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The Beautiful Eriat <3

Postby Africa. » Tue Jul 12, 2011 4:40 am

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The vortex takes on similar appearances as it did for Temur, only this time instead of fiery colors the hues swirling through it are cool blues and violets. When the light diminishes a female counterpart to Temur appears, her name Eriat. She moves with a serene grace as she pads from the vortex swinging her head from side to side as she takes in her surroundings. She is mild mannered and curious, harboring no hard feelings to what her brother called 'two-leggers'. Truth be told, she was actually rather fond of the beings and was fascinated by their ways.

"Hello?" she called, swishing her tail lightly.

The Maroon Horned Cat-thing friend who introduced you to Ahzen informs you that her name is Eriat.


Gender: Female
Element: Gas
Likes: Exploring
Dislikes: Straight-forwardness


Judging will be on July 11th.


My gaze was simply awe-struck as I stepped closer to what this male called himself, an Ahzenai. I listened closely to him, intruiged by this new world. I couldn't help but wonder whom, other then myself, had stumbled upon this place, upon these magnificent, aluring creatures. I lifted my head, eager to ask this question, but the Ahzenai had left me. Gone like the wind, that Ahzenai had been timeless, a treasure to find and a memory to keep.

My milky brown eyes swept over the equally magnificent home of these sarced creatures. The pools of water, the stones that dotted the place, a bridge-like thing that brought Ahxenai across the small river. It was absolutely breathtaking. But the sight of this beautiful land was nothing compared to the moment were my eyes landed upon a different Ahzenai. Yes, she was different in the sense of I've never seen her before, but at this time, that sense is far from what I speak of now. To me, she was different as in different from any other Ahzenai, despite the fact that I obviously hadn't met all of them.

She spoke to me. No, not communicating, but simply called me to her. The gas that whirled behind her, not liquid nor solid, her dark base color, and then, light. In that moment, I was taken back to my childhood, long ago, as my young eyes gazed out at the Aurora Borealis, a sight I'd long forgotten during the car accident... I lost my parents that day, as the car hit hard against a tree. But now, I found the memory of those lights, dancing across my 7-year-old face, as I watched this stunning Ahzenai. Never before had I found those memories after that fatal car accident, but looking at her, she gave me the gift that had been stolen from me. She gave me a chance to remember my parents. I can never repay her for what she did, but seeing her, I knew where to start. Everyone deserved a companion, especially this treasured young female.

With this strong effect she had on me, I found my shy attitude shining through as I gave a small little wave. "H-Hi..." A part of me felt foolish, standing here in front of Eriat, speaking to her despite not knowing whether or not she could understand me as the male had, but another part of me, a stronger part of me, felt confident in the fact that she understood. She needed to understand... I had to let her know how much that memory meant to me. "I'm Africa, but most people call me Afri... You can too, if you want. I'm a thirteen year old girl, and I live just a couple miles from here. " I was beating around the bush, and I knew it, but something about Eriats beautiful face reflected patience. Briefly, I wondered whether she were like me; a distaste toward people whom were too straight-forward, and warm toward people whom understood that life is a gift, a gift meant to cherish and last a long, healthy lifetime.

"You know... I'm not saying you need to, of course, because you don't if you don't want to... But, I-I'd... I'd really love to take you with me. On my trips, I mean. See, my grandparents and I travel a lot, all over the world! We go everywheres, warm or cold, near or far, you name it." I felt myself smiling now, something that surprised me. It had been quite some time since I'd really smiled a real, unforced smile. "I can't offer you gifts like others can, and I know that, but I can offer you the world. China, France, Spain, we'll go anywheres. In fact... We're going to see the Aurora Borealis in a few weeks time." If I'd been surprised by my smile, it was nothing compared to the surprise I portrayed as I felt a salty tear slide down my cheek. Before seeing Eriat, I hadn't even realized how signifigant this trip to the Northern Lights really was. "You should come with us... It could be the first trip of many." I was whispering now, that same smile still lingering on my features, those same tears still clouding my eyes as I tried to hold them, even at the thought of my parents. I didn't explain how much I really needed her to be there, how strongly I felt that I needed to repay her, or how special and treasured she already was to me, but all of this was explained through me eyes. Through and through, I was truly my fathers daughter; Neither of us could ever hide our true meanings, having eyes that spoke so clearly that we didn't have to. And so, now, it was my eyes that spoke, and I wouldn't have stopped them if I could.

