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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby prince. » Mon May 19, 2014 4:22 am

Would you review a cat who joined the clan but kept his old name?))
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby Arcaii » Mon May 19, 2014 5:08 am

I could. If you mean a kittypet/loner, then I would suggest a name change, but I can review them.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby prince. » Mon May 19, 2014 5:12 am

This was his form;

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Ace of Spades



Username-

Sparrowpaw the great

Cat name-

Ace of Spades

Gender-

Tom

Age-

10 moons

Rank-

Kittypet

Desired rank-

Apprentice

Desired name-

None, I like my name

Personality-

He can appear snappy and arrogant, but is actually a sweetheart. However, he is known to disappear under stressful situations.

Brief history-

Born a Kittypet, raised a Kittypet. Not much to say here

Mate/crush-

None / Open

Kits-

None

Kin-

Doesn't know, doesn't care

Breed-

Shorthair tabby



Secrets-

Once was a feared killer, who would hurt other kittypets

Likes-

Dark Places

Warmth

Being in control

Mice

Dislikes-

Being ignored

Heights

Sparrows, water voles


Fears-

Heights

Meeting cats he has hurt in the past

Someone finding out he was a killer

Ambitions-

To be respected

To get a mate and kits

Advantages-

Fast Runner

Good Climber

Food Swimmer

Disadvantages-

Easily distracted

Disappears under stressful situations

Body features-

Scar on his flank from his killing days

Eye color-

Amber

Fur color-

Silver

Size-

Medium, lithe build. Good for running

Mentor wanted-

Doesn't care, not fussy

Nicknames-

Ace

Spades

Clan/ Residence-

In my housefolks nest

Other-

He will keep his Kittypet name when he joins the Clan
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby .kestral » Mon May 19, 2014 5:19 am

Kittypet turned clan cat, so clan name suggestions would rock. I would love it if you could keep his Kittypet name in there somewhere, or something similar :)

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Name:
Tuna
Gender:
Tom
Clan:
One of my own, if he was an original clan cat he would be from Riverclan.
Rank:
Kittypet -> Warrior
Personality/Skills:
Tuna is a cat who will always push himself, he had to prove he was worth the time and energy the clan would have to put into making him a warrior. He is extremely determined, willing to go to any lengths to prove himself. He won't ever hesitate to do whats right, even if it conflicts with his new families way of life. His need to show he is worth there time can make him see a little kittish at times as he gets excited at learning new things, he gets a little irritated when someone or something interrupts his training as from the start he has been on a time limit. If he can't impress them quickly they could easily turn around and think he isn't worth it. He doesn't seem to realise that they actually do want him around, and that the clan values him.

Skill wise he is a good swimmer, and is rather good at fishing having learned to hunt in his old owners pond. This skill was one his clan didn't actually have and he quickly showed them how to do it, creating another food source. He is okay at climbing, and is an average fighter. His land hunting skills are okay, but not fantastic.
Important Notes:
Not really important, but his brothers are called Trout and Salmon.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby Arcaii » Mon May 19, 2014 5:53 am

Sparrowpaw the great wrote:This was his form;

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Ace of Spades


Username- Sparrowpaw the great
Cat name- Ace of Spades
Gender- Tom
Age- 10 moons
Rank- Kittypet
Desired rank- Apprentice
Desired name- None, I like my name
Personality- He can appear snappy and arrogant, but is actually a sweetheart. However, he is known to disappear under stressful situations.
Brief history- Born a Kittypet, raised a Kittypet. Not much to say here
Mate/crush- None / Open
Kits- None
Kin- Doesn't know, doesn't care
Breed- Shorthair tabby
Secrets- Once was a feared killer, who would hurt other kittypets
Likes-
Dark Places
Warmth
Being in control
Mice
Dislikes-
Being ignored
Heights
Sparrows, water voles

Fears-
Heights
Meeting cats he has hurt in the past
Someone finding out he was a killer
Ambitions-
To be respected
To get a mate and kits
Advantages-
Fast Runner
Good Climber
Food Swimmer
Disadvantages-
Easily distracted
Disappears under stressful situations
Body features- Scar on his flank from his killing days
Eye color- Amber
Fur color- Silver
Size- Medium, lithe build. Good for running
Mentor wanted- Doesn't care, not fussy
Nicknames-
Ace
Spades
Clan/ Residence- In my housefolks nest
Other-He will keep his Kittypet name when he joins the Clan


