Deer adoptables -; hiatus

[Trollestia]

Yeah I have a very limited imagination and I'm not a good writer so I doubt I'll win xD

[astrocompass]

Hey guys, you shouldnt be so hard on yourselves. Every story is different as each person who writes them is different.
Just remember who's story is "better" is purely based on oppinion and every story can be "good" in another's eyes simply because you put effort into your writting. Trust me, the effort will always shine through.

[Concept]

Okay guys, I have something to say first off!

I mean, I know I am not the creator of this thread. But I am an artist and a writer, personally. And it really pains me to see people putting themselves down and thinking of all the things they can't do as well as everyone else. It's not even just for something as simple as getting an adoptable deer. Thinking like this... it's poisonous. To want to do something, to hope you can do it, but then to stop at the thought 'someone has done this better than I can, and there's no way I could compete with them.'

The fact is, in life, this is true. Someone has always done something better than you ever could. Someone out there designs better than I do. Someone out there writes better than I do, thinks better than I do, and has better ideas. But you cannot let knowing this stop you.

If you never try, you never fail, but you also never win.

The point is enjoying trying. Only one person can win, usually, but if you enjoy the effort you've made, and if you like the story you've created and know it is another step towards your own personal accomplishment, you will always have something worth more than winning.

And in this spirit, I announce the winner of this doe.
-Firesong-... your story really touched on something very meaningful, and I am honored to grant you possession of this doe. Cornflakes will always mean something as long as you hold her.


However, just for this set, I'm going to do something a little weird. I'm sorry, Paper. This is probably a little bit of a clutter to your thread!

But I want to prove to everyone that we read and appreciate everything given to us. So I'm going to give a small review to every person who wrote for this doe. Keep in mind I won't do this every time! But I think people really need a pick me up on this factor.

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Dragons Blood: You've got a very bold style, Dragon! The first person perspective was nice, and the way you wrote was pretty spot on when you think about the fear and confusion a deer would have when running from something completely unknown. I admit, even I was a little confused, and I'd really like to hear a bit of explanation to go along with this story, because it really interests me and I don't want to take it a way it wasn't intended. The last line is my favorite here, it really has a sense of absolution.

Miss Filly: This story is something I haven't actually seen much of around here, and you can tell that some real thought was put into describing not only the doe, but the place she was in. I could definitely get a feel for the place you were talking about! The doe, the feeling of days passing and the tenseness of not trusting and yet knowing you were doomed to one day be like the others... All in all, it was interesting, and you left it at a place where you want to know what happens next.

LostGosling: You have an amazing description style, Lost. I mean, seriously. The description of winter, the thought that went into tiny details that would effect a running animal in the cold... I've seen a lot of car-deer stuff on here, and a lot of chase scenes, but this one was just a pleasure to read. I'm happy you decided to try out for the deer, and the last three lines in your story are very, very powerful.

Mockingjay: You like fire, ne? XD Either way, you can write it! I would say the theme of this little piece is uncontrollable anger and revenge, personified in a forest fire. The idea of a deer burning is terrifying, actually, and the imagery in this is beautiful, scary, and sad. I think I would have liked to see a little more put into the explanation of what was happening, but it was definitely enjoyable as is.

-Firesong-: You do have a talent for writing, Firesong, but you might be surprised that I went into this one a little reserved on it XD I'll say that those that put meaning in their stories often overdo the message, almost beating the reader over the head with it, but thankfully you managed to slip by this juuuust squeaky-like. Honestly, the story is a little here and there, and in my own words I would say it hiccups a little. Cohesiveness would help you a lot in the long run, though you were also working with two individual stories so I can forgive it XD You know already that I love the message.

Kennet: Ah, Kennet! Quite a showing! Amazing, really, what you made. I think what I loved most about this story was the calm feeling behind it. The way you described the time after the holidays have ended, the peaceful feeling that pervades everything. And not only that, there's a large, untold story behind everything. It makes me sad, in a way, sad, but also accepting, and it makes me wonder if the old woman was part of the magic that made the toys spring to life on that night and leave the house and the child that had loved them. I could almost see it like a short, silent movie in my head, and that deserves a congratulations all on its own.

