
"No",
"Fathers day",
"No, just stop guessing! Its my 16th birthday and where were you?! Trying to conquer the same city all over again is getting extremely tiresome dad",
"Well, happy birthday",
"You don't mean that!",
"Your right, I don't",
He laughed sending Tia into a downward emotional spiral, she shot countless of rockets at him, more tears running down her face every second, she left a huge cloud of black smoke making many cough at the smell, she stood onto what was left of her father's armor and grabbed ahold of his neck,
"Leave and never come back",
Her words were extremely bitter and emotionless, she threw him into the depths of the ocean, knowing he would eventually emerge to the surface and swim back to where he came, a inactive volcano which is made active by his command by mechanics, the city cheered but she didn't stay long, she soon left on her dragon but we decided not to follow.

Continuation of what are they hiding?:
"That doesn't make any sense, it wasn't really a battle at all",
You say utterly confused,
"You see child, people lie about tales, some are made out to be epic with lots of death but this was the great battle of the ages because Tia had conquered her father, a very emotion filled battle for her, years on her father had come back to the city and apologized to her and they both lived happily ever after, the end".

[narancia.]

Username:Unicornny
Name:Von Vance
Gender:Male
Gender for Breeding Purposes:Male
What are they hiding?:He is actually a vampire,all his life he is trying to hide his real identity from everyone.
(Extras)The colour is awesome!

[Softballpup12]

A reminder that you have a week to finish your forms! Extensions are possible if needed.

[WolfWinter]

~Username: WolfWinter
~Name: Magnus
~Gender: Male
~Gender for Breeding Purposes: Male
~What are they hiding?:

Magnus looked around cautiously; he knew he was being followed. He did his best to lose the tail, but he just couldn't shake them. Whoever it was relentless. He bumped into several people before he managed to calm his nerves enough to move swiftly through the crowd. He could feel the energy building up inside him, and he fought to control it. He had worked so hard to remain hidden, it wouldn't do to shout his presence to the world now.
Magnus slowly regained control of himself, and started to slip around people. He moved like water through the cracks in the flow of people. His tail didn't even rustle the clothing of the people he passed. Just a few more blocks, and then I'll be home. He forced his way to the alley, and started walking through the maze. Once upon a time a whole other street had gone through here, but over time buildings had been built over it with alleys between them for people to get in and out of. When he got to his building's stoop, he felt relief.
Finally, he had lost whoever had been following him. Sure, the roundabout way through the alley took more time, but it had lost the tail. He nearly ran up the stairs to his apartment. He almost dropped the keys with how badly he was shaking. It wasn't the fear or adrenaline rush making him shake. He burst through the door into his apartment. He closed the door and slowly slid down it. His tail was nearly a seat for him.
He relaxed, and let the warm energy wash over him. Lights filled the room around him. Sparks danced in front of him. Electricity crackled from one spark to another. The magic, for lack of a better term, slowly faded away as the built up energy was given an outlet. The show was a lot better than what could've happened. He shuddered to think about it. However, today was a reminder that he could be found in a city of thousands. He stood on shaky legs and walked to the pile of papers on his table. It was time to move.

~Moving In~

Magnus was carrying boxes from the moving truck when he noticed a strange viscet coming his way. Whoever it was walked up to him without fear. Well, if he couldn't hide amongst strangers, then he could try hiding amongst friends. First, he had to make them. So, he put on a smile as the stranger walked up to him.
"Hallo, how are you today? Just moving in I see, here, let me give you a hand," this viscet had an unexpectedly deep and musical voice. True to his word, he walked behind Magnus to grab a box from the truck. Magnus was uneasy, though not from anything the viscet was doing, just because he wasn't used to people being friendly. I've been on the move for too long. With help from the other viscet, his name was Lucky, all of his belongings were quickly unloaded from the truck.
Lucky asked if he could help Magnus unpack, since he had nothing to do that day. Magnus said yes, if only to try and make friends.
He knew that moving to a town this small would mean more intimate contact with others, but he now fully realized it.
As the day wore on they unpacked all of the boxes, and moved all of the furniture around the small townhouse. Lucky was looking at Magnus's snowglobe collection.
"So, where did you get all of these from?" he asked.
"Oh, those. I've bought one from every place I've lived at," said Magnus.
Lucky let out a whistle, "Wow, so you've really lived in all of these places-" he picked one up, "- London?"
Magnus let out a smile as warm memories bubbled, "Yeah, that's where I'm from."
"That's funny, you don't have much of an accent," Lucky said, setting down the snowglobe and picking up another.
Magnus let out a laugh, "That's because I've lived away from home as soon as I could leave."
Lucky cocked his head to the side, "Why's that?"
"Because I wanted to see the world, as much of it as possible. I've been to almost every single country," he said, surprising himself with how much he was sharing.
"So, lemme get this straight. You're a world traveler, a big one, and you've lived on every single continent?"
Magnus nodded, "Except for Anarctica, I've only visited there. The penguins are cute."
Lucky gasped and went on about his love of penguins. Magnus chuckled and answered all of his questions, especially those regarding penguins. He was completely at ease.

