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for rob wrote:the art pieces is adorable! the character you described for this batch is a small, kawaii little gal! i think it gits her nature quite well, and i cant seem to see anything else besides this! i think its creative to add in her most treasured items! i dont see many forms that included that, so i think its pretty original. the likes and disikes were a pretty good thing also, and including in her treasured items, you can infer a deeper into her relationship with her father and mother, and i think its adorable! good work overall, though the thing id have to say is there isnt as much effort into your form. though it had creative things, it has a bit less than others, and it doesn't have any relationships with any other characters, but i loved your form! it was creative and a real tooth rottener!
for ember wrote:the different colored butterflies matches his feelings a little bit alongside with this part <3 i think it's really cute, and it got a lot done in a such a short time! They also included a lot of relationship with the other viscet used in the form, and i thought the letter was an interesting thing, and it helps infer what their personality is like just through the letters he 'sent home'.
the only thing id have to say is off is the personality! it is pretty obvious in the form for some readers, though not everybody is good with inferring, so that's a small limitation. other than that, it's a great form!





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