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Name: Stormshade
Gender: Male
Clan: Thunderclan
Rank: Young Warrior
Personality/Skills: Stormshade is very bold and a strong fighter. He is quiet and calm usually, but once and a while he can get a little rambunctious. He is very loyal to his clan, and soft tempered. He has a issue with vanity and is quite a flirt with all the she-cats within his clan. Despite this he is well liked in the clan and is regarded somewhat highly. Stormshade is very proud ignorant and ambitious in certain areas, but in contrast he can also be very gentle sweet and selfless. He is very skilled hunter, and he is quite skilled at sneeking around also. He likes to plan ahead and is very tactical and intelligent, but he does not let his thinking hinder is action.
Important Notes: His halfbrother is Stonestrike.
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Name: Stonestrike
Gender:Male
Clan:RiverClan
Rank: Warrior
Personality/Skills: StoneStrike is a very mysterious cat. He is a couple moons older than Stormshade and is a halfclan cat unlike Stormshade. Stonestrike is a friendly cat but can be dangerous at times. He has a temper that is easily provoked. He is very humble and sometimes brutally honest. He prefers solitude and quite rather than noise, which is very unusual because he is the clan most proficient and skilled warrior even thoug he looks odd and out of place among the sleek riverclan cats. He is quick and full of wit and determination. He hardly thinks before he acts and this can sometimes cause any problems. He is a dreamer and a do-er he hates sitting and waiting patiently.
Important Notes: Nope
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Name: Russetflame
Gender: Male
Clan: TC
Rank: Deputy
Personality/Skills: Russetflame is a noble and courageous cat. He is selfless and put his clan before his own needs sometimes to a uneeded extent, such as starving himself or not resting. He is very loyal and dettermined to do his best. Russetflame is a sharp hunter with a keen sense of smell, and exceptional hearing. He does his best to avoid unneeded conflicts between TC and the other Clans. He is obedient and gentle, but sometimes he can be a it of a control freak. He is patient and careful, sometimes painstakingly so. He fears the day when he must be leader but in a sense looks forward to it. He loves adventure and exploring and sometimes gets sidetracked by his need for adventure. He is young, strong, ambitious, slightly nieve, and very very inteligent. He is a good fighter but has a exstensive teemper that some cats call rage, but not to worry it is not easily triggered.
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Name Suggestion: Smokewhisker.
Name Reasoning: Storm- doesnt cover a tabby cat, as far as I know. It does, however, cover a cat that's dark gray; if you want to keep the prefix, you might have to change the pelt to a pure dark gray (preferably with little to no white on him). -shade does nothing to describe his skills in a positive light, nor does it imply any particular skill. What does -shade mean to a cat? This cat has a dark-furred pelt (which should be implied in prefix)? This cat is very sneaky (and possibly dangerous)? He does, however, have a notable hunting ablity - which -whisker denotes. Smoke- implies a gray cat, often a darker or lighter tabby.
Character Rating: 7/10
Character Reasoning: His personality contrasts a bit too much to make a solid character - in one instance he's bold and ambitious, and in another he's gentle and sweet. He may be better off as a cat of quiet pride, one who makes snide remarks from time to time. He might have a fragile ego, often getting angry when someone points out a flaw in his plans or his thoughts, but he may pride himself on the times he
does get it right - even going so far as to brag about it.
Name Suggestion: Cedarpelt/fur if he's not skilled at anything or Cedarclaw if he's skilled at fighting.
Name Reasoning: -strike is a bit of an oddity; if it implies skill in fighting, -claw already does this while using a cat's body part instead of an action. And as he's a tabby, Stone- doesn't fit him all that well. I'm not sure if "most proficient and skilled warrior" would denote a skill in fighting; a good warrior is one that can fight well, or track well, or sprint well, or what-have you as long as they take care of their kin. To say he's the most skilled would make me ask what he's particularly skilled at! Cedar- implies a dark brown tabby, while -claw implies a skilled fighter; -pelt and -fur are only for if he's got no notable trait or skills.
Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: He's a little inconsistent, as his half-brother is. He can't really be humble and friendly one moment while being dangerous and aggressive the nest - in fact, an aggressive cat in a Clan is a big no-no and being violent towards Clanmates would earn him the ultimatum of "leave or be chill". I think he works just fine as a cat who's humble, modest, honest, and selfless, but I suggest you remove the aggressive trait and invoke in him a sense of being a thorn in the side, a cat who needs to prove himself in order to actually be worth the Clan's trust. He may go to lengths to keep his Clan safe and be as humble as he is because he desires the approval of others.
Name Suggestion: Russetwhisker.
Name Reasoning: Russet- works fine for a dark ginger tabby, but -flame doesn't work. -flame can imply a cat has a rash attitude, a destructive nature, or that he's simply a ""trailblazer"" - but this makes the suffix unclear and unhelpful in traditionalism. As a sharp hunter, and one that's more than likely skilled at such a task, he earns -whisker.
Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: You may be better off removing the nigh-unnotable anger he may feel, as it's not a common occurrence and it's not worth noting if it's not something that he tends to have. He may be selfless to the Clan and obedient to a point of not questioning his leader's actions, but he may also be very serious about his duties and may be a bit petty when it comes to who he protects; he may not want to help cats that he views as cowardly, or cats that he thinks are untrustable, and may give them a harder time than most.