Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby Xhat » Tue Sep 29, 2015 2:40 am

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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby winkatuck » Tue Sep 29, 2015 5:48 am

Aight, now for the (not so) long awaited results! It took some time and thinking for me but I believe I've finally settled on a name for my bab and thus the winner of this competition. Before I begin critique I just want to say thank you guys so much for helping me find a name and for trying out. It really means the world to me. So lets get started, shall we?

Groenii, Moonlit., She Wolf Warrior, Cakeface, Junebug., Calder, Ascot, ~Soul~ and Vanity.


I really loved the names some of you put, so I'm just lumping you all together since this was a naming contest and you guys didn't do extras. Names are merely my personal opinion so don't take it personally if none of yours were picked. Some I liked were:

Nora (Sap for names ending in A)
Henely (Seems more masculine than feminine to me x'D)
Tawni (I like the use of the I instead of the Y for once x3)
Oberon (If I had a male character I would have used this in a heartbeat. Might I steal it for a future parra ewe?)
Henna (Like the tattoos? Those rock! If only I didn't already have a parra named Kenna lol. Again ending in A.)
Qudoba (Larimar's name who dropped out but I still kinda liked this one. Oh surprise it ends in A again x'DD)


Now onto actual critique for the rest of the bigger forms.~

For Ymir wrote:I would have liked to see a bit more development in the form. I loved what you had and the name Chaushea is one of my favorites in this competition! Even a little more coding/formatting and spacing would have helped break this up. It runs together too easily and at a first glance looks like a wall of text.


For Keanai. wrote:I actually really like your username. //shot

-coughs- But besides that. Your form was definitely an eye catcher with all the gifs. Just make sure you double and even triple check your formatting before contests close. I don't think some of the spacing was intentional on your part. I liked where you were going with your form but at the same time I was hoping you could incorporate the relationship between the two parras more. Macabre just sounds really lonely and everyone needs at least one other to lean on.


For Rochester. wrote:I loved the names Mae, Kahla and especially Raeburn. I also loved the name you picked for the actual parra you were adopting. Fits the theme quite nicely. I would have liked to see a bit more coding to break the text up but otherwise I liked what you had.


For BurningSnow wrote:I loved your light-hearted joking throughout your form. Even tho I take serious thought into naming my parras. Bulbasaur umg, I can't unsee it now. (Of course I'm not naming her that lol)

I loved the name you picked for the actual parra. As for your name suggestions I really liked Echloza but without the L xD

I thought it was creative how you added a lisp to the parra, a unique character trait that isn't often played up or done well. Though I feel like you can pull it if better than anyone else I know. I also loved how optimistic you made Skrocker. The formatting was nice and easy to read.


For Karkat wrote:Lemme just say I really, really enjoyed most if not all of your form. It was quite the read and even more fun to watch you go through and add onto it as the competition progressed. Though while I really liked the relationship between the two and even Fiskcho's name, I couldn't find any names you listed I was crazy about. I really really love the whole rest of the form though, including the cute pixel art and the traditional art, the little story in the shop. All of it. Especially how the only thing he loves more than himself is the other parra.


For Xhat wrote:Umg, these names you listed. I giggled at them, I loved them as silly nicknames even and it was clever to read into Hamburg's name origin. Wasabi and Lattuga yes. Just yes. I think I'd want her to have serious names but it reminds me of Big Hero 6 if you've ever seen that movie and how the one guy is nicknamed Wasabi for well... wasabi reasons lol. I hate to admit this but I'm a huge sap for accented characters, this one is no exception. There was a few typos that threw me off through reading the form but I liked how you kept hope in the story and that he wasn't really an orphan. At least not in a permanent sense.


For Lyrebird wrote:I loved loved loved your name suggestions. Cosette and Anali were two of my favorites and they were both on your form! I really liked the art you had and while the story was nice I feel it was lack luster. A bit stereotypical. A lot of people tied in the circus with them both so it didn't really stand out too much to me


For || Madness|| wrote:I didn't really care for any of your names, the art was cute. I liked the irony how You named one Zig and the other Zag. The story was sad but hard to read since it wasn't really broken up coding wise. I would have liked to see you space it out better with gifs/art anything really.


For Chinchillax wrote:I like the name Sanura. Now if only I didn't already have two or so parras with S names. The little art was cute. I wish you had developed her more though.


For Lioncourt wrote:Out of all your names I really liked Oakley. Though it didn't remind me of a circus performer, rather someone from Pokemon Heroes. Aka one of my favorite Pokemon movies, lol. But I loved the names you picked for Edgar as well, I'm surprised more didn't come up with Stage names as people in show business often have those. I'm glad more people are picking up on the writing aspect I wanted this parrapup to have. I love how you went into detail about him joining the circus how how his roles would change. It seemed very realistic. That being said, your form was nicely formatted, eye catchingly simple and a joy to read that I couldn't believe I had read it all when I got to the bottom.