~The Party~

Magnus was out grocery shopping before the party. It was lucky's idea to host a party. He had gone on about Magnus being in town for a few months already and only knowing Lucky. Magnus had relented because he knew Lucky was right. As an added bonus, he would get to meet some of Lucky's friends. He had heard all about them, but had only met one of them. Jean was interesting, they were an artist by profession, but also worked as a grocer to stay in contact with others.
It still unnerved Magnus how much of a tight-knit community this was, and he was expected to become a part of it. Lucky was back at Magnus' house setting up. All he had to to was get the food. Lucky excitedly picked through everything and started setting things out after he got back. Soon, people started arriving. Magnus ignored the growing tension.
Magnus thought nothing of it as the tension quickly changed. He quickly made his was to the back yard. It was large, had trees, and a hidden grotto. It was that grotto that he headed towards now. With no witnesses but the stars and the trees, he let the energy loose. This time it appeared more like an aurora above him, spreading high into the sky. It wasn't until the energy had gone that he felt a presence. He turned around and there was a pair of glowing eyes looking his way.
"So I knew there was something about you, just didn't know what it was," she said.
Magnus felt horror building and he tried to run away when the viscet jumped on his back.
"Hey, HEY! Stop it, I'm not going to hurt you or tell your secret to anyone," she said, panting with the effort of keeping him from bolting.
Magnus was allowed to stand up, he stared at her suspiciously, "Why did you follow me? And who are you?"
"I'm a friend of Lucky's. I thought I'd meet you with a bang. However, you were the one who produced the bang instead of me," she said.
It was then that Magnus noticed the pop rocks spilling from a bag, "You didn't answer the last question."
She let out a throaty laugh, "My name is Agrona, pleasure to meet you 'Magical' Magnus."

"You can do WHAT?!" Lucky half-shouted.
Magnus ducked his head down. He had decided to tell Lucky about his... abilities... after the party was over and everything was cleaned up. Magnus told them why he had moved there. There were people out there that wanted him, bad people. He told them that he'd understand if they wanted nothing to do with him. Both stared at him and it was finally Agrona who spoke up.
"I already consider you a friend. You can't scare me off that easy," she said, and Lucky nodded in agreement.
Relief washed through Magnus. He had made a friend, now friends, for the first time in years. He smiled.

[Softballpup12]

A reminder that this ends today at 11:59 pm CST! Extensions can be given.

[Abraxis]

Username: Abraxis
Name: Ryperion
Gender: Male
Gender for Breeding Purposes: Male
What are they hiding?: Ryperion is a keeper of many secrets, none of which he wishes to see out in the open for anyone to see. For he knows that if his secrets were to get out. If anyone were to hear about them, he would be in serious trouble. One such secret is, him being the cause of a grandfather paradox, where the forces, and allies of the evil fighting group Legion, and their leader Drax couldn't stand a chance against the evil forces, allies of Chaos, and their leader Draxis. Another being that he acquired his powers from element X, a highly top secret research project. That was meant to eventually be turned into a last stand weapon against the forces of Chaos if Drax were to ever die, along with all of his strongest warriors. If Alpha Squad, Blue Team, Death Squad, and Dread, fell in combat, element X would've been activated. To instantly completely, instantly revive them, restoring all of their lost power, even going as far as tripling the amount of power they had before they died, depending on how bad, they were beaten up in combat. But that mistake was by far his favorite. Meant that he'd have no choice, but to follow his comrades into battle, and heal them during the fight, as well as fighting the enemy at the same time. Now while Element X had its healing factor, it could also be used as a weapon on a level of complete extinction, if it ever got into the wrong hands. All he did was touch it, and somehow the entire room went dark, for several minutes while element X was changing his anatomy. If his body rejected it, or it rejected his body complete destruction would follow. Once he even managed to destroy an entire solar system, from element X controlling him. Now if that secret were to spread that he was responsible for that. Multiple members of Legion would be all over the scene. They'd be disappointed, take their own member into custody, and bring him to Drax. To discuss what happened, possibly even be exiled from legion. Now if he destroyed an universe, would be the death penalty for sure.

