[smol ken]

If I have time I will be entering hopefully.

[Omosky]

6 hours to go.

[mellifluous]

I'm just curious do my bullets for likes and dislikes count as extra coding?

[Omosky]

Yes they do. Reprashing.. The only coding I'm allowing is Bold and Linked songs.

[Omosky]

Closed!!

[mellifluous]

Goodluck guys <3

[Omosky]

First, the critique. Please bear in mind. It may sound a bit harsh, but take it to heart and use it to learn from. As that is what it's meant to be for.

Fuscontidox - You were pretty heavy on two negatives. I would have loved to seen at least one positive trait directly noted. It also felt like there was an outlet missing for all of the character's emotional build up. Very well done with connecting your theme with the song and name you choose ythough.
Overall, I don't think it works. All the character history, and thus the phobia as well, is invalid due to where Dots lives. ..On an island isolated from public places. Making the only other young parras around her being her own clutch mates and half brother; and I can't imagine Kiton, Gouyen, and Morgan being so cruel to their own sister with the schooling focus on the private island.


Kydashing - You also tied everything together very nicely. While I can see the character's loyalty and instantly dropping everything being large positives and negatives, I would have liked to have seen more to the entry though.
Overall, it's still very well done with what info you gave even if there is no mention of the environment. However, I can see how it would affect the character, enhancing Sudo's loyal and dependable nature to be the extremes they are. Yet, I couldn't help feel like you could have done more for a larger glimpse of the character.


Mellifluous - I think the only thing I stumbled on in your form was the name, but after I looked up Ignacio I could see how fiery can be translated into passion which the character certainly seems to have. Other than that, it was quite a lovely reading and I love the effort you put into it.
Overall though, same mistake as Fuscontidox on ignoring were Dots lives. However! You did include a relationship with Alicia, Ikto, and Froas which puts them off the island. It's especially the ones with Ikto and Froas stating Legend is visiting them leaving out any possibility of them visiting her. This saves you in your "So tell me about Secrets" section considering where Dots lives. As that part in her life can easily be interpreted as a time when Dots takes her to visit whenever she's a puzzle job nearby.




Thanks to Tart for helping me evaluate the entries. :3




That said, the winner is

Username: Mellifluous
Which other parras do you own? N/A

Name: Legend Ignacio
Why that name: I use a website for most of my names and I was going through and I saw Ignacio and Legend and I knew it was meant to be. I gave her male names on purpose because idk my girls usually have super feminine names and I know that she wouldn't want that
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Legend is young and doesn't really know, but she will probably be aromantic pansexual when she's older, as I don't see her really being the kind of person to fall in love, but you never know. If she is not aromantic she will be mated for life to whoever can make her fall in love
Song: Secret by the pierces
Why that song: Legend doesn't find a reason for secrets, yet she knows a lot. She doesn't even know that the things she knows aren't necessarily what others want her to know. Despite her intelligence she just hasn't fully comprehended that, the song will be more relative when she's an adult due to her future job.
Overview: Legend, she's arrogant. She knows it and she works it. People think wow you should dial it back but she always wants to ask them why they think she should treat herself any less than she does. She's a fighter, physically and spiritually. She's also smart. She seems to be extremely reckless but she's calculated. Too calculated. She knows too much for how other people like it. She likes games. Guessing games. She loves going out to get ice cream and guessing what flavors and size people will get. She seems to understand human nature too well, kind of predict the future. But thats silly, she doesn't really. She's just insanely observant and loves learning. She has fast reflexes and during her wrestling matches can usually win because she often can tell from body language what movement her opponent will make. She isn't as much a fan of puzzles as she is a fan of taking things apart and putting them back together. She likes knowing how things work, whats inside them, what makes them tick.
Age: Legend is ten years old. Yes she looks like a tiny little seven year old, but she's not. She will fight you if you call her small.
Height: Exactly 4 feet. Yes she's short. Yes she knows.
Weight: 52 pounds
Personality: Legend is a pretty arrogant child. She knows she's smart and doesn't talk it down. There are other really smart children who deny it but Legend, she just smiles and says I know. She will never turn down a compliment. It doesn't go to her head necessarily, for her it's more like she knows that she can do things well and doesn't ever sell herself short. She's confident. Reassured if you will. Whatever she is, most people don't appreciate it, but those close to her do.
Legend is also athletic. It usually isn't considered a personality trait, but for her it is. Her athleticism is a part of who she is. She's been playing sports since she was four and has been in wrestling since she was five. She grew up living and breathing sports. Even when she was in kindergarten and first grade, she always went from school to practice while everyone else finished coloring their pictures.
Legend's own little stand-out trait is how observant or calculating she is. She isn't as much the kind of person that watches, but the kind of person that notices. She doesn't need to spend time looking for clues as much as she just does knows. Every little thing people do, she just unconsciously knows it as a part of their character. She links it to something inside them. She understands. It's a bit odd for her. Due to this, she has gained the annoying trait of wanting to understand everything. She loves knowing how things work... what makes them tick. Legend loves getting little devices or even computers and taking them apart, seeing how they work, and then putting them back together. She may put them together in a way that is different but functional or just not put them together right, but she will never put them together exactly how they were before. She calls it making an impact, and that's all she really wants to make in the world. She wants to live up to her name.
Legend is also kind of... quiet and hates everything? That stereotype applies to her, but only slightly. It's not like she has a reason to, she just tends to find peppy bright happy people annoying. And most times their mannerisms show that they're not even happy, and she hates liars like nothing else. Legend prefers to be true with how she feels, and she usually feels pretty monotonal, she she gives off a monotone vibe, which most mistake for brooding and angry or something.
Quirks:
hates hates hates beets
collects ribbons *not for hair for decoration*
goes to places to basically judge people (ie. judge them and guess what they'll get or buy)
will never eat any meat that she has seen the head of
won't eat any part of chicken but the wings
can't fly very well (like she'll admit that)
Likes:
sports
studying
food
sleeping
guessing games
poker (kids version anyway)
monopoly
honesty
Christmas
Dislikes:
blood
beets
the word no
liars
secrets
being told she's wrong
Her sports: As I have said, Legend is an athlete, and a skilled one a that. Shockingly enough she isn't in many sports. She actually only does Track, Wrestling, and Basketball. She loves all of them but wrestling is most definitely her favourite. Most say she is one of the best in her weight group.
As for Track, Legend is a sprinter. She does basically all of the events from 100 to the 400 relay. Her fastest lap time is 53 seconds. And this is a kid. She also does high jump and she's not too good seeing as she is at a basic 4 ft high.
She doesn't invest much time in basketball, however. She mostly plays for fun and is just fast enough to play it off.
Hobbies: Obviously she likes sporting (yes that's a word now)
She also likes crafting. She can't draw or anything, but she likes making things and putting things together. Especially with ribons. It's her guilty pleasure.
She is also a fan of gaming, especially sandbox games
Future Job: A spy. Her people-reading skills, intelligence, and athleticism make this the perfect job for her. She doesn't want to be a spy right now, but as she gets older it will become her goal and make life fairly difficult for her as she will start in her late teens and have to relocate away from her family but will visit as often as she can.
So tell me about Secrets: Let me paraphrase because I wrote out the whole story and it was too sad and I'm scared it may offend someone: Honestly, Legend's bias against secrets is partially her fault. You see, a friend told Legend a secret. A big secret. A dangerous secret. Legend being a younger child at the time told her mom, not having any idea what to do with the situation. Her mom called the police (yes it was that bad) and the secret exploded. It became the talk of the town. Eventually Legend's friend disappeared. After all, she couldn't be in a town where everyone only acknowledged her to pity her for her abusive father now in jail and dead mother. When she was older, Legend kind of started to blame herself, not really acknowledging that she actually saved her friend from more abuse, but that she caused her friend to run away. She's actually decided to read people better and wants to become a cop or social worker due to this
Relationships:

