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[Shiko Hayashi]

I'm stressing over the Mystery Rune too. I don't know how to improve my story without over-doing it, unless I restart, but whenever I restart something, I always get writers block... then I can't go back to my previous idea, due to the fact that I've already forgot. I'm really happy with the name, but it doesn't seem to.... POP for the rune..... So, may I have some crit too? My form's on the first page.....

Your stories not bad, but it could use a bit of work. It seems to rush a bit too much. As if you just wanted to get the story done. Maybe add a bit more detail to it? If it goes over the limit though, don't worry about it. Just keep hope in your work.

[Dr. Paine]

I'm just re-doing my story once I get home, the limit just kills what I was originally going to do xD

[Sculi the Ax]

I'm stressing over the Mystery Rune too. I don't know how to improve my story without over-doing it, unless I restart, but whenever I restart something, I always get writers block... then I can't go back to my previous idea, due to the fact that I've already forgot. I'm really happy with the name, but it doesn't seem to.... POP for the rune..... So, may I have some crit too? My form's on the first page.....

Your stories not bad, but it could use a bit of work. It seems to rush a bit too much. As if you just wanted to get the story done. Maybe add a bit more detail to it? If it goes over the limit though, don't worry about it. Just keep hope in your work.

Yeah.... at first I did it in a word doc.... so I went past the "limit" and had to delete all sorts of stuff... my computer decided that it didn't want to charge, and almost died before I got the chance to save it. The ENTIRE thing (which was three pages long before condensing happened) took me four hours..... so now I have to pack three pages into three paragraphs etc etc..... I guess I just am struggling to do so ><

[Shiko Hayashi]

I did something like that before. I was told to write a summary, and it ended up being four pages long.
X'D

Any chance I can get critique on my form as well?

[Temperance.]

Thank-you all so much for the feedback, makes me feel really happy and gives me lots of varied opinions to help me come to a conclusion XDDD

[center][I love your short, little story. It's soo sweet and it made me giggle when Falanon fainted. I could just imagine it. I wish there was more! I love it. ^^ And yush, it is a little cheesy, but in a cute, amusing kind of a way. :3]

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Hahahahaha thanks Azure <333 I had hoped that it would be engaging enough to make the reader want more but....I wasn't sure if it accomplished that XD I normally do very gloomy and dark stories, so this was more of a comical thing for me, and it feels weird to write something like that XDDD Still, I'm glad you thought it was funny, and I just totally imagined Falanon fainting at the announcement so it seemed appropriate lol.

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I personally love the beginning of your story. It's short, sweet, and I absolutely adore the detail.
Where the pregnancy thing was a definite kick, it wasn't a bad one. Just a little unexpected.

I think maybe you should reserve her pregnancy for later, in case you want to build on that story? Maybe make it so she yearns for a child, and is hoping that the Mystery Egg can fulfill this yearning? Just an idea.

I might change mine too. It seems a bit too long. But I really like the direction of it.

I'm glad ^^ I love starting out with tons of detail. Actually, I originally had a single paragraph that was nearly as long as all three combined, so I had to cut it down and in the process eliminate many more detailed parts, I couldn't bear to part with my initial beginning though, so I just kept it as is and continued from there XD Glad you liked it. Hmmm yes, it was meant to be unexpected, but with foreshadowing as well so once she announces it everything from earlier kind of makes sense XD

Well, I'm not 100% sure if you're on the Rune Dragon offsite forum, but there's an RP on there called 'Siphon' and my character is the daughter of Falanon and Kat, so I thought it would be suitable to do a little tidbit about that here XD Basically, once I've created my rune dragon thread I plan on having it link to an archive with all the stories/adventures that I plan on writing for them. Which would include a nice long story about all of this in greater detail. That being said I really like your idea of making it a yearning thing, because that is something in alinement with Kat's character.

Thank-you for the suggestion, I have a feeling I'll be tweaking my story XD

I did something like that before. I was told to write a summary, and it ended up being four pages long.
X'D

Any chance I can get critique on my form as well?

I'll do it!!! -runs off to read-[/center]

[Shiko Hayashi]

Glad you liked it.

And I see what you mean. That would definitely add a twist to your form.
Unfortunately, I don't own a Rune yet, so I haven't been on that forum. I'm hoping little Absinthe is my first.

Thanks!

[Ashenjay]

Another Faloin art ><

[zacherie]

Awwh, how adorable! :3 Faolin is so cute! I love how she's all serene and under the stars.. <333

and can anyone give feedback on my story? Lolol, they are very long paragraphs, so if anyone can help me shorten them/give me critique, I'd much appreciate it <33

[Verdana]

Hello everyone. Trying to be more active in the fanclub. It would be much, much easier if I wasn't writing prelims.

On the subject of critiquing stories, can anyone do mine? I need help, I think >.<

It's on page 3, almost on the bottom.

I love the colours and the rune so much. :3

[Twisted_Swallow]

Hi guys!! Would anyone mind to take a look at my thissle rune form and give some crit?