Name Suggestion: Aspenfoot/Stonefoot
Name Reasoning: This is gunna be a long one, I can feel it.
The thing is, when a cat moves into the Clan, they are agreeing to abide by the rules set in place long ago and honor the traditions of their new home. A rename signifies that the cat has stepped into their new role and has abandoned the life that they had before, and are now going to focus entirely on the Clan and its well-being without ever looking back.
By keeping their kittypet or loner name, they still have a paw in each world, to quote Bluestar. Insisting on keeping their name will be seen as disrespectful of the code and a sign that this cat will likely be a waste of time, as they'll go back to their old home.
There's absolutely no reason for him to continue being Ace, because he isn't a kittypet anymore. He's a warrior. He should have the prefix suffix combo.
Anyway, Aspen- and Stone- reflect a grey cat, and I decided that he would likely be best at running, so he's named -foot.

Character Rating: 5/10
Character Reasoning: There's a fair amount of issues here, but I'll try to be quick.
A) Being flighty and cowardly aren't disadvantages. Those are personality traits. A disadvantage is something like a limp, or being slow, or frail, or blind in one eye. Physical, not personal.
B) This does not in the least sound like an ideal Clan cat. He's arrogant and rude, he leaves when the going gets rough (around the time that a true Clan cat would step up and get to work), he wants to disregard tradition and keep his original name for...some reason, and he fights, or at least fought, cats for kicks and has, or had, no issues about killing. It's the second to last rule in the stated code that a cat shouldn't kill if they can help it. If someone got a hold on the fact that he was a murderer, he would be out faster than you can blink - that is, if his attitude didn't get him kicked out already.
C) A difficult and disagreeable cat is somehow a sweetheart. :T
D) His skills are a little all over the place. He should have two set skills maximum - I suggest knocking off swimming, since he seems like someone who doesn't like to get muddy and wet.
That's about it, I think. In conclusion, find an actual disadvantage or two, have only two advantages maximum and focus on one more, at least make him a little more agreeable if you want the leader to think that he could be a good addition to the Clan, and for god's sake, please don't use the "mean but secretly nice" bullroar.
That last one is my own peeve, but seriously.
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby Arcaii » Mon May 19, 2014 6:03 am

.kestral wrote:
Kittypet turned clan cat, so clan name suggestions would rock. I would love it if you could keep his Kittypet name in there somewhere, or something similar :)

Image/Description:
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Name:Tuna
Gender:Tom
Clan:One of my own, if he was an original clan cat he would be from Riverclan.
Rank:Kittypet -> Warrior
Personality/Skills:Tuna is a cat who will always push himself, he had to prove he was worth the time and energy the clan would have to put into making him a warrior. He is extremely determined, willing to go to any lengths to prove himself. He won't ever hesitate to do whats right, even if it conflicts with his new families way of life. His need to show he is worth there time can make him see a little kittish at times as he gets excited at learning new things, he gets a little irritated when someone or something interrupts his training as from the start he has been on a time limit. If he can't impress them quickly they could easily turn around and think he isn't worth it. He doesn't seem to realise that they actually do want him around, and that the clan values him.

Skill wise he is a good swimmer, and is rather good at fishing having learned to hunt in his old owners pond. This skill was one his clan didn't actually have and he quickly showed them how to do it, creating another food source. He is okay at climbing, and is an average fighter. His land hunting skills are okay, but not fantastic.
Important Notes:Not really important, but his brothers are called Trout and Salmon.


Ha, Tuna. Cute name for a kittypet. I'll have to remember that one.

Name Suggestion:[b] Bleakstream/Dacestream
[b]Name Reasoning:
Not only are both prefixes types of fish, to keep the theme, but they indicate a blue-grey cat or silvery cat (he looks rather blue to me). -stream is for his skills in swimming.

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: Overall, I can see no outstanding issues. Everything is consistent and keeps together, and I can picture him being jokingly told to cut back on the working and training, he's gunna make everyone else look bad. Well done to you!
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Re: Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer

Postby .kestral » Mon May 19, 2014 6:15 am

Tuna/Bleakstream likes your review and thanks you very much :)
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