Re: DAM: Flaxen Chestnut Spotted Blanket Roan

Postby eleutheromania » Sat Nov 29, 2014 5:54 am

Your Name: N i g h t .
Horse's Name: Serafina
Height: 15.3
Gender: Mare
Story:
      Stranded. That was the first word that came to mind when the roan blanket mare looked at her surroundings. This was not the type of stranded that most would think of, by stranded, Sera meant lost. She wasn't alone, a pesky human child lay curled up against her side. The girl had run off trying to catch her and thus, they ended up within the sand storm together, Sera shielding the child from the worse of the storm. Sera snorted, slowly getting up with little trouble and watching the human stir. The wild mare looked to her left, then right, nothing but sand. She was unfamiliar with the area that surrounded her. A sigh escaped her muzzle before looked to see the child trying to jump on her back. Amusement lit her gaze before she roughly pushed her away, clearly giving her a soft warning in horse aspect.

      It felt like hours, though it had only been one, the child was dragging and speaking in its language she did not understand. It didn't take long for her to look behind her and spot the child even farther away. The mare didn't wait, she wasn't responsible for her after all. She continued forward, trusting her sense of smell to hopefully guide her to a water source. A breeze brought the smell with it, though it was quite faint. Sera continued forward, breaking into a trot to get to her destination quicker.

      The sound of crying reached her velvet ears. She stopped, whipped around and saw nothing. Annoyed, she went towards the sound only to see the child covered in sand and crying. The mare sighed, this was some major baggage and slowing her down. She moved forward and knelt down, pushing the small creature towards her back who soon climbed clumsily onto her back. She then got back up and continued on her way at a walk, making sure to take into consideration of the extra weight on her back now. She didn't need the human falling.

      Her mouth was dry, it had been a little over four hours since she had to backtrack to get the child and now the smell of water was even stronger. The child had gone quiet not long ago, making her think she was asleep. Serafina broke into a canter, anticipation filling her with energy she needed. A few seconds later she heard a loud thump and looked behind her to see the child yet again face first in the sand. The mare grumbled to herself before turned around and picking the small child up by her shirt. From then on, she continued and soon the water source came into view.

      Sera fine dropped the human child, lowered her muzzle to the water and gulped it down, little by little. When the child didn't move, she began splashing water on her, expecting that to get her awake. Her small tactic worked and the little human moved towards the water and began drinking.

      The duo stayed there for a while, the small child coming in handy as she made something that could hold water. After about two days, hunger finally began to set in and the horse and child moved on. What they didn't know was that they were heading in the opposite direction leading them both home. Small plants, the occasional fruit helped with the hunger along the way, though it was little to satisfy either.

      Over the course of a week they traveled, sometimes with the child on Sera's back, other times with them both walking side by side. A bond was being forged between the two, though neither seemed to realize this. It wasn't long before a small village came into view and soon they had full bellies. When Sera went to leave, the child would not stay, to her surprise. The mare was simply confused. When the child didn't give up, she had no choice but to take her with her.

      Over the years, the two only grew stronger, Serafina now seven years old and the child ten years of age. The two can be seen roaming the desert by locales and often they reside in one village or another. The child's village was lost to them, having never found out where she was from so Serafina took on the responsibility of helping the orphan, after all she did help out when the help was needed.
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Re: DAM: Flaxen Chestnut Spotted Blanket Roan

Postby stride » Sun Nov 30, 2014 5:21 am

Your Name: My name is Stride c:
Horse's Name: Aethera
Height: 15.3
Gender: Mare
Story: Aethera was perplexed. She had taken shelter a little ways off from a nearby village when the sandstorm hit, but she hadn't stayed long. In fact, as soon as the sand had let up enough for her to travel with some line of sight, she had left to find a better hideaway. She had not expected this to be currently babbling up at her. A tiny, pink beast was reaching it's tiny hands up towards her legs, to help steady it's wobbling footsteps. It couldn't be more than a year or two old. Aethera knew how dangerous it was for the tiny human to be out in the desert without guidance.

