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Cute? :3

boring...
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omg so pretty and yesssssss
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asl;djkldsklaj; YES.
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eh
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HAHA NOPE
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby Asherwy » Sun Aug 02, 2015 3:36 pm

      thank you so much captain
      but I'm starting to find a lot of flaws after asking my dad's opinion
      he said it was too complicated and jerky
      the jerky I can agree, since I don't have a particularly good history of nice flowy sentences like you cap
      is it too complicated? Are there too many things in one sentence?
      He says that it isn't good
      although he added that it's his opinion and that his literacy isn't that great
      I dunno. All the other stuff I've showed him that I wrote on cs he didn't like either
      too much complicated words and description
      he says he doesn't know most of the words
      it's hard to read
      there's too much detail
      not much story
      is it really not good?
      he told me that your writing style is much better cap'
      I can definitely agree to that xD
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby ʞ ɔ ǝ ɹ ʍ d ı ʞ s » Sun Aug 02, 2015 3:40 pm

Hmmmm
Its not bad
I mean there's a lot of big words, but I wouldn't say I found it hard to follow
I rather like it- in my head it flows nicely
I think the bigger words make it more of a slow, soothing read, which goes well with the story I think
Like if this was an adventure or sci-fi it'd sound awkward, but it's not, ya know?
I think the flow of words goes well with the flow of the story
And your style changes up with the genre, I noticed, so I don't really think it's a bad thing
and gosh thank you ;-; I haven't written in so long though oi
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Postby Asherwy » Sun Aug 02, 2015 3:45 pm

      okay
      i was having a mental breakdown
      thank you again

      and there is absolutely no problem
      your writing is really good
      no, better than good
      it's like great x10
      ye
      i bet you'll still be completely fine even if you haven't written for a year
      cuz you're cap
      and a skipwreck
      captain skipwreck
      ye
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby ʞ ɔ ǝ ɹ ʍ d ı ʞ s » Sun Aug 02, 2015 3:50 pm

    Of course!
    And I mean everyone has a different taste in reading
    I find that people tend to be more picky about books than they are about food
    and thats saying something
    seriously
    oh you'll eat chicken gizzard but you refuse to touch anything remotely fantasy ok I see how it is
    some people

    ahh thank you agaaain x.x
    but seriously I love the way you write <3
    Ok I'ma just say something weird
    I have synesthesia so like words and stories and sounds ok they all have color to me
    and your writing really makes me think of like a stream of molten silver
    just runnin down somethin
    all leisurely and pretty
    does that make sense
    am I crazy yet
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby Asherwy » Sun Aug 02, 2015 4:01 pm

      Haha, so true xD
      -prances around happily-
      my worries are no more :D

      anytime cap, anytime.
      synesthesia
      that is really cool
      and I have never thought of my writing as molten silver
      wow
      captain you are just full of crazy poop and I love it
      everyone loves it really
      you've been crazy since the day you were born.
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Postby noal » Sun Aug 02, 2015 4:02 pm

true dat

:P

edit;; i just realized something; you actually do use alot of complex words,
but somehow i understand them when reading your text. on their own im like "wat."
yea.
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Postby ʞ ɔ ǝ ɹ ʍ d ı ʞ s » Sun Aug 02, 2015 4:22 pm

    It's totally mandatory to be weird in order to be any kind of artist
    we're the speshul cookies
    everyone else be like
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❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) astray

Postby Asherwy » Thu Aug 13, 2015 3:10 am

eight. astray
NOVEMBER (( CASE ))


I denied the thought, over and over again until I grew more desperate than I have ever been. Desperate
for it to be the truth. Yearning for my fantasies to become reality. My pounding heart halted, when
those agonisingly beautiful, viridescent eyes yielded to my desirous pleas. I silently urged her to answer
my inaudible questions, a vain spark of hope igniting as the moments wore on, her answer sprinting
towards me, hesitant but swift as I reached out - only to grasp at nothing. Chocolate brown strands
vanished through the door, a resounding slam following after. The classroom seemed to freeze over, the
despairing hiss of crackling verglas impaled my eardrums, continuously spearing through the tissue,
deeper and deeper until it pierced my mind. The answer was delivered to me with the sharp voice of
Valerie. Strong, firm, and..absolute.

Are you okay?
It's not true.

My head slowly swivelled around to meet the monotonous, grey eyes of the inquirer and nodded softly.
Whether it was in reply or agreement, I wouldn't know. She smiled, and I thought I sensed warmth in her
dull gaze, so I glanced towards the door. Not a speck of frost was to be seen on the quaint, ligneous door.
I was acutely fragile, vulnerable, and fragmented. Valerie proffered her hand for me, and I acknowledged
it. Everything else gained colourless momentum and passed my by in a tedious blur. It was after school
that day, when she confessed. I was convinced that it was her, Valerie, who had defrosted the barrier
separating me from Lark, but it had never been frozen. Miserably blinded by the unabating torment, I
failed to realised and reconsider what had transpired in our english classroom. My response, was,
inevitable.

"Okay...let's date."


...'come back,' they plead...



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Postby Asherwy » Thu Aug 13, 2015 3:11 am

      i'm so sorry
      it's so short
      but it's okay
      right
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Re: ❀ (( our little cherry blossoms )) posting allowed :3

Postby raey » Thu Aug 13, 2015 5:26 am

      yes yes yes yes yes
      I really, really, really like this part
      short but really cute and that is why it is perfect

      and I have to join rosemarrie - your vocab is as fabulous as always <3
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