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by Chemicello » Mon Aug 31, 2015 11:19 pm
I have just read the whole thing from
the start and I must say,
you have a really flowing and engaging style,
flawless grammar and great vocabulary.
You set all the scenes beautifully,
with great descriptions, and the
character development is really well done.
Great job xxx
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by Asherwy » Tue Sep 01, 2015 5:59 pm
thank you
so so so so much chemi.
you guys don't even believe how grateful I am for your comments
both positive and negative
it's just the high point of all my days
sometimes I go back and reread all of your comments
over and over again
thank you all so much
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by Asherwy » Thu Oct 08, 2015 6:07 pm
nine. salt
DECEMBER (( JOSEPH ))
Joseph would timidly contemplate his surroundings, objects and people included, and carefully remove
himself from the fray like a thread yanked out of the tattered quilt, ineluctably drifting towards cold
marble tiles. During lunch break, he scurried around his classmate's eyes and vanished into the shadows
to eat. No one searched for him nor realised his absence. Not one single thought of Joseph scampered
across their self-consumed minds. His friends had other friends, and he wearily imagined their illuminant
grins swathed upon their lips while buoyant bouts of laughter ruptured through their teeth. The sound of
his fork against his plastic lunchbox often cracked the desolate ceiling which hovered above him, seeming
to descend lower and lower as the minutes trotted by. He would intentionally lock the door to his stall,
freezing into a rigid sculpture each time the bathroom entrance creaked open, inevitably followed by
lazy footsteps and perhaps a cough or two, albeit it was primarily hollow laughter that echoed off the
walls like gongs. The sound would reverberate in his mind long after they left. Joseph frequently skipped
school days, simply because he dreaded the group projects and those bleak lunch breaks. Though he
would never miss the days when he had physical education, when Lark was there.
Joseph thought about his farewell to Lark before December break as salty beads dribbled from his eyes
onto the entrance exam for his new school. Those days don't exist anymore.
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