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by RαrєHuskíєs » Sun Jul 31, 2011 5:25 pm
I must say, your forms are well put together; but I would suggest you punctuate correctly, such as capitalizing in the correct spots, and also, making complete sentences. Another thing, I would suggest spelling correctly, for when spelling is even slight mistaken, it can seem sloppy sometimes, and maybe adding more to teh form parts. Don't get me wrong, your forms are quite splendid, and there's not too much I would change. :3 Hope I helped.
“𝙳𝚘𝚐𝚜 𝚍𝚒𝚎. 𝙱𝚞𝚝 𝚍𝚘𝚐𝚜 𝚕𝚒𝚟𝚎, 𝚝𝚘𝚘. 𝚁𝚒𝚐𝚑𝚝 𝚞𝚙 𝚞𝚗𝚝𝚒𝚕 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚢 𝚍𝚒𝚎, 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚢 𝚕𝚒𝚟𝚎. 𝚃𝚑𝚎𝚢 𝚕𝚒𝚟𝚎 𝚋𝚛𝚊𝚟𝚎, 𝚋𝚎𝚊𝚞𝚝𝚒𝚏𝚞𝚕 𝚕𝚒𝚟𝚎𝚜. 𝚃𝚑𝚎𝚢 𝚙𝚛𝚘𝚝𝚎𝚌𝚝 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚒𝚛 𝚏𝚊𝚖𝚒𝚕𝚒𝚎𝚜. 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚕𝚘𝚟𝚎 𝚞𝚜. 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚖𝚊𝚔𝚎 𝚘𝚞𝚛 𝚕𝚒𝚟𝚎𝚜 𝚊 𝚕𝚒𝚝𝚝𝚕𝚎 𝚋𝚛𝚒𝚐𝚑𝚝𝚎𝚛. 𝙰𝚗𝚍 𝚝𝚑𝚎𝚢 𝚍𝚘𝚗'𝚝 𝚠𝚊𝚜𝚝𝚎 𝚝𝚒𝚖𝚎 𝚋𝚎𝚒𝚗𝚐 𝚊𝚏𝚛𝚊𝚒𝚍 𝚘𝚏 𝚝𝚘𝚖𝚘𝚛𝚛𝚘𝚠.”
― 𝙳𝚊𝚗 𝙶𝚎𝚖𝚎𝚒𝚗𝚑𝚊𝚛𝚝
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by KittyStripes » Thu Aug 04, 2011 2:46 pm
This is a critique for Tanner
Who the critique is for: Tanner
What you had to say about it: I think the story is lovey. I enjoyed the first drawing, too, but I didn't like the second one too much. The way the hoof is facing makes it look like it's leg is on sideways. ( just barely. ) I just don't like the second picture, but I think that's just me. Might I say, I like the title.
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by Sapphirescript » Fri Aug 05, 2011 10:58 am
KittyStripes wrote: This is a critique for Tanner
Who the critique is for: Tanner
What you had to say about it: I think the story is lovey. I enjoyed your drawings, too, but I didn't like the second one too much. The way the hoof is facing makes it look like it's leg is on sideways. ( just barely. ) I just don't like the second picture, but I think that's just me. Might I say, I like the title.
I just wanted to say the first drawing is by BlackHorseBeth and the second one is a lineart from CS. Tanner didn't draw them.
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by KittyStripes » Sun Aug 07, 2011 12:59 pm
Tasha999 wrote:KittyStripes wrote: This is a critique for Tanner
Who the critique is for: Tanner
What you had to say about it: I think the story is lovey. I enjoyed your drawings, too, but I didn't like the second one too much. The way the hoof is facing makes it look like it's leg is on sideways. ( just barely. ) I just don't like the second picture, but I think that's just me. Might I say, I like the title.
I just wanted to say the first drawing is by BlackHorseBeth and the second one is a lineart from CS. Tanner didn't draw them.
Oh. Well, I'll get rid of the first one because i dont know if blackhorsebeth wants critique on his drawings. But i'll keep the second one up. I don't like that lineart.
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by neonfrozen » Tue Aug 09, 2011 1:54 am
I would like some critique on my form please!Username: koowie
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I would like some critique on my form please!Username: koowie
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