For Red Weasel wrote:I liked the name Caze out of all of your names. You could have used a bit more coding though I'm glad you broke the text up somehow. Maybe throw some gifs or art in there next time to make it stand out a bit more. Otherwise I liked the simplicity of this form.


This being said between all of you I do finally have a name for my little green cutie and a winner for this contest.
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I fell in love with everything in your form Karkat, I know you'll take good care of Fiskcho and I'd love to have him and my girl interact and grow up together. ;3

And with that I'm proud to announce my girl's new name of Raeburn, for helping me name her a RU will be going to Rochester.! Please pm me some stuff you'd like to see and I'll see what I can do.

Thanks again everyone for trying. Be on the lookout for something fun and interesting when 200 hits <w< that's all I'm going to say for right now.~
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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby Grinsome » Tue Sep 29, 2015 6:09 am

Congrats!! You may keep my art if you want
And congrats to the runner up!

Thanks for the critique Winkatuck! I realize now how flawed my form is ^^' I'm sorry! Thanks though!
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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby she wolf warrior » Tue Sep 29, 2015 6:11 am

congrats!! super cute names and forms guys! Congrats to the RU too! Pm me if you guys are interested in having relationships with my parras ;>
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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby poqqi » Tue Sep 29, 2015 7:24 am

Congrats! Thanks for the critique, Wink! I'll furthermore be searching for another Parra to give a lisp to >w<

You can keep my art, as I have no use for it, but I'm not sure if they'll completely fit your character, as it was a drawing representing the character I wrote about cx
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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby rochester. » Tue Sep 29, 2015 8:45 am

Winkatuck wrote:And with that I'm proud to announce my girl's new name of Raeburn, for helping me name her a RU will be going to Rochester.! Please pm me some stuff you'd like to see and I'll see what I can do.


Thank you so much for the RU, Wink, and thanks for all the congrats, guys! I'd like to give a big congratulations to Karkat, your form was awesome, you really deserved this cutie! Everyone did a really awesome job, it was so interesting to read everyone's different interpretations of this sweetie!
Since I can't PM, I'll just tell you that I want his design to stay true to what I've written on my form, more or less: Longish hair covering his face, scarf/beanie, purple/black eyes, writing incorporated in some way, be it a pencil/pen behind the ear, ink splotches, a notebook, etc. Those are just my ideas, feel free to use any or none of them, I'm sure I can make whatever design you come up with work! Thank you so much!!
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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby Red weasel » Tue Sep 29, 2015 8:53 am

Congrats! and thanks so much for the critique. Learning is always good.
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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby Luscinia » Tue Sep 29, 2015 10:08 am

        Congrats you two <3 You certainly picked an awesome name, Wink~ And I can't wait to see the RU!

        Additionally, thank you so much for your compliments on my writing, I don't mean to sound cheesy but getting compliments on my writing means a ton to me. >w<
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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby KarKat Vantas ♋ » Tue Sep 29, 2015 10:42 am

Thank you so muck Wink!! :D
I'll take really good care of Fiskcho (:
And a big congrats to rochester.! Raeburn is a beautiful name 0<0 I'm not surprised Wink chose it (:

I can't wait to RP with Fiskcho and Raeburn, Wink, (if you want) (:

And to everyone else, Your forms were all amazing (:
Good luck on future Parras!

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Edit;; I forgot to thank Kaon for the beautiful piece of art he made me (: (The really good 'mirror view' pic in the center of my form)
Thank you so much!

another edit;; Thank you so much to everyone for the art as well! (:
It's alright if it doesn't match his personality or how he is, All of it is just to lovely for me to let go :D
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Re: Nursery Batch #193 - Orphan

Postby winkatuck » Tue Oct 06, 2015 6:02 am

rochester. wrote:
Winkatuck wrote:And with that I'm proud to announce my girl's new name of Raeburn, for helping me name her a RU will be going to Rochester.! Please pm me some stuff you'd like to see and I'll see what I can do.


Thank you so much for the RU, Wink, and thanks for all the congrats, guys! I'd like to give a big congratulations to Karkat, your form was awesome, you really deserved this cutie! Everyone did a really awesome job, it was so interesting to read everyone's different interpretations of this sweetie!
Since I can't PM, I'll just tell you that I want his design to stay true to what I've written on my form, more or less: Longish hair covering his face, scarf/beanie, purple/black eyes, writing incorporated in some way, be it a pencil/pen behind the ear, ink splotches, a notebook, etc. Those are just my ideas, feel free to use any or none of them, I'm sure I can make whatever design you come up with work! Thank you so much!!


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