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I want to write a short story about werewolves but I can't think of a character or plot. When i think of one, I'll post it here.

(I hope it's ok if I post)

What is it going to be called?

[Erille]

(Don't worry, the owner won't mind)

I don't know yet. usually, I'll write the story first so I know the plot so I can have an approprite name. I hate it when I call a story something, for an example, Pies and Platypuses and then I end up writing something not about Pies and Platypuses becuase the plot goes a certain way and it's all so perfect so i don't want to change it.

[Gone Forever:.]

Same here.

Right now I'm working on a story called Broken, I personally think it's really good. I wonder if I should post it on CS? Really, though, it isn't as great as I wanted it to be. Well, anyway, good luck with your werewolf short story! If you really want something(critic, I mean), you should get a Writer'sCafe account and post it on there. Good luck!



EDIT:

List of stories I have written/started in the last year:
Broken
Under the Same Sky
Eclipse
Fiery Ride
Jerimiah

I think I'll post up information on them, then put togather one that seems better. I really need to edit them....

[Gone Forever:.]

(I hope it's ok for me to do this. Double post, I mean.)

I have decided to put Broken on CS. I asked my BF to read the first could chapters. She said they were a little graphic for a kid-friendly website. So I'm rewriting it, in less detail. But, I want to see if there's any intrest in it, so I'll post a little sliver of it here, if thats ok?


Chapter ??? (Somewhere near the start of the book, I'm to lazy to check.)
Prolouge
"You need to remember!" Andrew said, pushing Tair up against the wall.
"I.....I swear. I don't know!" Tair coughed. A nurse screamed somewhere near the door. Tair struggled against Andrew, but to no prevail. Andrew lifted Tair up again and slammed him against the far wall. Tair could feel blood soaking through the back of his shirt.
"What are you doing?!" The head nurse, Victoria, shrieked. Andrew turned away from Tair to look at Victoria. Andrea rushed to Tair's side and helped him back up. Tair reached for her hand.
"Thank you." He whispered when their hands connected. Andrea pulled away, returning to Victoria's side. Andrew turned back to Tair.
"Keep your hands off him!" Victoria said firmly, stepping in front of Tair. The old woman glared up at Andrew, challenging him with her old, wise eyes.
"Tairence Vechien, the blind boy from Scottan, has something I want." Andrew growled, taking a step toward Tair. Victoria stood her ground.
"And may I ask, Sir Andrew, what this something is?" She asked cooly. Andrew looked between Victoria and Tair. Was he really going to let this old woman stand in his way?
"No, now let me pass." Andrew growled.
"No, I cannot let you harm Tair in any way. He is my reponsability, and I will not let you be near him." Victoria said. Andrew turned and walked to the door, when he reached it he turned around again and said:
"Tair, I'll be back. And when I return you will burn in hell." He then turned, and walked out of the room.
The moment he left, Victoria turned to Tair.
"What did that man want with you, Tairence?" She asked. Tair looked up to where he thought her face should be.
"He wanted power." He said quietly. Victoria's eyes widened.
"What?" She asked.
"He wanted the power to see what you can only see in darkness." Tair continued, lowering his head.
"What does this power have to do with you, Tair?" Victoria asked again. Tair looked away.
"The power I speak of is the power I was born with."

"Darren, where are we going?' Dalota asked as they walked under an arch and into a church yard. Darren pulled his hood off as they entered the chapel.
"We're coming to visit my good friend Andrea, she is a nurse for the hospital here." Darren said, as they entered another room.
"Darren!" A young woman called, running toward them. Darren welcomed her embrace.
"Andrea, I'd like you to meet Dalota. She has offered to heal." Darren said, looking Dalota's way. She began to protest, but Andrea wisked her and Darren out into the yard.
"I'm so happy to see you, Darren!" Andrea said, hugging him. Dalota just watched, feeling hopelessly lost in Darren's relationship with Andrea.
Suddenly, there was a dark 'thud' from inside the chapel. Andrea whipped around, then raced back inside. Darren looked over at Dalota, then ran after Andrea. Just as she ran through the doorway, the front chamber exploded into an inferno.
"Andrea!" Darren yelled, diving into the inferno. Dalota, raced in right behind him. A cloaked figure walked out from behind the burning chapel. The man pulled back his hood. It was Andrew.

"Tair!" Andrea yelled, running into the hospital wing. He lay sprawled on the floor, having a coughing fit. Andrea reached down and helped him back onto the bed. Darren and Dalota entered moments later, and raced to Andrea.
"Tair, please come with me! You have to trust me!" Andrea cried, pulling Tair up and guiding him to the burning doorway.
"Are you....-" Darren yelled, just as the doorway collapsed behind Andrea. Andrea safly guided Tair out into the yard, then turned back to the burning chapel. There were tears in her eyes.
"Darren! Dalota!" She cried. Suddenly Andrea heard a hollow 'thump'. She turned. Tair had collapsed onto the ground, coughing.

