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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby Arcaii » Wed Jun 18, 2014 10:22 am

Raddy wrote:this is the protagonist!

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Name: Dragon (flight) [I always have thought that the prefix Dragon- goes for a tortishell cat :D ]
Gender: Female
Clan: Forestclan
Rank: Rouge (Warrior before)
Personality/Skills: As a kit, her siblings treated her like dirt. Her brother is Woodheart. The only ones who have ever treated her like she could amount to anything are her mentor Flyingheart and her best friend/ almost mate Brackenclaw. She is a skilled tracker and jumps from tree to tree to chase down prey. She is a soft spoken girl who is pushed around alot, so she one day got fed up with it and got into a fight with her brother. Woodheart tricked her into almost killing him and then smuggly told her that she would be punished for this, she she ran away and became a rouge. She toughened up and stopped feeling sorry for herself after a few moons, she swore that she would never go back to the clan. Even if she is begged, she will never go back.
Important Notes: She is kind of runty


I thoroughly apologize if I hurt your feelings with any rudeness in any of these reviews. It's been a long day, I'm tired, and about 2/3rds of these cats are ones I've had to review a million times. I'm completely done with reviewing cats today.

Name Rating: 1/10
Name Type: Lyrical
Name Reasoning: You know what's funny about dragons? They don't exist. Humans created them in their minds, and no cat alive would ever be seeing one or imagining the same kind of dragon that we would, if they imagined them at all. That, and they come in a million shapes, in a million colors (not just tortoiseshell, but literally every color), from a million different places. No cat would have this prefix specifically because there's way too much variation to possibly hold a suitable name.
Her suffix doesn't work, and I'm just going to throw a quote from previous posts at you because I'm tired of repeating myself and for some reason I still haven't put it on the front:
The basics follow -wing: it's something cats can't really do, and if it wanted to say a fast cat or agile climber, it's covered by -foot and -tail.

There are far more suitable suffixes out there.
Alternative Name: Lichentail/Morningnose. -tail is for if she's more skilled of a climber than she is a tracker, and -nose is vice versa. The prefixes cover a dilute tortie.

Character Rating: 3/10
Character Reasoning: This cat is...a mess. Why would she be pushed around? Why would anyone specifically pick on her? They have no reason to, and bullying isn't tolerated in the Clans. At all. Why would they treat her badly? Also, what about her parents? Why couldn't she trust them? Were they needlessly picking on her too? Why is anyone being mean to her in the first place?!
This entire backstory has no sense to it. There's no reason for her to be bullied, or chased out, or be the world's pin cushion, or anything! All of it is pointlessly tragic; all of the characters are pointlessly cruel...everything is without reason.
This history seriously needs a revamp. In fact, get rid of it entirely. My rule is that the history must not be longer than the personality or skills description. I want to see the cat in the present, not the past.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby Raddy » Wed Jun 18, 2014 10:26 am

Thank you for the reveiwing of this mess of cats. I was 11 when I made them and now I facepalm when I see them. Dragon does have significance to me though, so I will change her backstory. Sorry to pester you with the ridiculous names!
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby Arcaii » Wed Jun 18, 2014 11:44 am

It's alright. I've had worse names with worse characters, both personally and reviewing wise. Let me know if you need any other assistance.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby .kestral » Wed Jun 18, 2014 7:00 pm

Okay Arcaii, what's the worst warriors name you can think of? Or worst warrior cat in name, personality and appearance? I'm curious?
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby horchata » Wed Jun 18, 2014 9:45 pm

Thought I'd make a brother for Blizzardwhisker :3

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Name: Aspentail
Gender: MAale
Clan: Depends on RP
Rank: Depends on RP, either Warrior or Deputy
Personality/Skills: He, like his brother, prefers to avoid fighting. He'd rather tag along on a hunting patrol than confront some hostile cats on the border far away from camp, which results in his slim, lithe physique and tree-climbing abilities. He isn't afraid to get his paws wet, either.
Important Notes: None really.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby Arcaii » Thu Jun 19, 2014 4:36 am

.kestral wrote:Okay Arcaii, what's the worst warriors name you can think of? Or worst warrior cat in name, personality and appearance? I'm curious?


