[The Lost soul]

yeah, sure! glad you like it! once I'm done, I might go back, smooth the grammar and spelling, check I got everything right....but it might take a long time for that to happen. Xp

[TheCalicoTabby]

Alright. ^^ I'm setting up that part of the thread now--can I link to this as a work in progress, or would you prefer I wait until it's done?

[The Lost soul]

do what you like, whatever you feel you wanna do, you do it, it is your species.

[TheCalicoTabby]

It's your story, though. C:
I've linked to it for now, just so the writing section of the thread isn't blank. I can take it down if you change your mind.

[The Lost soul]

shweet, thanks! enjoy as you read, and tell me if oyu see any grammatical errors I'm missing.... I don't need people thinking I'm bad at english.

[TheCalicoTabby]

One thing, after reading the newest part; I think the word you're looking for is "reeking", as in smelling bad, rather than "wreaking", as in "wreaking havoc". Easy mistake to make, since they sound exactly the same. ^^

Also, the crying--this is entirely my fault for forgetting to include this, but kartheans don't cry when they're upset or in pain. Well, not tears, at least--they would probably make some crying/whimpering sounds. They only cry tears if there's something in their eyes--for them tears aren't associated with emotion.

[The Lost soul]

ugh.... curse you spell check!!!!!!!


and I'll modify the crying.

[TheCalicoTabby]

Spell check is awesome until you're using the wrong word and it doesn't tell you. x3 I can't count how many times I've misspelled definitely and had spell check correct it to defiantly. x3
And alright, thanks. ^^

[The Lost soul]

well, I've got to get to finishing stuff up, cheerio!

[TheCalicoTabby]

The story's looking good! ^^
I added a section to the information thread on gestures and expressions; I thought you might be interested in reading it. Might help with the story a bit. C: