Kiana's Notebook-- REWRITING--

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Kiana's Notebook-- REWRITING--

Postby Archaeopteryx. » Sat Jun 13, 2015 9:29 am

The Author wrote:
Welcome to Kiana's Notebook!
Her last notebook didn't have a plot... or detail... or anything really, so I'm rewriting it. It's going to be a mix of first and third person. (Credit to the idea goes to SpadeStudio and Kotah) It also may be a little darker than my first notebook, with a bit of violence and blood.
YOU HAVE BEEN WARNED.
All the characters are still going to be there, so don't worry.
Now on with the show!
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"All my life I wish I broke mirrors instead of promises, 'Cause all I see, is a shattered conscience staring right back at me"
Hey. I'm Kiana.
My English teacher decided it would be a great idea to assign diaries to everyone. But lets get this straight- you are not a diary. You are a notebook. Got it? Good.
So just in case I somehow forget over the next couple years, or if someone is snooping in my dia- er, notebook, Cough Bella get out. here are some pictures of my family.
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From left to right; Me, my little sister Bella Mia (We call her Bell) and my mom.
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And here is my dad and stepmom.

My family is strange. I know- everyone says that. But my family really is weird. My stepmom is training to be a therapist, which is cool because she lets me study with her and I'm seriously thinking about being a therapist too. I like helping animals. My dad is really funny. And my mom recently became a realtor. So I get to go and look in other animal's houses. No I'm not a stalker.
And here's the weirdest thing of all:
I'm cursed.

Kiana yawned, rubbing her open eye with her left paw. She glanced at her phone. It was 2:00AM. I guess I should probably go to bed....
Kiana stood up and turned off her lamp. She stumbled across the room to her bed, bumping into the items sprawled out across the floor. I should probably clean my room soon... She thought, as she fell onto the bed and closed her good eye.
Goodnight Itzal.
Night Kiana.
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Italics; What a character is thinking
Itzal's Telepathic Voice; bold italics
Kiana; #400080
Kiana's Mom; #FF8080
Bell; #00BFFF
Darhk; #00BF00
???; #FF4000
Teachers; #BF0000
Summer; #FF0000
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Re: Kiana's Notebook-- REWRITING--

Postby Archaeopteryx. » Sat Jun 13, 2015 10:00 am

"Please take me away from here, 'cause I feel like such an insomniac"
Hello again notebook!
I probably shouldn't have stayed up until two last night, I feel like I'm going to fall asleep during math class.
So I'm going to write in you to make sure I don't fall asleep.
When I was younger, I was kidnapped. I don't actually remember most of it. I do remember one thing, though...
Flashback wrote:I yelped.
"Keep still!"
I shivered. Where was mom? Or dad? I was so alone, so afraid. I whimpered as I felt the pain spread through my eye. The strange creatures surrounding me jabbed another needle into my pelt. I glanced at them again. They wore white coats, walked on only two legs, and had no fur.
"Stand back."
The creatures stopped talking and stepped back as another creature leaned over me.
I flinched.
"Kiana, listen to me. You must never open your right eye."

"Kiana!"
Kiana jumped, clearly startled. She looked up at the math teacher. "Why hello there."
"What is the answer to the first question?"
She glanced over at the whiteboard."I am currently not taking questions." She grinned.
The teacher strode over to his desk. "And you, young lady, get detention." He handed Kiana a red slip of paper.
Kiana don't you dare-
"You know what's funny? This is the same coding system my sister's class uses. She's ten."
The teacher glared at Kiana, then grabbed a ruler. "Who ever is at the end of this ruler is an idiot."
"Which end?"
Kiana could hear Itzal groan. You are going to get into so much trouble someday.
I get it from you.

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Re: Kiana's Notebook-- REWRITING--

Postby Archaeopteryx. » Sat Jun 13, 2015 3:47 pm

Wow. Internet drama.
No kidding...
Kiana scrolled through the comments on the drawing. I feel tempted to comment something although they'll probably report me.
Do you think it's worth it?
No. I don't know what to write anyway.
Lies.
The bell rang and Kiana looked up from her phone. We're going to be late! Kiana started jogging towards the room where she was supposed to have detention.
"Kiana, you're late." The teacher remarked as Kiana dove into the classroom as the final bell rang.
"A queen is never late. Everyone else is simply early." Kiana stood, brushing herself off.
The teacher glared at Kiana as she took her seat. Kiana took out her notebook and opened it up.
"When did the sky go black, and when will the light come back?"
I have no idea why, but I like to start of my entries with a quote from a song.
Note to self; Keep an eye on the person on Drawcast named LuckyPlover.
Hmm.. my teacher's giving me the stinkeye because I'm writing in detention. I think I'm going to put you away befo