Ashwyn: I did enjoy how you made the link between the ferocity of a storm, the pain of loss, and the freedom of letting go. There's always a sense of some world much larger in your stories, a world of elemental deer and their own little relationships between one another that cause things to happen in the world at large. It's something a reader can really get into and enjoy. I think my favorite bit is the conversation between Romulus and Furtună, mostly because it gives a sense of personality for both of them without relying on an overload of description. I think you had fun with this, and for that I'm glad :3

[.Ghost.]

Concept: I couldn't have said it better myself.
Also, thank you for taking the step and give everyone a little boost about their texts, seems like it really was needed at this time. :3

And from myself..
It's horrible watching you guys talk yourself down like this all the time, doing so isn't helping you in any way.
Instead of thinking/saying "Oh, my writing will never be as good as hers or his..", turn the thinking process around instead and be proud of yourself for what you have done. No one is going to expect you to do more than you can do or will do.
Everything that I've read so far have been absolutely amazing in their own way and you have no idea how hard it is to actually pick a winner every time, because it really is.

Please stop talking yourself down about your writings, everyone have a very unique style and way of writing, you can't be exactly like someone else.
And no matter how much you whine about your texts; there's always, always someone who admire you for them, don't forget that.

[astrocompass]

Well, as I Concept and Paper have all said before.
Love yourself!
or something like that.... XD

Anywho, it's updating time! please send me all updates you need via PM regarding names and or point transactions. I can handle the deer but I need your input. Sadly I am not an accomplished Legilimens.

[.Ghost.]

-cough- Had a total brain-derp moment when updating this first, don't mind it whoever saw it.
School and commissions have been keeping me busy, sorry that it's been rather dead here. 8<

Anyway, there's a new doe up for you and you have two days to write for her. :3

[Queen Vivane]

Koi doe is very lovely I can just see her being some sort of elemental being ^-^

[.Ghost.]

Koi doe is very lovely I can just see her being some sort of elemental being ^-^

Thank you. :3
Will be interesting to read the stories for her~

[-Firesong-]

Koi doe is very lovely I can just see her being some sort of elemental being ^-^

Thank you. :3
Will be interesting to read the stories for her~

I'd put her in a pond or something. Fishie deer. She's beautiful. She looks a bit like she got hit with a bunch of paintballs to me too. Anyways, very pretty.

[Quit-]

The People Saw Her And Took Many Pictures Of Her.
"She's Amazing" Everyone Would Say.
Of Course She Was.She Was Piebald With Beautiful Red & Black Splotches.A Rare Beautiful Sight.

"1 Million" Bidded The Woman With A White Tiger- Fur Coat.
The Doe Saw What Her Future Would Become If This Woman Bought Her.Terrified,She Ran Too' The Other Side Of The Gate So` She Could No Longer Hear What The People Were Saying.No One Seemed Too' Care About Her.If She Had A Normal Coat,She Would Be Left Alone...

Later That Night, The Doe Jumped Several Times Trying Too' Get Out Of The Place.The Fair Was Shutting Down But People Were Still Riding And Playing Games.Of Course Everyone Forgot About The Doe And Went On.

Finally With A Huge Jump,She Flew Through The Gate And Ran.Too' Her Surprise,No One Noticed.Or Atleast No One Cared...
She Ran Too' The Nearest Woods.
Hopefully She Can Start Her Life Over As A Normal Peaceful Doe.
Suddenly,The Leaves Ruffled.And The Plants Began Too' Move.She Looked Up.There Stood Another Doe.She Seemed About The Same Age And Just As Much Terrified.She Was Lost From Her Herd After A Shooting From The Hunters. Silently The Two Does Accepted Each Other And Left Off Too' Find Food.After All,It Was Almost Winter.
A Bush With Strawberries Was A Delightful Dinner For Her First Time Out In The Wild.

The End.
Lol.She's Very Pretty And Beautiful I Just Had Too' Type A Story About Her.