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by BucketORandomness » Fri Nov 11, 2016 1:22 pm
Both of those stories were amazing! De, yours is wonderfully complex and well thought out ((Though, some editing looks like it may be needed at the tail end of CH1 and throughout CH2)). I got a little confused with all the friends' names, but I like how you took the time to give them all a name and a bit of background and history together as well as the glimpse at personalities in their conversation ((I hope we can see them again some time later in the story)) Ranger, I loved how you told it from creation's perspective! I also liked the inclusion of the lyrics from Away In A manger. It was wonderfully written, and I enjoyed it thoroughly. Bravo for making me anticipate Christmas more than my birthday >^.^<
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by DeMaizu » Fri Nov 11, 2016 5:35 pm
Randy, thanks a lot!

With the editing, I figured I'd just leave it for when I'm re-writing and stuff. And to be honest, I get confused with the friends' names sometimes too XD Now I've just got three of them to worry about! I dunno about later, this is one of those stories that's made up on the fly; there's no set plot for it or anything. Although, I have this thing in mind where someone's invading? And
SPOILER ALERT, the Oracle at the palace is Mycah's mom. It's where he gets his Sight from XP I had a brainfart in writing that scene with Mycah's dad, though, with the eyes and whatnot. I should change that, shouldn't I? Meh. It'll happen sooner or later
Probably sooner because that stuff bothers me, let's be honest here
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by BucketORandomness » Sat Nov 12, 2016 3:59 am
Aight. I do my darndest. Who are Callum Blunn, Riely Shaw and Jack banks? Why is lyca frozen at the sight of them? Where are they? Why does lyca remember some things and not others? What are Callum Blunn, Riely Shaw and Jack banks here for? Do they want something? Do they know something they want to hold over ben and lyca? Are there any others she knows? Are there any ways out into the world? Is there any reason they're being kept here? Or you could always just try for some character development on the ones you've introduced. I hope this helped >^.^<
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by BucketORandomness » Sat Nov 12, 2016 10:41 am
Glad it helped >^.^< In other news, I wrote the last segment of Fierce Protection ((The short story thing I've been posting)). I don't know if I want to continue it, but that's not what I'm here for. I wrote the conclusion to the ((Possibly)) first installment, and I was wondering if you guys wanted me to post all of it, or just the part you haven't read yet. ((Warning, it is very close to 3,000 words total)) Also, in not so related but also kinda related news, I was wondering if I should make my own thread, cuz I'm getting the feeling I'll be doing this a lot more often now. Your thoughts?
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