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[Official-Enjolras]

I would like some critique on my form please!
Username:Harry Potter Lover <3
Link to your form:
[b]Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? Well it doesn't really matter, but please PM me if you have a suggestion or want me to write a pairing

viewtopic.php?f=57&t=613691 there is the link to my story please read and critisize it please ^_^

[Mr.Milo]

I would like some critique on my form please!
Username:Harry Potter Lover <3
Link to your form:
[b]Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM? Well it doesn't really matter, but please PM me if you have a suggestion or want me to write a pairing

viewtopic.php?f=57&t=613691 there is the link to my story please read and critisize it please ^_^

It's sweet but you should describe more of where she's at and it seems swirls popped outta nowhere but I like it!

[Official-Enjolras]

thnx...and Swirls did kinda pop outta nowhere....its kinda funny

[Papyrsatyr]

Mini bump for the night. I hope the folks don't mind I bump once a day or so. <<; >>;

Also Please try to use the correct forms when asking or giving critique.

[Not me nope]

I would like some critique on my form please!

Username:
Becca~ash

Link to your form:
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Adoption Agency Adoptable pets you are applying for:
.Mentaer fox adoptions.

Deadline for your form:
Roughly 2 days, Monday 20th June.

Would you prefer to get feedback here or by PM?
Anyway please. I just need it quite fast;3
Thankyou xx

[t i r e d.]

This is a critique for Becca~ash!
Who the critique is for: Becca~ash
What you had to say about it:
Check your punctuation in the 1st paragraph, instead of using 'time' two times in the same sentence, use 'memory' or something. Repetition get...repetitive xD
Spelling/Punctuation:
Paragraph 1:
lifes = life's
speical = special
Paragraph 2:
Suddenly, hot tongs seared my right wing, I yelped in pain, crying harder = Suddenly, hot tongs seared my right wing and I yelped in pain, crying harder
stomauch = stomach
for food, then, one unfortunate day I blacked out...= for food, then, one unfortunate day, I blacked out
Paragraph 4:
soiciaty= society
diffrent= different
speicalties= specialities (Not sure this is a real word....)
bloking = blocking

Maybe, to spice things up a bit, make yourself the one that helped the little foxeh out? Sorry if this wasn't much help, it's mainly spelling, but I'm sure it does help. Overall, it's very nice though. I love the little poem that goes with it.

[Not me nope]

Thankyou lots dances. I will fix that tomorow</3 and I was planning to do that 83

[Papyrsatyr]

Bump.

Feel free to PM or post suggestions for the thread here.
Or comments, etc. I just wanna make the place better for you guys. ^^

[kivr & fireflii]

How come I've never seen this before. I shall definitely mark it, and I'm very interested in becoming a Critic if you do decide to hire people. :3

[Crackomint]

I'll be marking this thread. I would also be interested in becoming a critic, if possible.