Legend and Dots:
Legend gets along with Dots so well it's ridiculous. Legend actually doesn't make super-deep emotional bonds that quickly or easily, but Dots is just an exception. Legend always wants to check up what Dots is doing, if Dots is safe, if she's playing, and if Dots is playing Legend wants in. For someone who loves reading people, Legend is surprisingly bad at puzzles and complicated mazes, so she loves learning new tips and tricks from her mom. She lives with Dots as well, Dots being her main guardian out of her 3 parents. However there has been a situation where Dots walked in on Legend about to take her ipod apart. Legend was yelled at and grounded. Their relationship was tense for a few days after that, but then Legend got over herself and apologized and all was well.
Legend and Alicia:
Oh lord. Legend finds Alicia so happy. Legend isn't a negative person or anything, but Alicia is just too much for her. They're actually almost completely polar opposites in every way, so they don't spend much time together. The time spent together isn't all that great either, it's usually Legend sitting in a corner trying to find something, anything negative or unhappy in the way Alicia acts and it's just not there. Legend doesn't understand Alicia and it drives. her. mad.
Legend and Ikto:
Aw Legend loves Ikto. She thinks he's adorable. Which actually cracks him up, by the way. Every time she gets to visit him she tells him, "You're adorable, dad." He always laughs. She says this because of how formal and business-y he is. He always seems so sophisticated but whenever she goes to see him, he's super nice and playful. She doesn't even have to observe him to tell he's playful.
Legend and Kiton:
Kiton is actually kind of like Legend's best friend. Although he never shuts up, which usually drives her crazy, she can tell he doesn't mean to and he is usually pretty accurate and honest, so she appreciates that. She is always there to tell him when to shut his trap and when to change his wording not to sound rude. They get along. It's all good.
Legend and Vyse:
Legend doesn't really know Vyse, sadly. All she knows is Vyse is adult age and her older half-brother. There isn't much of a relationship to speak of.
Legend and Froas:
Legend finds Froas adorable too! She's so gentle and quiet, Legend could just cuddle her all day and never let go. They don't see each other much, however, as Froas doesn't live with them. Legend will always bring Froas a random key whenever she visits.. even if it's important (funny story, Legend once gave Froas the house keys and locked her, Kiton and Dots out of the house). But Legend really does like Froas.
Legend and Gouyen:
Legend and Gouyen have more of a rivalry really. They both seem pretty mysterious (but one is ridiculously arrogant) and are quite intelligent. Due to this, they tend to compete. A lot. Gouyen and Legend are pretty equally matched on the intellectual field, with Gouyen being a bit smarter (not that Legend will ever admit this) but Legend prides herself in beating out her sister on the athletic front. But despite this, they are sisters and always have each others back. They defend each other all the time and Gouyen sometimes lets herself feed Legend's ego when Legend is down. They have a good relationship, but the rivalry between them is quite evident.

[mellifluous]

Aahhh I can't believe I forgot about where Dots lives *cri*
THANK YOU SO MUCH! Legend is my first parra so just I can't right now
I've been actually having such a good day this just makes it so much better!
I'll take great care of her!

May I please be added?

[Fuscontidox]

haha wow *face palm* I read through her story and that she lived in an island and I didn't even change anything wow... XD

congrats Mel!

[Kydashing]

Yay congrats! I am so happy you won them! You very much earned their ownership and did your best!!