Undertale/Deltarune Fanclub

[Geschrieben]

The drawing the character like Sans is actually like, the character's basic style is Sans', so short, with his head shape, etc. ^^; If that's just your art style it's fine. Can I see the character though?

Here, someone randomly decided to draw her at one point so I usually use that drawing.
She's short, but that's because she's between 10-16 (I forget the exact age).
Mmm, you should add age onto there...

Wow, she looks cute! Doesn't look like a Sue or cliche to me. She actually looks very original :)

Thankie... Heheh, guess it's not perfect for everyone, then.

{ AHHHHH MY CHARACTER IS BAD IT'S ME SERIF AHHHHHH
AHHHHHHHHH

he wears a pull over green sweatshirt with a pine tree on it (he calls the pin trees) and he has a goat head, skeleton body. he is the last monster living in the underground being raised by a spirit who goes by Wingy (W.D Gaster), he's generous and helps anyone in need. He's the son of Toriel and Sans.. he's cliche..? }

Sorry if this is offensive, but wow that sounds super cliché...
Maybe you could tone it down with trying to be 'original' and remove the connection with WD and that he's the last monster in the Underground...? It's just making it worse at this point.

[amaoretto]

#1: Species
[] Is your character a skeleton? (+3)
[] Is your character a goat? (+3)
[] Is your character a ghost? (+1)
[] Is your character a ghost with a robotic body? (+3)
[] Is your character a wolf? (+2)
[] Is your character a fish humanoid? (+3)
[X] Is your character a dinosaur lizard thing? (+3)
Total so far: 3
(crocodile, but he kind counts as it I guess?)

#2: Personality
[] Is your character sad and shy all the time and thinks their worthless? (+5)
[] Is your character kind of oblivious and very happy and optimistic all the time, and they think there's good in everyone? (+3)
[] Does your character love bad puns and is lazy? (+4)
[] Is your character fabulous and thinks they're awesome? (+4)
[] Is your character shy and has depression? (+393884 (ok not really just +5))
[] Is your character very passionate and strong? (+2)
[] Is your character kind, caring, generous, helpful, and smart? (+4)
Total so far: 0

#3: Design
[] Do you draw your character like Sans? (+6)
[] Does your character wear a jacket with a fluffy top? (+3)
[] Does your character wear slippers? (+3)
[] Does your character wear armor? (+1)
[] Does your character have unusual hair (on a skeleton for ex) or color (rainbow for ex)? (+4)
[X] Does your character have wings or a tail unusually? (+4)
Total so far: 4
(bc crocs have tails so whoops)

#4: Relationships
[] Is your character friends with any (+1) or all (+3) of the canon characters?
[] Does your character have a crush on any of the canon characters? (+1)
[] Is your character in a relationship with one of the canon characters? (+4)
[] Is your character a fanchild of two canons (+4) or canon x oc (+6)?
[] Is your character best friends with any (+4) or all (+5) of the canon characters?

Grand total: 7

Ratings:
0 - 7 - Definitely a good character!
8 - 10 - Pretty OK, might need some changes.
11 - 15 - Okay, I'm sure you need to change it.
15+ - ...Have you considered deleting your character?

[DBD]

Honestly I thought my character was a cliché. Because he used fire?

It's a lion with a bandana and a flaming tail. He can use fireballs.

... Ok so he isn't cliché. Why did I think he was a cliché?

[Geschrieben]

Just a heads up, I reported the previous V2 to be locked so people don't accedentally post there.

[samesia]

@>>Pyromaniac
I really love your art style tbh! I think they all look great!
@serif
Can I critique in a PM?

[dori.]

Just a heads up, I reported the previous V2 to be locked so people don't accedentally post there.

Nice, thank you!.
Looking at previous posts, your OC doesn't look cliche at all Flower.

@crazyangrywolf It's probably because some "cliche" OC's usually have fire powers or something to do with fire imo.

[DBD]

Just a heads up, I reported the previous V2 to be locked so people don't accedentally post there.

Nice, thank you!.
Looking at previous posts, your OC doesn't look cliche at all Flower.

@crazyangrywolf It's probably because some "cliche" OC's usually have fire powers or something to do with fire imo.

But I actually thought the idea of the lion was a cliché... Since when were lions in undertale? Wait. I remembered: originally I was going to give him a green and yellow striped shirt, but I changed it to a blue bandana.

[samesia]

@crazyangrywolf
There actually is a lion in Undertale!

This guy right over here ^^

[DBD]

@crazyangrywolf
There actually is a lion in Undertale!

This guy right over here ^^

I completely forgot about that guy! Well my oc looks more like Kimba the white lion. than that lion.

[puppypillar]

_this doesn't exist_