•Ash Wolf• & angeldog513 wrote:I really did love the characters you guys built. It was a nice twist on the classic "Thief bros" and honestly I love to see brotherly relationships, even if they aren't always the best. Me and my sister are like that *Cough* I really wished that I could've seen some more development between the two however. I found it sometimes a bit hard to read and understand, though after really breaking it apart it made more sense. I really just wish you had shown some more character growth. Like instead of focusing so much on the interactions between the two, give some overview of their history and background. Still,
this was a good form. Simply lacked the 'meat' to cover the whole story.
Imaginary & wicke wrote: Wonderfully done. Your forms held alot of the aspects I was looking for and all the writing was well done and understandable. I did enjoy the minor references to the game itself and the way you built up the relationship was well done.
It showed how the two changed over time and how they can now see each other. I like that. I did wish that the form had some more originality to it. Certain aspects of the characters followed closely to that of Greg and Angus and simply didn't really let your form stand out as much. The characters could become almost bland and nondescript, easily fixable and normally wouldn't be an issue since it wasn't that badly shown. Still, I thought I would point it out for future reference. Overall I really liked this form and felt that it had quite a lot to offer in terms of character development and story.
sschw & humerussin wrote:Another wonderful form. The art was well done and the characters you created were not only fun to read about, but held an air of originality to them. The simple quirks and habits fit the characters well and the interactions were really well done and logical. It really felt like you guys had a solid idea of what your characters were like. I also adored how you added in the PPS idea as well. I honestly have never considered think of PPS in this manor and I love how you not only incorporated it into their story, but you did so to explain a certain piece of one, which was the glasses. Though, my one fault I give your form is that it didn't have quite the length of some others. Still, what you did give was high quality, giving me a well explained idea of their past, present, and really makes me wonder what could be coming in the future.
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