Swinging her head around, looking for any sort of human life she could nudge the child toward (and finding none), she bent her head towards the child. She had never actually seen one close up before, and the curiosity gnawed at the edge of her thoughts. While being examined, the toddler decided that instead of holding onto her legs for support, he decided it would be a grand idea to support himself with her muzzle. Babbling what seemed like words of encouragement to himself in his native tongue, his hand found her nose. He giggled when the warm air blew past his fingertips, and Aethera had to fight the urge to rip her head away from the child. She didn't want to scare, or injure him. She peered into his warm, brown eyes, and saw what seemed like enjoyment.

Shaking her head slightly, she ever-so-gently turned and picked the boy up by his shirt collar. A few confused noises came from the child, but no noise of protest followed. Aethera knew the child would never be able to keep up with her on those wobbly legs, so she opted to carry him back to his home. She preferred to stay away from humans in general, to keep up her 'mysterious' facade, but she supposes she'd have to encounter them at some point. Better now than never.

Night was falling, and the child's internal clock knew it. Aethera was still galloping in the opposite direction she had came, back toward the village. The lights of said village were on the horizon, and if the sun hadn't set a few hours ago, she could have mistaken it for a sunrise. As she decreased the distance between herself and the village, she wondered how her presence would be taken. Maybe all the humans are asleep, she pondered. Unlikely, as someone would probably be sleepless with worry for the child. That's what she hoped, at least. She believed that the child deserved someone who cared for him, with all of his naive innocence. Looking down from the horizon briefly, she watched with amusement as the child stirred. Yes, someone had to care for him, or he would not have made it this long in the harsh heat of the desert.

The village was on a hill, with makeshift homes that looked unlivable, but were sturdy and dry. Aethera slowed down to a walk as she reached the bottom of the small desert hill. Steeling herself, she walking into the village slowly. When she entered, she saw a well. Gently, she set down the toddler in favor of getting something to drink. Taking long and deep gulps, she finally looked up to see three humans look at her with wide eyes. One had the boy in her arms, and they were all speechless. Surprised, she took a step back, before nodding her head at all three. She set a quick pace around the humans, and through the entrance, leaving the brightly lit village in the dust of her wake.

From that night on, in the old village, stories were told of the chestnut mare who was faster than the wind, and how they returned a young boy back to his family. The young boy would grow up hearing stories of him getting returned by what was previously only known as a mirage. Every once in a while though, he thought he'd catch a glimpse of a chestnut dust cloud on the horizon. The young boy grew up under the watchful eye of Aethera.
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Re: DAM: Flaxen Chestnut Spotted Blanket Roan

Postby Midnight Tails » Sun Nov 30, 2014 7:03 pm

Your Name: Midnight Tails
Horse's Name: North
Height: 15.3
Gender: Mare
Story:
He didn't understand what was happening. Earlier this very day it had all been so peaceful, and now he was amidst this raging torrent of sand that had no mercy for the tiny speck of life inside. How had this come about? In his current daze he was struggling to remember the course of events that led him here.
Ah. That's right. It was my own selfishness that had me end up like this.

