~Breezewind~ wrote:Clan Name: SunClan/TreeClan
Territory: A oak forest with a river and a cliff/Pine forest with a twoleg abandoned warehouse.
Notable History: Once there were two siblings, Sun and Tree, Sun, a she-cat and Tree,a tom. Since there kin died a pack of rouges took them in but they fought constantly. StarClan stopped them and then then the clans were born. Sunstar leaded SunClan and Treestar leaded TreeClan.
Unique Skills: SunClan cats are balanced fighters and hunters./TreeClan cats are scrawny because they focus more on fighting then hunting and other skills.
Reputation/Personality: SunClan cats are brave and loyal./ TreeClan cats are brave and confident.
Average Clan Member: Average clan cat in SunClan is a decent hunter and is very loyal./ TreeClan cats are confident and want to make there clan have power.
Important Notes: (Cut to decrease space-taking of post. Don't worry, I looked over the pictures carefully)
SunClanName Rating: 6/10
Name Reasoning: I never personally subscribed to the whole "naming a Clan after its founder" thing. The reason is because cats, even founders, are very temporary beings. They're only around for so long, and long after they're gone the Clan will still exist. It's kind of like defacing a public wall - now everyone knows that "Jack was here", but who is Jack? Why should we care who he was?
Meanwhile, the territory doesn't look sunny at all. Cats from the outside won't know that the founder's name was Sun - all they'll see is a forest, not a sunny hill or something similar. A Clan's name needs to mark out who they are, and where they live. That's the purpose of a name in the warrior cat world, to show what kind of cat you are or what kind of Clan you live in.
And finally, the sun, moon and stars are sacred things for warriors. The stars are for StarClan, the moon is their way of communication, and the sun is a mark of time and a celestial body. Naming your Clan MoonClan or SunClan is putting yourself at the same level as StarClan, which is incredibly arrogant.
Alternative Name: OakClan. They are in an oak forest, after all, and they ought to be named for their territory.
Clan Rating: 5/10
Clan Reasoning: A basic requirement is to be loyal and brave if you're a warrior. Without that, you don't belong in a Clan. Along with that, being confident is also a necessity. Without that, you can't defend your territory or your prey. Being balanced is fine, but there should be some deviation if they have a neighboring Clan - differences in beliefs, tactics and behaviors are what separates one from another, after all.
I want to add something about the territory, and that's that oak trees are big.
Really really big. The majority of oak trees I've seen are little clusters with grassland in between. They can be in forests, but do mind exactly how large these trees are, and how that affects the cats.
Suggestions: Focus on the size of these trees, and what kind of prey is there. Cats who spend a lot of time hunting or climbing will be lean and agile, with short fur to keep from getting it tangled. They're likely to be good at sneaking around, and prefer to be higher up in the trees so they can see what's going on. Maybe they don't fight too much, but they have muscle built up from years of climbing. They could be a little pious, claiming that they are closer to StarClan because they're always high in the trees.
TreeClanName Rating: 5/10
Name Reasoning: As well as what's been stated about naming cats after founders, both Clans are in tree territory. Both of them. I don't think I have anything else to really say, so let's just do the name suggestion.
Alternative Name: PineClan. They live in a pine forest, and that's a lot more fitting.
Clan Rating: 6/10
Clan Reasoning: The main problem I have is the basic description of the cats. Cats who spend a lot of time fighting are bound to be huge, not scrawny. They would probably be able to bring down bigger prey, such as large birds or rabbits, and that would definitely keep the Clan healthy.
I'll just quickly rehash what I said about SunClan: any Clan cat wants to be secure (powerful), brave and loyal. Just like being a decent human being, it's a basic requirement of the world. You don't get a reward for wanting your Clan to be strong and healthy.
Suggestions: I would make them big cats, like I said earlier, that take down bit prey. They probably gloat about being able to scare off foxes and badgers, and maybe be a little vain, too; keeping their fur groomed so they look extra good. They could lurk around the borders, watching for any trouble makers (read: any cat that happens to catch a squirrel a fox-length away from the border), and preen and pose to intimidate. Of course, outsiders would probably know them as "that one really vain troupe of cats", but who cares what loners think, just so long as they keep their paws away from Tree/PineClan?