With these words, I slowly got to my feet, brushing off my jeans lightly before quietly backing away, facing Eriat the entire time. "Of course, I don't want to be your owner, Eriat, because I don't like the thought of someone owning someone else. I just want to be your friend, you equal. I really do." And so I waited. But instead of waiting at her side like all the others probably had, I backed all the way to just outside the entrance to the cave. She needed to know that her options were always open, never closed, and this was my gesture to show it. Not much, no, but this was me, being who I am with Eriat, the one that I hope to one day know just as much as I know myself. This is me, this is her, and hopefully, soon, this will be us.


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Alright, so I hope I didn't totally screw up on this x3 But, at least this was entertaining to write <3 I haven't written something without being WB, but I didn't feel like that on this, so it was actually fun rather than feeling like a chore x3 Anyways, good luck judging <3 I'd hate to have your job xD
Last edited by Africa. on Tue Jul 12, 2011 7:58 am, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: {Ahzenai} MLV Customs CLOSED

Postby Onyxeva » Tue Jul 12, 2011 5:06 am

Looks perfect. <3 Good job. 8D
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Re: {Ahzenai} MLV Customs CLOSED

Postby Africa. » Tue Jul 12, 2011 5:35 am

Thanks <3 I'm glad I did something right today x3 But I'm not really done; I'll probably tweak it a bit here and there, but its at least suitable for judging ;)
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Re: {Ahzenai} MLV Customs CLOSED

Postby tolkien quitting » Tue Jul 12, 2011 6:07 am

Dammit! Missed MLV customs =(
@Africa- Awww maannn! Your story blows mine into tiny chunks of failure.... It think your gonna get Eriat
yo
im gonna tell u
my evil plan
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Re: {Ahzenai} MLV Customs CLOSED

Postby Africa. » Tue Jul 12, 2011 6:11 am

D'aww <3 Thats so sweet ^^ But trust me, it doesn't blow yours to tiny chunks of failure x3 Besides, you have that knife, remember? I can't afford any wooing things xD
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Re: {Ahzenai} MLV Customs CLOSED

Postby RainbowBizkit <3 » Tue Jul 12, 2011 6:25 am

;_; Africa your form was so good your totally gonna win mine is failure compared to your epic form.
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"I was sick of restrictions sick of the boundaries about to close the door
Such a lack of conviction no real connection what should I settle for
But you caught my attention you built on the tension and you left me wanting more
Now I don't know what to do with myself do with myself I don't want nobody else"
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Re: {Ahzenai} MLV Customs CLOSED

Postby Africa. » Tue Jul 12, 2011 6:30 am

Guys, my form really isn't that good x3 To be honest, I had absolutely no structure in this form, I was really just winging it on spot xD Plus, both of you own those silver knives or whatever they were... Aren't those in the highest-valued wooing catagory? I can't afford that, so you two definitely own that over me x3 Besides, the key to success is being positive ;)
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Re: {Ahzenai} MLV Customs CLOSED

Postby Cromwell » Tue Jul 12, 2011 6:30 am

*Sniffle tear* that was beautiful to read Africa
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Re: {Ahzenai} Judging Tonight; finish your entries~

Postby Africa. » Tue Jul 12, 2011 6:39 am

Whutt? O.O I'm really quite confused by all this x3 I'm not exactly used to getting compliments on my writing... At all x3 But thanks everyone <3 I'm glad to see your enjoying it ^^ It was quite fun to write <3

Mmm, maybe I'll go read the other forms <3 Not much I need to do, so I'll go check them out ^^ I'm sure they'll be great fun to read <3
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Re: {Ahzenai} Judging Tonight; finish your entries~

Postby Onyxeva » Tue Jul 12, 2011 6:49 am

o uo-b they are~

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