{Uᴍʙʀᴀ} . {Rᴇᴀᴅ ᴀɴᴅ ᴄʀɪᴛɪǫᴜᴇ!}

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This is going to influence the outcome of the story. Which do you prefer?

Happy endings
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Sad endings
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Total votes : 11

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Postby Akela~ » Mon Dec 31, 2012 11:13 am

Whoa, I want more. The wya you describe things is amazing, and the story catches your interest immediately. I want to know where Rain is from, and what the heck Umbra means and why the gods are angry, and god I am stalking this forum. ;) :thumbup:
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Postby spiff » Mon Dec 31, 2012 11:25 am

Thank you so much! I have plenty of things in mind for this story, so I hope it keeps you guys interested all the way to the end. :3
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Postby indebted » Mon Dec 31, 2012 12:44 pm

{{Too beautiful! I love this story already. When I first read your description thing on Inklings, I was like, eh cliche-y, And then I'm like, most. epic. thing. ever.
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Postby Akela~ » Mon Dec 31, 2012 1:02 pm

Lol. I know right. EPICNESSS.
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Postby spiff » Mon Dec 31, 2012 3:40 pm

Aw, I'm glad you gave it a try and liked it! <3

May I ask, what about it made you think it was cliche? Just so I can avoid it in the future.
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Postby Nellas » Wed Jan 02, 2013 9:49 am

Oh. My goodness. I'm so glad to have discovered this, Rage! <33
The first paragraph was all it took to get me hooked ^^
And chapter one, well, I can't wait for more! You have beautiful sensory details as always and I suppose you want criticsm but I have none c:
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Postby spiff » Wed Jan 02, 2013 10:13 am

Thank you so much, Nellas! You have no idea how much this praise means to me when it comes from a writer like you. I hope you enjoy Chapter Two, which I'm aiming to have up by next week. <333
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Postby Nellas » Wed Jan 02, 2013 10:26 am

Aww, shush that Rage ^^ I'm not nearly as good as you, I could only hope to be! c: And I know Chapter Two will not disappoint me <333
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Postby suzhay » Wed Jan 02, 2013 10:31 am

I agree with some of the other comments. That first paragraph was amazing. I agree with everything Nellas said. I am waiting for chapter two and that is saying something because I normally don't go for wolf books. Great job! On my imaginary(^_^) scale, you get a 19.5/20!
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Postby spiff » Wed Jan 02, 2013 10:53 am

Talk about piling on the pressure, Nellas. I'll try my best!

And suzhay, I'm glad my story managed to pull you in even though it is about wolves. C:
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