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DharSii's Commission of Zeph by obsceneSymphony

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DharSii's Commission of Zeph

Postby obsceneSymphony » Sun Nov 07, 2010 12:02 pm

Zeph seems to have fallen asleep in a tree :what: *pokes*. Heh, this was fun to draw. I'll do the other one tomorrow, or maybe tonight.
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Re: DharSii's Commicion of Zeph

Postby kadoodlebird » Sun Nov 07, 2010 12:23 pm

This is very cute. However, I'm not sure if this is quite ready for intermidiete. :3
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Re: DharSii's Commicion of Zeph

Postby obsceneSymphony » Sun Nov 07, 2010 12:30 pm

kadoodlebird wrote:This is very cute. However, I'm not sure if this is quite ready for intermidiete. :3

My number one pet peeve is when people say 'Sorry this isn't ready for intermediate' without giving crit. If you're going to say it isn't very good, say why -_-"
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Re: DharSii's Commission of Zeph

Postby Erythro » Sun Nov 07, 2010 12:56 pm

I'm going to say that this isn't intermediate, because a few things. DharSiis fursona has more detail than a few scribbles on the fur. Here's a reference she wrote up on the markings to her fursona. ^^ Also, your lines are to simple, add a few dimensions to them where a bone may be. Lastly, I know this is complicated but go the experiments board and experiment ways to draw fur, with the fur effect I think you could definitely be intermediate. ^^

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Information about Design

Basic Colors

  • I'm the kind of person who generally prefers "dark" colors, so black is perfect for me; plus it doesn't burn my eyes. ^^
  • Purple is my overall favorite color, I know this is a color generally preferred by - well - everybody, but you can never have too much purple

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  • Zeph's face mainly represents me in expression alone.
  • I'm a generally serious person, and I don't tend to joke around in real life, it's easier to act goofy on the internet, though, so this doesn't show as well online as it does in my actual life.


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  • The heart represents my more feminine side, something that doesn't come out often. The blurring glow around the edges shows how inconspicuous my feminine side is.




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  • The fire represents not my love for fire, but my insane fear of it. I've always feared fire and heat, no matter what form it may be in. This is why sometimes Zeph is shown with her fire, and other times without it.
  • The design on her left front paw is completely random and represents my more random tendencies.



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  • The shooting star and moon represent my ability to link unrelated things. They're fairly easy to relate now that you see the shooting star and the moon are both in outer space, but beforehand you probably just thought the crescent moon was a semi-circle or otherwise. I tend to make links from milk to dinosaurs, so this represents me well.
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Re: DharSii's Commission of Zeph

Postby obsceneSymphony » Sun Nov 07, 2010 12:58 pm

Oh, I couldn't make out the marking. I'll stick those in. Thanks, Tenebre!
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Re: DharSii's Commission of Zeph

Postby Erythro » Sun Nov 07, 2010 1:02 pm

misttt wrote:Oh, I couldn't make out the marking. I'll stick those in. Thanks, Tenebre!


Well, I hope that DharSiis little guide helps next time you draw her fursona! ^^ I still love this though, shows purely what Zeph is like, perezoso! (Lazy in Spanish)
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Re: DharSii's Commicion of Zeph

Postby Josie A. Drake » Sun Nov 07, 2010 1:08 pm

misttt wrote:
kadoodlebird wrote:This is very cute. However, I'm not sure if this is quite ready for intermidiete. :3

My number one pet peeve is when people say 'Sorry this isn't ready for intermediate' without giving crit. If you're going to say it isn't very good, say why -_-"


I know, i hate that, too.

I think it's really super cute, but it's not really well composed. There's not a lot of personality in the character, and the pose doesn't really look that natural. The coloring could be a little smoother, and some shading would really help. Try giving your subject a more obvious expression next time. (I know that's hard when your subject is sleeping..maybe make her smiling, or furrow her brow, depending on her mood) try drawing him/her from different angles in more natural poses. if you're having trouble, look around the boards for examples and tutorials. Even just studying other artist's styles will help. Don't be afraid to expirement with new styles on the sketches board, no one will critique you there unless you want them to. ;) I like your style of highlighting, but it doesn't look quite right on a furry animal. (although it's perfect for drawing stuff like glass bottles or jars and stuff like that.)
Anyway, i know critique is not fun to hear, but I hope i've helped you out. :) We've all been here. I hate having my art critiqued, but it's pretty important for me to improve.
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Re: DharSii's Commission of Zeph

Postby obsceneSymphony » Sun Nov 07, 2010 1:14 pm

Thanks for your critique, I'm not good at mouths (Like, really really bad :/) so I have a lot of trouble with expressions. I realized that, even though I did have shading it was barely visible, so thanks! Seriously, I love crit, it helps me improve, but when people just say it's not intermediate. Yeah, thanks guys. Reeaaall helpful
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Re: DharSii's Commicion of Zeph

Postby Erythro » Sun Nov 07, 2010 1:15 pm

Josie A. Drake wrote:
misttt wrote:
kadoodlebird wrote:This is very cute. However, I'm not sure if this is quite ready for intermidiete. :3

My number one pet peeve is when people say 'Sorry this isn't ready for intermediate' without giving crit. If you're going to say it isn't very good, say why -_-"


I know, i hate that, too.

I think it's really super cute, but it's not really well composed. There's not a lot of personality in the character, and the pose doesn't really look that natural. The coloring could be a little smoother, and some shading would really help. Try giving your subject a more obvious expression next time. (I know that's hard when your subject is sleeping..maybe make her smiling, or furrow her brow, depending on her mood) try drawing him/her from different angles in more natural poses. if you're having trouble, look around the boards for examples and tutorials. Even just studying other artist's styles will help. Don't be afraid to expirement with new styles on the sketches board, no one will critique you there unless you want them to. ;) I like your style of highlighting, but it doesn't look quite right on a furry animal. (although it's perfect for drawing stuff like glass bottles or jars and stuff like that.)
Anyway, i know critique is not fun to hear, but I hope i've helped you out. :) We've all been here. I hate having my art critiqued, but it's pretty important for me to improve.


Yeah, I just do tests but I never post them. And I've looked a ton of intermediate artists enough to learn different techniques to improve my drawing. ^^

misttt wrote:Thanks for your critique, I'm not good at mouths (Like, really really bad :/) so I have a lot of trouble with expressions. I realized that, even though I did have shading it was barely visible, so thanks! Seriously, I love crit, it helps me improve, but when people just say it's not intermediate. Yeah, thanks guys. Reeaaall helpful


About the mouths, just go experiment if you're having trouble. ^^ And just go have fun in the sketches and experiments! That's what they are there for! Oh, and I noticed that you improved the symbols. It is looking a lot better now! Just have fun with what you are drawing. Don't worry about bad critiques.
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Re: DharSii's Commission of Zeph

Postby DharSii » Sun Nov 07, 2010 1:21 pm

Tenebre wrote:
misttt wrote:Oh, I couldn't make out the marking. I'll stick those in. Thanks, Tenebre!


Well, I hope that DharSiis little guide helps next time you draw her fursona! ^^ I still love this though, shows purely what Zeph is like, perezoso! (Lazy in Spanish)

Were you just implying on my laziness, Ten? :P


Although it is true, I'm lazy. x3

Thanks a ton for her, misttt, she looks gorgeous. C: ((although you drew a purple blob on her chest next to the star; that's not something that's on her design. x3)) Thanks again! ♥
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