The Silver Lining Adoption Place (CLOSED FOR CD)

[Cobalt_Core]

Name:pernelle
Species:equine
Kennel Number:39
Why would you like this character/What will you do for this character?:i will love her like i already do,and put her in lots of rps,books,and more
Personality:a wild mare who loves to run with the wind in her mane and the grass on her hooves she hates mean humans,and she has a VERY SERIOUS fear of fire,she can be VERY shy when it comes to meeting new pepole,but she loves to try new things.her dream is to lead her own herd her best freind comanchee often teases her about it,but she dosnt care.
History:pernelle was born in the wide open meadows of calorado,were,from the moment she could walk she loved to run with her herd espetilly her best freind ,a young colt named camanchee,and her mother.she never knew that she might lose the life she had...but she soon relised that her peace full life couuld take a turn for the worst so quickly one day she was running happily with her herd the next she was running for her life from the humans with the ropes she ecaped over the mountians with comanchee but the rest of her herd was missing. peranelle would have to go a long way to repair the lives of all those horses with only her best freind to help her..."hey,pernelle where are we going?" asked commanchee."over the mountains past the lake and as far as we have to go to find them..but traveling during the dry season could be very dangerous for a filly and a colt on their own,and pernell was not very willing to face her fear of fire..and the place they were going to had LOTS of medows and trees..this trip would be long and hard indeed...they began there long trip past the mountains,"i hate climing!" comanche neighed,"me too.."peranelle responded.comanchee ran ahead of her."hey...slow *pant* down comanchee!" peranelle neighed,a loud rumbleing noise met her ears,"comanchee,what are you..."peranelle winned,when she looked up she saw comanchee skidding down the mountain twords her,"ROCK SLIDE!!!" he brayed......(w.i.p if it needs to be better!)
Other:likes:running,flowers,comanchee,her herd,rain,the wind in her mane. Dislikes:humans,rope,weeds,fire.
Durpidee

[kartharon]

^^^ You should make your form a bit more descriptive if you want to get this horse. Try adding more detail to your story, tell us her likes and dislikes, is she picky about certain stuff, or does she have a secret that no one knows? What is her friend's name, where are they going to find the rest of the herd, exc. Stuff like this can make an awesome form.

[Solanum]

What I also take into account is the formatting. Try doing something different with the text, changing the size, making it centered, perhaps colour or a picture?

[orange.c y r u s♥]

-Name-
Sparks

-Species-
fennec fox

-Gender-
male

-Age-
2 years

-Kennel Number-
29

-Why would you like this character/What will you do for this character?-
Of course he will be spoiled rotten with artwork. He will have a spot on my character thread.
You might even see some art of him throughout the thread and CS board. He is a dashing
little fellow and for that I find him very easy to make story or arts for, and so on.

-Personality-
-History-
-Other-

WIP
Durpidee

[Cobalt_Core]

updated mine! hope its better!! i love pernelle so i hope its good! <3

[Darkest.Nation]

Hm... maybe more of a personality?

[FallenFromStBarts]

You might want to expand your form. The minimum for history is three paragraphs. Try using more descriptive language. What the character can see, taste, touch, smell. You know? Maybe describe what happened one time when she went on an 'epic adventure?' What do you mean by this?
She stepped on a pebble or she fought a dragon? We don't know unless you tell us ^^

I added a bit more. Is this good enough?

[Cobalt_Core]

updated it agin! i hope i did MUTCH better this time!

[kivr & fireflii]

updated it agin! i hope i did MUTCH better this time!

You don't need to let us know if you updated. :3

[Solanum]

I think it could still do with a little more work. Try using more descriptive language. How she runs, the wind on her neck, ruffling her mane, the dust in her eyes. It's the little details that really spice up the writing. There is no point in having a skeleton without all the little bones clicking into place.