From an even younger age than he was now, the young native had heard countless stories of the mysterious whispers of the desert, the ones completely in tune with the earth beneath, mere mirages on the horizon if you were lucky, and bringers of rain in rare instances.
The mere magical feel to it all was enthralling for any young mind, but in particular, Rambican was wanting to learn more, to meet these pure mirages that gave you a thousand years good luck at the mere sight of one.
His child wonder had turned to selfish desires as he grew older, becoming more of an unhealthy obsession than anything else.
Jealousy did not help. Being related to the chief of his tribe, he had been in the running for being the next chief.
Then this foul little child, younger than him by four years no less, met a DAM, one of those fateful mirages, and just like that, it was the only candidate for succession. How dare they favour that instead of him.
Consequences can be devastating, and a single thought set off a flurry of events that noone could stop.
I will find one of these ugly beasts, and make it mine.
At first it appeared all was normal, Rambican went about his daily duties, caring for their tribes live food with several other youngsters, and the sparse few mounts they had gathered over the years; of course none of those were a mirage, his tribe would surely sing praises upon his return if he brought one back with him.
Gathering supplies for the journey the boy started to gain what others noticed and started calling 'an unnatural frightening glint in his eye', and by the time he felt he was prepared to set off, several of his tribe had become fearful of the young native.
Regardless of whatever motives he had, for he had told no other his plans, his people were worried for him.
Yet the current chief simply said "Leave him. He will come to his own answer."
The few farewells he was given went unnoticed to the young Rambican, eager to set off.
It took him weeks to find an oasis. It wasn't a particularly fruitful one, but he could easily live off it if he was careful, and the mirages, if they were real at all, had to drink at sometime to survive.
His expectations went unanswered for there was no sign of any form of mirage, let alone one of those horse legends. Of course there were other signs of life; a stray lizard here and there, a bird roosting for a while in one of the scraggly trees above that clinged to life at the edge of the water, ants scurrying through their everyday business...none of these were important to him however.
If he'd taken the time to find other beings important, he perhaps would have had enough time to find shelter.
As it was, Rambican took no notice of when all other life hurriedly disappeared from the oasis.
Just before the sandstorm hit, something did take his notice however it was so fleeting he could have sworn he was mistaken.
Nevertheless the child followed the direction of whence he'd last seen the movement.
Only now did he notice that the wind had substantially picked up, sand hitting him gently, but far graver winds were howling closer with every secound. It was at that moment a beast miraculously appeared next to him. How long had it been there?
Startled, quickly frightened he stumbled back, tripping over himself. The beast is just standing there, mocking me.
His previous emotional state came back to haunt him, with a suprisingly deep rage surging up; it would never occur to him that the mare was offering to guide him away from the danger.
Fumbling with his walking pole, he reaffirmed his grip before jabbing it at the creature beside him.
It was simply a blunt piece of wood, yet even that with enough force managed to graze the mare slightly on the belly.
The momentum toppled the child over, smashing into the sand beneath, the mirage had dodged and got off with only that graze, warned by his angry shout of his native tongue, it was garble to her, but she understood the threat.
Naturally the experience frightened the mustang, and she now understood why those around her had warned to keep distance from humans. Rearing up in fright she almost struck the boy, this did not help his mood, but seeing what his actions had caused made the boy numb to doing any further action of his own.
Unsuprisingly the mirage did not hesitate to gallop away, with further reason to move as the sandstorm was upon them now.
Sand furiously beat him down, pushing him against the sand, Rambican lay there, letting nature punish his actions.
If he had not been so selfish, perhaps learnt patience, or at least tolerance, maybe he would not be at risk of losing his barely started life.

And now having remembered all the events that had led him to his current predicament, as the sand tore past and painfully attacked his clothes and unprotected skin, all the while sinking him deeper into the dune he numbly lay against, the young native cried.
He cried and cried, almost forgetting the sandstorm was there at all, so upset he'd become; terrified, alone, hungry and with a mouth full of sand Rambican learnt that he wasn't the most important thing alive, and that he'd done a terrible thing.
Filled with remorse, he wished the sand would just swallow him up, how could he tarnish his heritage so selfishly like that?
Time passed. Time still continues to flow no matter what huh... At this point Rambican was so covered in sand, thanks to the sandstorm blowing it over him, that even if he wanted to get up he couldn't; the child never realised before now that sand could be so heavy like this.
Softness brushed his cheek, and moist warmth breathed over him, he ignored it until a snort brought him to alert enough to blearily open his eyes. The young native could not see all that well, the sand had been attracted to his tears and some now clung firmly to his eyelashes, yet his sight was not hindered enough that he could not see that the mustang was back.
It astounded him. Had he not injured the mirage earlier? Or was that just his imagination? With a croak he mumbled a "Why?" getting more sand in his mouth and resulting in coughing.
Ah, maybe she's here to take me to the other side. It wouldn't suprise me, they are mirages after all.
A whinny of concern was the last thing he heard as he drifted off.