"Hey! Give that back!"
Kiana glared at the dog who took her notebook away.
"Sorry. Not." The dog holding her notebook opened it up and flipped to a random page.
"Give it!" Kiana looked over at the teacher. He was just silently watching. Jerk. Why isn't he helping?
I think he's mad at you for making fun of him.
Probably.
"Hey. Give her back her diary."
Kiana looked up as the dog sitting at the far end of the classroom stood up and made his way over to Kiana.
"Sorry man. No can do."
"Give her back her diary. Or else."
"Or else what?" He closed Kiana's notebook and hugged it close to him.
Instead of answering, the guy standing up for Kiana punched him in the nose.
"Hey. Break it up." The teacher growled.
The two guys backed off and the gray dog picked up Kiana's notebook.
"Here. I'm Darhk" He said, handing it to Kiana.
"T-thanks? I'm Kiana"
Well that was wierd.
This one guy;
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Took my notebook. I have absolutely no idea why. And of course, the teachers just let him. Thanks. So this guy;
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Stood up for me. His name is Darhk. He's kinda cute Don't ask how I got pictures. I do have some secrets.
I think I'm going to put a lock on you so this doesn't happen again.

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Re: Kiana's Notebook-- REWRITING--

Postby Archaeopteryx. » Tue Jun 16, 2015 9:04 am

"Reality is a lovely place, but I wouldn't want to live there."
Hey again notebook.
Shh... I'm writing this really late and I don't want to get in trouble.
I realized that I hadn't really talked about myself :lol:
Erm... okay so...
I go to Littlewood Boarding School. It's a okay school. It's awesome because on one side of the campus is the middle school classes (Which is where I go) and on the other side is the high school classes. The highschoolers don't really bother us.
I don't have a roommate yet but I hear there's a bunch of new kids coming in soon.

There was a knock at the door.
"Come in."
A dog peeked through the door. "Are you Kiana?"
"Yea. Are you my new roommate?" Kiana stood and walked over towards the dog.
"Yep. I'm Summer." The dog awkwardly shouldered her bag and shook Kiana's paw.
"Come on in."
"Thanks." Summer dropped her bag on the bed and sighed in relief. "That was a long flight,"
"Where are you from?"
"Florida."
"Wow." Kiana leaned back and sighed. "I want to live there someday."
There was a sharp knock on the door. "Go to bed."
"Darn it"

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Re: Kiana's Notebook-- REWRITING--

Postby BlondeChick » Thu Jun 18, 2015 7:24 am

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Re: Kiana's Notebook-- REWRITING--

Postby Archaeopteryx. » Sun Jun 28, 2015 5:09 pm

Lift your voice and sing to the deep sky, hold me close and don't let me go.
Hey again Notebook.
So right now we're waiting in line for some kind of 'sorting' thing. It's kinda a new thing at this school, I guess? We're being sorted into groups, and there's several; Popular, Jock, Nerd, Emo/Goth, Normal, Outcast, and another one that's unspeakable, and you only get into it if you're insane/have a really obvious mutation.
That would be a yes and a yes.
I should probably put you away, it's almost my turn.

Kiana put her notebook away in her bag and waited patiently in line, waiting for the dog in front of her to finish up. He was put in Jocks. Kiana stepped forward and quailed under the older girl's gaze.
"Name?" She asked, seeming inpatient.
"Erm... Kiana?" Kiana shifted from paw-to-paw, looking down at the floor.
"Interests?"
"Writing and art."
"Hmm... well you're kinda adorable, so Popular."
Kiana heaved a sigh of relief and stepped out of line. "Wait... why is you eye closed?"
Kiana froze, and turned around slowly. "Umm... I'm cursed?"
The girl stared at Kiana for a couple seconds. "I take that back. Normal."
YES!
SHE DIDN'T CARE THAT I WAS CURSED!
I really need to work on my socializing skills...
So Summer got Popular, and I got Normal.
Although I'm far from normal...

At least you didn't get Omega.
Thank dog.
"Hey- Kiana, right?"
Kiana stiffened and turned around to see Darhk standing behind her with a tray of food. "Y-yeah." He remembered my name!
He smiled at her and she blushed. "Want to come sit with me and my friends?"
"Umm.. sure." She followed him to a near empty table with several wolves clustered around a younger-looking cat.
So Darhk invited me to sit with him. These are his friends;
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Lucy
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Silhouette
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Chase
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Tarka
Lucy and Chase are in normal, Silhouette is in Goth/Emo, and Tarka is a mutant.

Just relax.
i can't.
Shut up. You know you can.
"Hey Kiana, you feeling okay?" Tarka asked, pausing the conversation.
Feeling all the eyes turn to her, she smiled. "I'm fine."
"Good."
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Hey guys! The Author here!
I'm sooo sorry I haven't been writing lately. Been stressed with summer camp and I decided to try to write a novel. Between those two things, it feels like I haven't really had any time to write Kiana's Notebook.
:( I'm sorry.
I also found out I have social anxiety. Not. Fun. At least now I know why I feel so uncomfortable at parties/crowds/anywhere really.
Thanks for reading!
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Re: Kiana's Notebook-- REWRITING--

Postby BlondeChick » Fri Jul 17, 2015 4:17 pm

Ah, its all good c: Dont feel rushed or feel like there is pressure to update, just update in your free time for fun. ^-^


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