As a policy, I try not to give out any names or cats I've thought are particularly ridiculous. It just seems a little mean to point out someone and say, "Their character is the worst, let's point and laugh" - never a good feeling to be on the receiving end.

I will say that there's a few rules that act as warning flags that a character is bound to be terrible. The history (which, by the way, I never ask for) is twice as long as the description of the cat, its personality and skill set (things I actually ask for), for example. Characters who exist in a vacuum, as well - the ones who don't act like they live in a Clan, or never receive punishment for what they do. Certain prefixes have a guarantee of a dull character (you can read about some of those up front). Characters that exist solely to gain sympathy, or are overpowered to the point of not being able to be challenged at all, or have the label "crazy" slapped on. Mental illness in a character is rarely, if ever, done well, especially amongst beginners.
Hopefully that was vague enough to not directly point anyone out.

I'm sorely tempted to make a character guide/suggestion post because some of these things can be very easily fixed with a simple tweak, and some need an overhaul. That may be a little too assuming of me, though, so I'll just stick with reviews for now.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby Arcaii » Thu Jun 19, 2014 4:43 am

KitKat~ wrote:Thought I'd make a brother for Blizzardwhisker :3

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Name: Aspentail
Gender: MAale
Clan: Depends on RP
Rank: Depends on RP, either Warrior or Deputy
Personality/Skills: He, like his brother, prefers to avoid fighting. He'd rather tag along on a hunting patrol than confront some hostile cats on the border far away from camp, which results in his slim, lithe physique and tree-climbing abilities. He isn't afraid to get his paws wet, either.
Important Notes: None really.


I had to scroll back to remember Blizzardwhisker. Good to see that they actually do look like they're in the same litter.

Name Rating: 10/10
Name Type: Traditional
Name Reasoning: The name fits him soundly. Aspen- and -tail always seem to go well together, don't they? Certain prfixes and suffixes just sound nice together, and this is one of them.
Alternative Name: None!

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: He's solid! I can picture him being a little flighty in arguments, or having a tendency to disappear into the trees when there's a tense aura about the camp. I wouldn't see him as deputy material, unless he has a way of dissipating arguments and keeping situations calm instead of just fleeing them.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby mistywater » Thu Jun 19, 2014 8:33 am

Right, some ideas, from Ginger's generator.

Name: Starlingpelt.
Description: Tall, thin, black tom with small white paws and green eyes.
Important Notes:

Name: Loonleaf.
Description: Wiry, lean, black and white tom with green eyes.
Important Notes: Good with herbs, sorta grumpy and feels left out sometimes, but don't mind that emotional stuff.

Name: Cherryclaw.
Description: Vivid red molly with pale yellow eyes. Considered pretty.
Important Notes: She's a good fighter.

Name: Barleycloud.
Description: Light brown tom with amber eyes.
Important Notes: Mellow, easygoing and will give advice to troubled apprentices.

Name: Poppyflower.
Description: Pretty red molly with bright green eyes.
Important Notes: Almost always followed by kits. She never minds one bit.

Name: Briarfoot.
Description: Tough, stocky, scarred dark brown tabby tom with amber eyes.
Important Notes: Quiet, deep-voiced, a good mentor and a fast runner.

Name: Nightingaleface.
Description: Light brown, handsome and proud-looking tom with pale yellow eyes.
Important Notes: He lost a toe, but I can't think of a name suitable for...er...this kind of loss.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby horchata » Thu Jun 19, 2014 8:38 am

Ah, sweet, I was hoping to make a 10/10 character this time around. Thanks a lot! He might show up in MillClan a bit later.
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