My past came back fan club!

[wolfsong-mapleflame]

Thank you!

[inkyst]

OMG THIS IS SO GOOOOOOOOOOD! i could NEVER write anything as good as this! YOu're an amazing writer! You should actually publish this!

[wolfsong-mapleflame]

Wow, thank you! I have published it on wattpad.
Wow... I have exams now. But In one more week, I'm on holidays! Which means I can FINALLY finish the second chapter!
So sorry for the delay!

[MidnightMoon666]

It's really good!
I can't wait for Chapter Two!!

[wolfsong-mapleflame]

I shall be finished it soon.

[Jιηx]

So I just read it, and first off, it has a great storyline. Like, seriously- you could probably develop it a little more and get it published. You did a great job there.

The only large problem I noticed is that the writing is a bit repetitive. I write as well, so I know it's hard to keep sentences interestingly worded and constructed, but it did make the story a bit hard to read at points. If you edit it, I would suggest looking at word choice and sentence length. Include short, long, and in between lengths so that it doesn't feel as... not boring, but I guess dull?

[wolfsong-mapleflame]

okay, thanks for the tips. I shall work on editing soon- I am also writing chapter two, between homework, study, and lectures.
also, wow, really? I don't think its that good to be published.

[Jιηx]

You'd be really surprised what can get published, at least with Amazon. They have a really cool young author publishing program that I think you would have no trouble getting through.

[wolfsong-mapleflame]

really? thanks, that means a lot. in fact, I may look into it when I have time.

[wolfsong-mapleflame]

I wont be continuing this, sorry.