Darren coughed, trying to find a way out. He had lost Dalota in the smoke, and he wished her the best.
"A great place to die, in a chapel. Of all places!" Darren muttured to himself, as he broke through a wall. He fell onto the ground. When he got back up again, he saw a black bundle laying a little ways away. He cautiously moved toward it, then cried in relief when he saw Dalota's familiar face. He heard crying behind him, but Darren picked up Dalota before turning around.
Andrea was crying, trying to protect the blind boy from a cloaked figure.
Darren carried Dalota over to where the boy lay. He gently put her down beside him, then turned into the shadows around him. He crept up behind the man, taking out his sword. He jabbed the man in the arm. Andrew turned to glare down at Darren. Andrew pulled a knife, lunging at Darren. In response Darren cut through the man's arm. Andrew pushed the knife into Darren's side. Darren stumbled, then fell backwards.
But another figure had added her attack to Andrew. It was Dalota. She pushed her sword deeper into his back. The point appeared from his chest, stained with blood. Andrew collapsed onto the ground, then disappeared. Andrea turned back to Tair, while Dalota worked on Darren. She healed his side. When he woke up there was a scar when he had been stabbed.
Darren turned to Andrea, who still tended to Tair.
"Who is this boy?" He asked.
"This is Tairence Vechien, or Tair. He stumbled into our yard last winter, weak and bloody. Lady Victoria took him in, of course. We've kept him for a year. We've had to." Andrea said, turning to Darren.
"Why?" He asked.
"He's blind." Andrea whispered.
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So....is it good? Here is a little more information:

Tair is the main character.

Character Info

Darren: The power to 'melt' or morph into surrounding substances

Dalota: Shape-shifter and healer

Andrea: Elementalist

Tair: Blind boy, but has the power to 'feel' "sounds", "colors" and another thing (Example: ...... Tair could feel the white spear he held in his hand. He could also feel the fear in the air. Suddenly, the feelings went blank. He turned to his father. "What have you done?".....)
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The plot is that these four characters go on a quest to save the future of their world. It's kind of like Lord of the Rings, but in my opinion, better. Lol.


Comments? Critic? Advice? I know it's a bit messy at the end, but I'll fix that later. And a later after that, I think I'll rewrite my whole book! This could just be the prolouge, and the 1st chapter could be something like Tair waking up from a dream or something......

Well, anyway. Comments, Critic, Advice?

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Wow, that is like......really good Indian Wolf!!!! If you posted it up I'd totally read it!

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Indian Wolf >>> That is really good! I love the idea of a LOTR type-quest! Try to use more compound/complex sentences though, and make them longer. Or at least use more pronouns; Reading a name every sentence sorta distracts from the action, you know? Also, you could benefit from a few more descriptive verbs here and there. (Even I admit, even I dont use as many descriptive verbs as I should XD) But other than that, I want more 8D!

Et Tu Brute >>> Hiya! Glad to see you join the Nook

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Yeah, after writing for about 5 minutes my grammar gets a bit messy. Thats why I can continusly write a number of books at the same time. I lose intrest in 1 book, go to the next, then switch of. Right now I'm writing at least 5-8 books. My favorite though is Jerimiah. It's about these kids that go to a summer camp, but they don't know that there is a murdurer there. So they try to live out the summer without getting killed by "Freak-Show". It's really sad.
Another favorite is Eclipse. It's about two brothers that are werewolves/vampires. They're always fighting.

So, you really liked it? Awsome!

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Just as a sample x3, here's what I can do ^^ This is the first paragraph from something I've written =3



Smoke swirled towards the sky from the open fire at my feet. The ashes drifted lazily towards me, the tiny orange embers dancing a few inches from my face. The scent of the burning wood was slightly overwhelming, as most fires can be when dangerously close to them. The smell of the wood burning was very distinct; I could pick it out against the roasting stench of the coyote I had staked on a stick. The little booger put up a nasty fight, but in the end I won and he was now my dinner.

[Gone Forever:.]

Ok, I just finished reading this book, which has inspired me to write one myself! This book is about a girl who moves into this town. Her new 'friends' invite her to a prank party, and she gets upset and runs into the forest where she meets a wolf/Shapeshifter. And they become friends. And the whole book is about the things they did. And at the end of the book the girl tells the wolf that she is moving away. And as she and her family is driving away from her house, the wolf peeks out of her pocket. He had turned himself into a mouse so he could stay with the girl! It's a really sweet book.
Now I'm going to write something kind of similar. ^_^