Liloa
I really adored the mystery behind what this other parra deserved to be harmed as you stated in your poem. I only wish I knew a bit more about the story here. It would have helped to space the other parts of the form out from the poem.
TheToyMaker
I loved the last couple of lines about how the parrapup is afraid more so of not knowing where the spider is versus seeing it on the wall. Classic.
Scrapheap
Would have liked to see a little bit of formatting for the form. Even a simple bold or underline with some spacing would work. Like the fact the poem is about and showing the parra's personality.
Winter Horror Story
I'm a bit confused with the poem, I think it's how you have decided to format each line of it. It's not bad but it's hard to read like this.
Bleating Ram
Nice twist at the end that I wasn't expecting. It was well written and formatted for a poem.
Kydashing
Not sure if your form was meant to have the parrapup with the same name as your username so that's a bit confusing. If you're going to do that you should probably still have it under a “name” section to avoid confusion. It's a sad poem, but I like it overall.
Exion
Very dark and intimidating as a poem, I didn't understand what it was about at first if a lover, sibling or parents but I eventually got it about halfway in. And dark in a good way, if that makes any sense.
Forever United
Decent poem, remember to be careful about coding. I can't help but feel where the name and gender were placed wasn't exactly where you wanted to put them.
Rainswept
Haha, I like your honesty at the end of your form, even though it was said no extras allowed. It's not as bad of a poem as you think.
Sinister Smile
Haiku's follow a 5,7,5 rule. The top line has 6 syllables. Classic thing to hate though.
Caeneus
Is this written by you? Because this was a real joy to read, oh my biscuits! I loved the poem. The only thing I have to say is the form is a bit weird with that border between the name and gender. I think it might have fit better under those to separate it from the main part of the form, the poem itself.
Mrs. M
Was really surprised at the end of your poem, I wasn't expecting that sort of ending. A sad story I'm wondering if they parra regrets.
Zombiehugs
Nicely formatted form, loved the use of bold to emphasis words in the poem. Overall a decent entry.
~Maddy~
Love the emphasis on the last word, describing what the subject of the poem is doing to not just the one parra but apparently a whole flock. I would have loved more with a bit of background included somehow.
Snowbutt
Not sure it's allowed for the competition to take an already made poem, but I do like the formatting of the form and the poem itself is well written.
Kage the Shadow
A unique concept, form is decently formatted. Not sure if certain lines are meant to be as long as they are... maybe removing the quote would help with that.
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