Telicari✵Adopts

[Wolves of Rain]

Telicari #8
Name: Adela
Gender: female
Age: 6 years
Type: Coastal
Rarity: Uncommon
Gif that reminds you of this Teli: http://s8.favim.com/orig/150622/blonde- ... 842035.gif

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[size=150]Telicari #7[/size]
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Type: Southern
Rarity: Common

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Number Generated:

18

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[size=150]Telicari #7[/size]
Name:
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Type: Southern
Rarity: Common

Wait, i think i also entered for this baby?

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Telicari #9
Username: Blackberry lamb
Name: Rainze
Gender: female
Age: 4
Type: Eastern
Rarity: Common
Gif:
Extra: BUUUUUURRRPPPPPP!!!!! XD


She woke up in a small metal cage, in the back of a truck. Where am I? She tried to move, but for some reason, she couldn't. She started panicking. Why can't I move? What happened to me?. Suddenly, a human walked around the back of the truck and yelled something. Another came around, and started opening the cage. I should escape!She thought. As soon as the man opend the cage, she burst out and started running. The humans were yelling, but she didn't dare look back. I don't know what they want from me, but it sure isn't good! All of a sudden, she felt a sharp pain in her side. A dart! She tried to keep running, but she collapsed, and hit her head. A sharp pain went through her body, and she was out cold. She woke up to another Telecari nudging her in the side. "I think she's dead" he said, seemingly to himself. She tried to move, but her muscled were too sore, and her head hurt. She drifted back into a dreamless sleep. When she woke up again, she was feeling better. She stood up, and looked around. She was in another cage. The Telecari that had been poking her earlier was asleep. Shyly, she walked over to him, and sniffed him. He was green, and orange with brown spots, and about twice as big as her. Suddenly, he shifted around, and woke up. "Hey" he yelled, and bared his teeth. She quickly backed up to a corner of the cage. Now I've made him angry! She thought. Why is he angry with me? He looked around, and his eyes quickly found her. "You're alive!" He said, amazed. The Telecari just stood there. "What's your name? Mine's Fisk!" She stared at him. He talks a lot She thought. "Hello? Are you going to say anything?" She just stared. "Why aren't you saying anything?" He yelled. Angered and impatient, he jumped on top of her, flattened her to the ground, and bared his fangs. She let out a frighted squeak. Her eyes opened wide. Fisk stared at her in confusion. Suddenly, his eyes, widened. "You don't happen to be the lost Telecari, the one the zebras stole, do you?" The Telecari just looked down at her feet, then looked back up at him with a panicked look in her eyes. Suddenly, she collapsed to the ground. Fisk rushed towards her "Are you ok?" He asked, with concern in his eyes. She was laying on the ground shaking. "What happend? Can you tell me? Can you even speak? Are you ok?" She stood up, shakily and looked at him. "I...I...I ddonn't rrremembbberr annythiing!" She said, hyperventilating. "Who am I?" She whisperd, and fell to the ground.
MWAHAHAHAHA! Cliff hanger! May/may not finish it...

Blarg... Have never tried to write a story before... I feel like the plot is so guessable! DX I can continue it if you would like, i probably will anyways...
(Edit) Is there a forum topic where i can post this to get feedback of how to make it better? Have decided that i would like to continue it! I would of course, give you credit, and I will probably keep it on my adoptable thread, if that's ok? I can continue to do it here too, but i won't if it's clogging up you're thread!

[Wolves of Rain]

Yes, you entered for that one. I just posted the two closest numbers to 18. No worries ^^ I know you entered.

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Yes, you entered for that one. I just posted the two closest numbers to 18. No worries ^^ I know you entered.

Ooooohhhhhhh, ok! Also, would it be ok if i continued my story in the previous post? I might get kinda long though...

[Wolves of Rain]

As much as you want

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As much as you want

Yay!

[Wolves of Rain]

Telicari #9
Username: Blackberry lamb
Name: Rainze
Gender: female
Age: 4
Type: Eastern
Rarity: Common
Gif:
Extra: BUUUUUURRRPPPPPP!!!!! XD


She woke up in a small metal cage, in the back of a truck. Where am I? She tried to move, but for some reason, she couldn't. She started panicking. Why can't I move? What happened to me?. Suddenly, a human walked around the back of the truck and yelled something. Another came around, and started opening the cage. I should escape!She thought. As soon as the man opend the cage, she burst out and started running. The humans were yelling, but she didn't dare look back. I don't know what they want from me, but it sure isn't good! All of a sudden, she felt a sharp pain in her side. A dart! She tried to keep running, but she collapsed, and hit her head. A sharp pain went through her body, and she was out cold. She woke up to another Telecari nudging her in the side. "I think she's dead" he said, seemingly to himself. She tried to move, but her muscled were too sore, and her head hurt. She drifted back into a dreamless sleep. When she woke up again, she was feeling better. She stood up, and looked around. She was in another cage. The Telecari that had been poking her earlier was asleep. Shyly, she walked over to him, and sniffed him. He was green, and orange with brown spots, and about twice as big as her. Suddenly, he shifted around, and woke up. "Hey" he yelled, and bared his teeth. She quickly backed up to a corner of the cage. Now I've made him angry! She thought. Why is he angry with me? He looked around, and his eyes quickly found her. "You're alive!" He said, amazed. The Telecari just stood there. "What's your name? Mine's Fisk!" She stared at him. He talks a lot She thought. "Hello? Are you going to say anything?" She just stared. "Why aren't you saying anything?" He yelled. Angered and impatient, he jumped on top of her, flattened her to the ground, and bared his fangs. She let out a frighted squeak. Her eyes opened wide. Fisk stared at her in confusion. Suddenly, his eyes, widened. "You don't happen to be the lost Telecari, the one the zebras stole, do you?" The Telecari just looked down at her feet, then looked back up at him with a panicked look in her eyes. Suddenly, she collapsed to the ground. Fisk rushed towards her "Are you ok?" He asked, with concern in his eyes. She was laying on the ground shaking. "What happend? Can you tell me? Can you even speak? Are you ok?" She stood up, shakily and looked at him. "I...I...I ddonn't rrremembbberr annythiing!" She said, hyperventilating. "Who am I?" She whisperd, and fell to the ground.
MWAHAHAHAHA! Cliff hanger! May/may not finish it...

Blarg... Have never tried to write a story before... I feel like the plot is so guessable! DX I can continue it if you would like, i probably will anyways...
(Edit) Is there a forum topic where i can post this to get feedback of how to make it better? Have decided that i would like to continue it! I would of course, give you credit, and I will probably keep it on my adoptable thread, if that's ok? I can continue to do it here too, but i won't if it's clogging up you're thread!

Congrats! You may continue it here if you like. I have not seen a writers thread(I haven't searched either) but I can give you a few pointers myself:
1. It's always good to get practice. Revision is always good.
2. Paragraphs make it easier for the reader to read as well as can help set a cliffhanger.
3. Spell-checking and rereading your work is key to make sure there are fewer mistakes and to make it sound better.
4. Stretching out a story allows for more thoughts and makes it easier to follow the plot.
5. When writing a story, make sure you are reading in between! Just reading extends knowledge of vocabulary and can help develop a writing style and structure.

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Ah, thankyou! I am busy this week, so writing will have to wait until the weekend ;-;