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by daz » Fri Mar 01, 2013 9:22 am
WHOO! EPIC!
It reminds me of TJOC... with Light Shade being the one to save the world, then Christa... y'all should really read my book. (lol)
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by Rebel Faery » Sat Mar 02, 2013 6:16 am
AWESOMESAUCEEPICNESSICANTBREATHEITWASSOOOOOGOODINAFLIPPIN'CAN!
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I've decided it's time to move on, and so I've quit CS. It's been a good three years, but, well, as of May 2014, I don't think I'll be coming back. I'd like to say thank you, to all of you. Thank you for encouraging me, inspiring me, and being my friends. I've had so much fun, but this is the end. Seeing as this is my last visit, I've changed my username back to the original, Rebel Faery. It's a name that I no longer go by, but a name I'll always remember. I'm so sorry to every fan of TIAJNAD, to everyone that read my writing, to, well, everyone. But it's time to move on. To make like Elsa and let it go. (I was still on CS when Frozen came out. It feels like so long ago.)
let it go, let it go, and I'll rise like the break of dawn
let it go, let it go, that perfect girl is gone
here I'll stand, and here I'll stay
let the storm rage on
the cold never bothered me anyway
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by • DEFY THE CAPITOL • » Sun Mar 03, 2013 8:14 am
I'm Already Torn wrote:That was so awesome!! It was so sentimental between Amy and Jenette, but it also had funny parts in it as well. I loved it!
Thanks!

Rockfire wrote:AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME JF LOVED IT
On another note YAY THE SPIDER IS GONE!!!
lol, thank you!
Mento. wrote:WHOO! EPIC!
It reminds me of TJOC... with Light Shade being the one to save the world, then Christa... y'all should really read my book. (lol)
Where was that part (in your book [i forgot :p])?
.:Invisi:. wrote:AWESOMESAUCEEPICNESSICANTBREATHEITWASSOOOOOGOODINAFLIPPIN'CAN!
I actually understood that. XD Thanks, Rebel!

Will try and write an entry soon!
"The game is
coming to its end."
"Our future starts
tomorrow at dawn."
"Snow has to pay
for what he's done."
"Our lives were
never ours. They
belong to Snow,
and our deaths
do too. But if you
kill him, if you
end all of this,
all those deaths
mean something."
"Tonight, turn your
weapons to the
Capitol! Turn your
weapons to Snow!"
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by bubiza » Mon Mar 04, 2013 4:35 am
Hi.
I've been reading through some of your stuff, and it's alright. However, there are a few grammatical issues here and there, such as full stops when there should be commas. In addition to this, I think that you could describe the characters/setting etc. in a bit more detail, as they are quite shallow and don't really offer much depth. The general plot is also cliche, so it would be nice to see something slightly more original in the future. I also find some of the text colours quite hard to read, so it would be better if they were in darker colours.
However, since the first installment, your writing skills have improved quite a bit, especially your grammar. You still have quite a lot of work to go, but eventually you'll get there. Just carry on writing and improving, and soon your work will be high quality.
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by • DEFY THE CAPITOL • » Mon Mar 04, 2013 6:35 am
castiel wrote:Hi.
I've been reading through some of your stuff, and it's alright. However, there are a few grammatical issues here and there, such as full stops when there should be commas. In addition to this, I think that you could describe the characters/setting etc. in a bit more detail, as they are quite shallow and don't really offer much depth. The general plot is also cliche, so it would be nice to see something slightly more original in the future. I also find some of the text colours quite hard to read, so it would be better if they were in darker colours.
However, since the first installment, your writing skills have improved quite a bit, especially your grammar. You still have quite a lot of work to go, but eventually you'll get there. Just carry on writing and improving, and soon your work will be high quality.
Hi,
Thanks so much for your input (and for putting it nicely)! Before I barely knew anything about commas, and now I'm starting to finally get the hang of it, I think. And things will be quite a bit different in the next few books, I think. And yeah, I run out of text colors often for the new characters, so it's hard to find new ones that aren't bright...
And thank you! I know I'm not excellent right now (far from it, I'm sure), but I was rather hoping that I was improving...
Thanks again for your advise! I will be sure to take it to heart!!
"The game is
coming to its end."
"Our future starts
tomorrow at dawn."
"Snow has to pay
for what he's done."
"Our lives were
never ours. They
belong to Snow,
and our deaths
do too. But if you
kill him, if you
end all of this,
all those deaths
mean something."
"Tonight, turn your
weapons to the
Capitol! Turn your
weapons to Snow!"
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by • DEFY THE CAPITOL • » Mon Mar 04, 2013 8:19 am
Rockfire wrote:JF when shall we get more????
Hopefully soon! I need to shower in a few minutes, and then I'm going to try and convince my dad to take me to an archery store...
New avatars:

(made by MegaCherrio)
"The game is
coming to its end."
"Our future starts
tomorrow at dawn."
"Snow has to pay
for what he's done."
"Our lives were
never ours. They
belong to Snow,
and our deaths
do too. But if you
kill him, if you
end all of this,
all those deaths
mean something."
"Tonight, turn your
weapons to the
Capitol! Turn your
weapons to Snow!"
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