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by Woogwoo Wren » Fri Nov 04, 2016 12:55 pm
In the midst of Nanoing, a song had to be written. One of my characters is really musical and writes songs. Unfortunately, I'm really bad at it. Any feedback?
“People come and people go,
Like the rain upon the snow.
Why when I look down below,
Never see you,
Never see you,
Never see yo-oou!
Oh! If I could, turn back the clock.
Turn round the time!
Briing yoou baack!
Oh! If I could change the world!
Make it different!
Briing yoou baack!
Why do I sit here?
Why do I staaay?
Why am I still here,when you’ve gone
when you’ve gone awaaay?
Oh! If I could, turn back the clock!
Turn round the time!
Briing yoou baack!
Oh! If I could, change the world!
Make it different!
Briing yoou baack!”
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by Aliria » Fri Nov 04, 2016 12:56 pm
*Bad Wolf* wrote:In the midst of Nanoing, a song had to be written. One of my characters is really musical and writes songs. Unfortunately, I'm really bad at it. Any feedback?
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What do you mean you're really bad at it
This is really good
I'll send out my soul
To worlds more beautiful
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by birbmememaster24 » Fri Nov 04, 2016 12:58 pm
*Bad Wolf* wrote:In the midst of Nanoing, a song had to be written. One of my characters is really musical and writes songs. Unfortunately, I'm really bad at it. Any feedback?
“People come and people go,
Like the rain upon the snow.
Why when I look down below,
Never see you,
Never see you,
Never see yo-oou!
Oh! If I could, turn back the clock.
Turn round the time!
Briing yoou baack!
Oh! If I could change the world!
Make it different!
Briing yoou baack!
Why do I sit here?
Why do I staaay?
Why am I still here,when you’ve gone
when you’ve gone awaaay?
Oh! If I could, turn back the clock!
Turn round the time!
Briing yoou baack!
Oh! If I could, change the world!
Make it different!
Briing yoou baack!”
Actually, when I sang it (throwing in a beat and notes ofc) it sounded pretty good!
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by DeMaizu » Fri Nov 04, 2016 1:58 pm
I have no idea how many words I got - mostly because I wasn't counting. But not much progress has been made, unfortunately. What am I doing on here? Someone make me go away!!
Also, Wren, what nonsense are you spouting. This is lovely. How can that be bad?????
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by Guest » Fri Nov 04, 2016 2:09 pm
@*Bad Wolf* teach me how to poetry, and i will love you for
life.
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by Guest » Fri Nov 04, 2016 2:32 pm
*squints*
aren't you supposed to nano your own nanowrimo
lololol jk what do you have so far?
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That means a lot, and I wasn't expecting such good feedback. *Smiles*