Some time later, Rambican came to.
And in a situation that he did not expect.
He was cold and wet, no wonder he was; those are two things one would assume occurs every time you're repeatedly dunked water.
Rambican turned to growl at the perpetrator, and a spectacular sight befell him. The mustang was the one dunking him in the water. She was carefully holding him by the back of his clothes, slightly ripping the already tattered fabric, well they were more like rags now, and presently dropped him down once she became aware that he was indeed awake.
The sun was cheerily shining down now, and at first he did not recognise the landscape.
Ah, we're only a few kilometres away from where my tribe is. That's just a short walking distance. She took me here?
Looking around, the mustang was gone, he'd only looked away for a few secounds, and that was all she needed to once again become the mirage the spirits loved to be.
It could not end this way. He wouldn't let it. He felt he had so much to learn from these mysterious creatures that you couldn't help but respect, and they were, or at least that mare was, the kindest most forgiving creature he had ever met.
If he wanted to become a better person, Rambican felt he just had to be by her side to do so.
With an all new determination, he spotted the faint tracks that were disappearing fast, that was the only hint to whence the mirage had gone.
Only by the next day did he find her, and he had this feeling that he had not found her, instead she'd found him.
She was scared of him, keeping her distance, her kindness and curiosity however not letting her entirely leave once more.
There was nothing to tempt her with to get her to come closer, and if he was honest with himself, it had seemed impossible that he would ever see her again at all, yet there she was. For now he was content with that.
Doubting that she'd even understand, he said, "You're like a north star, guiding travelers to where they belong. People always turn to north for guidance, I need your guidance to learn a better way. I hope you don't mind me going with you from now on? And if it pleases you, I'd like to refer to you as North."
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Re: DAM: Flaxen Chestnut Spotted Blanket Roan

Postby eleutheromaniac. » Thu Dec 11, 2014 1:56 pm

good luck everyone!

Ugh mine was so bad! You guys are such amazing writers! I just finished reading all of them and am so exited to see the winner! GOOD LUCK! ;)

And I understand that it might take a while to judge (A lot of the stories are super long (like mine)) but do you have an ETA on when the winner will be posted?
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Re: DAM: Flaxen Chestnut Spotted Blanket Roan

Postby Neara » Thu Dec 18, 2014 7:24 am

Sorry to take so long on judging everyone! Life kinda got in the way and I was unsure as to how I wanted to give the prizes, because to me there is more than just one winner X3.

Winner of this contest is... Midnight Tails!! The character development was epic, I really thoroughly loved the story.

Second place Tigermay Great story loved the ambiguous writing it had you guessing what was next or who was talking. It also had great visionary cues. (get to choose another DAM from the contest that placed and has not been transferred over yet)

The other stories were great too but some parts of the interaction between the horse and people didn't seem real enough/genuine great story though maybe interactions be more thought out not so quick to go by?

Example of what I believe is good (not going to use anyone's words just example coming from my imagination)
The DAM padded over to the human and nuzzled his pockets which smelled of sweet apples. The boy awoke to a sight that frightened him, he threw his hands up in defense. The DAM spun on her hind legs to get out of range. Tomo was again shocked at the sight around him. Where was his tribe! Had they moved on without him? He searched the horizon, hand on his brow to block the sun. The DAM did not go far, she licked her dry lips as the rumbling of her stomach brought back the memory of the apples. She cautiously padded back to him as they were all alone and she did not feel in danger from such a small human. (giving primal reason as to why the DAM would make the choices instead of using human reasoning)
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Re: DAM: Flaxen Chestnut Spotted Blanket Roan

Postby Tigermay » Fri Dec 19, 2014 7:08 am

Ah, congrats! So close cx I'll be stalking North for sure <3 And Neara, I hope you don't mind, but I do have some questions I'll PM you~
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Re: DAM: Flaxen Chestnut Spotted Blanket Roan

Postby Midnight Tails » Tue Dec 30, 2014 1:32 pm

Sorry for taking so long to respond </3
Had to wait until I had access to a computer with a keyboard again, and then Christmas was upon me and my mum made me too busy to even think of responding for days until now. :c
Anyways, ah oh my gosh I won? ;.; There were so many good stories, whilst I'm normally pretty confident in my writing ability, there are so many good writers that participated I thought I wouldn't win. So even many days on, it's still hard to take in.
Have to keep checking that's really my username. x3
Thank you so much Neara! ^.^
And I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the story that much. I really enjoyed writing it so it's nice to get such a compliment! :3

Congrats to Tigermay for secound place. C:
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