(Extras)


The battle he had against Chaos's Titan rank warrior Dreadnaught, lasted a couple days. With Dread dealing out massive damage, against Ryperion, while he healed himself from his attacks. Just trying to keep himself alive, till reinforcements could arrive. Dread was destroying everyone in the group Ryperion brought with him, in order to try to eliminate Dread. But was nowhere near enough. For it takes more than sheer numbers to beat a Titan, it also takes a lot of strength, speed.


"Hey you pipsqueak, stop healing your pathetic comrades, let them rest in peace. All your doing, is making them suffer, from more deaths by my power."
Dreadnaught, slams his paws on the ground, creating a massive crater, forcing every one of Ryperion's men to fall to their deaths.
Ryperion glares at Dreadnaught, and he glares back.
"How dare you do that, to my friend!!! I am no pipsqueak, I am Ryperion!!!!!!!!"
"Well "Ryperion" how would you like to die by my hand?"
"I shall not die by your hand, or anyone else's. I shall keep myself alive for as long as possible until reinforcements arrive."
Dread faces the palm of his paw towards him. Fires a massive energy blast from his paw at him. Manages to scratch against Ryperions face, which he covers the damaged areas, with his paw, heals himself immediately.
"Damn that hurt a lot! I couldn't even see it coming, was too quick, and out of nowhere. I saw you lift your paw, but that was it. What was that?"
"That my friend, was the sound, feeling of your inevitable death. For there are no reinforcements coming to help you. I made sure of that myself. That energy blast right that I just shot out of my paw, a minute ago. Was aimed at your reinforcements. From the looks of it, no one survived the blast."
He turns around, to see the carnage, damage, the blast did.
"You see Ryperion, I am a Titan of Chaos. No army like that will ever stand a chance against me."
"Than I have no choice but to face you myself. And find a way to defeat you."
You. Defeat me?"
He begins to laugh.
"You will never defeat me pipsqueak."
Continues laughing.
Ryperion taunts him.
"Well, for a "Titan of Chaos" You sure do love to run your mouth."
Ryperion starts laughing, Dread stops laughing, charges Ryperion slamming him into the side of the rock cliff that was right behind him. Ryperion coughs up a lot of blood, but element X activates on its own within Ryperion's body, instantly heals him, as if he was never harmed. Dread confused by this, puts more pressure, on Ryperion, attempting to flatten him against the edge of the base of the cliff.
"What the heck? Normaly this would be instant death for everyone i do this to."
Ryperions laughs, while Dread, continues to apply more pressure to his neck.
"You cant kill me, Dread. The accident i had earlier with Element X has given me healing extremely powerful healing powers."

Their battle would rage on for several hours. With Ryperion healing every wound Dread inflicts. Now here's what no one expected Dread was corrupted by his arch rival Tronis in the final battle he had against the last Chaos group. Once Tronis corrupted Dread Legion began to fall apart, scatter themselves throughout the multiverse. To hide from Tronis, his Chaos group. Now in an attempt to defeat the corrupted Dread, Ryperion fully activated element X within his body released anti-matter that would've killed, destroyed everyone, everything. But Drax, Raika, Cortana caught wind of this action. And intervened having the snti-matter only target Dread. The attack however failed. All he did was raise his paw, aimed his palm directly at the antimatter held his paw there in place. Channeling all of his energy to his paw, to negate the antimatter.

Dread could easily wipe out every member of Legion on his own, maybe even Drax, especially at their current level of power. If they all grouped up, they'd stand a better chance against him. So out of nowhere Atriox, showed up with Raika, Drax while those two blinded Dread, Atriox grabbed Ryperion the other two still holding on to him, then vanished before Dread could see again. After hours of debriefing Ryperion, days of doing research on Dread they found out that who they came into contact with was Legions former leader himself. Who became corrupted by Tronis, Chaos's former leader. After all research was complete they began to train harder than they ever have before. Becoming more serious in every sparing match they did against each other. All in an effort to get rid of Dreads corruption in their next encounter with him. To turn him back into a Legion member.

[Softballpup12]

Wow guys! This was a tough decision! All 3 forms that were finished were extremely creative and I enjoyed them immensely! Skye, the POV of your form was extremely creative,
and the story was great! WolfWinter, I loved the cute story and it was extremely cute to see him reveal the truth and get excited about having friends! Abraxis, I loved the creativity of your story and the battle was super exciting! I loved the extra ingredient you added about element X! It was cool.

Finally, the winner is WolfWInter. Ultimately, what stuck out to me was how much you connected me to the character throughout your story by expressing Magnus' emotions. COngrats on your new viscet!