Fanfic Writers Club V1

[Lady_Lycana]

night

[Gifting Dogs]

Hai

[skunkiii]

Heyy

[Lady_Lycana]

Hi ^^

[Gifting Dogs]

Hai

[Gifting Dogs]

Ok maybe someone else can see a problem here?

This is my Itachi one

Kiana wandered around the forest near Kohonoa like she normally did. The forest was dead this time of night so she used the time to think about her future and what she was going to do. She looked up to the sky and relaxed, sighing. The night air felt good and relaxed her mind. She, then, looked around her at the path in front of her.

Soon, a scent caught her nose. A very familiar scent. It was someone she hadn't seen in a very long time. A low growl ripped from her as her red angry eyes narrowed and her ears went flat. Kiana stayed in the shadows but she feared that she had already been spotted but the person. Kiana watched the clearing as they got closer to her. What she smelt surprised her greatly. It was the smell of a man. A certain man whose name she would never forget and the one who massacred his entire clan.


Once he stepped into the clearing, she noticed someone was with him. Another with blue skin. She watched them both as they spoke.


"Itachi, I don't think she is around here." The blue one spoke, looking at his friend.

The raven hair man didn't answer but stared at the spot that she was hiding in. Itachi knew she was around here and he wasn't going to give up till he found her. There was more than one reason why he was searching for her.

"She is here somewhere. If we go back empty handed, Leader will not be happy." Itachi finally spoke.

'Leader?' She thought. 'Who is his leader?' She watched him for a bit longer before slinking quietly into the shadows and disappearing. Kiana was going to find out.

I do see a problem with this one

[Lady_Lycana]

Ok maybe someone else can see a problem here?

This is my Itachi one

Kiana wandered around the forest near Kohonoa like she normally did. The forest was dead this time of night so she used the time to think about her future and what she was going to do. She looked up to the sky and relaxed, sighing. The night air felt good and relaxed her mind. She, then, looked around her at the path in front of her.

Soon, a scent caught her nose. A very familiar scent. It was someone she hadn't seen in a very long time. A low growl ripped from her as her red angry eyes narrowed and her ears went flat. Kiana stayed in the shadows but she feared that she had already been spotted but the person. Kiana watched the clearing as they got closer to her. What she smelt surprised her greatly. It was the smell of a man. A certain man whose name she would never forget and the one who massacred his entire clan.


Once he stepped into the clearing, she noticed someone was with him. Another with blue skin. She watched them both as they spoke.


"Itachi, I don't think she is around here." The blue one spoke, looking at his friend.

The raven hair man didn't answer but stared at the spot that she was hiding in. Itachi knew she was around here and he wasn't going to give up till he found her. There was more than one reason why he was searching for her.

"She is here somewhere. If we go back empty handed, Leader will not be happy." Itachi finally spoke.

'Leader?' She thought. 'Who is his leader?' She watched him for a bit longer before slinking quietly into the shadows and disappearing. Kiana was going to find out.

I do see a problem with this one

What?

[onion]

hii um i just joined wattpad my user is belladonnx
ive only posted one thing so far but i saw this thread and thought id try to join in ahh

[Gifting Dogs]

Awesome

@Lycana, the start of the story seems to not explain her and it jumps straight to her. I thinking like what you did for the Hidan one just gradually intro her

[starsailor]

I'm WaterWolf600 over on Wattpad. Currently focusing mostly on 'Of Ears and a Tail' there.