Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer [CLOSED]

[Pokechu12]

Haha, yeah. And that you for the review! I'll probably be posting on your territory thread with something a little more interesting.

In regards to the Tigerstar thing, I see where you're coming from. c: At least if I ever have anyone objecting against him being Tigerstar with a different name, I have an argument!

[Arcaii]

Go right ahead, it's been dead a while, haha.

Yeah, man! Unfortunately, big brown tabbies have been having problems since day one. I actually remember, back when I was a newbie to this whole thing, having the same attitude.

[Arcaii]

Bump.

[Arcaii]

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[Arcaii]

And we're bumpin' it up.

[meowingtons]

Image/Description:

Name: Smudgepelt/leaf, depends on the rank
Gender: She-Cat
Clan: ScarletClan, yet I use her in many other clans
Rank: Warrior/Medicine Cat
Personality/Skills: Smudgepelt is a skilled hunter, climber, and is a good tracker. She is kind and gentle to all cats, especially kits.
Important Notes: Nope! c:

[Arcaii]

Image/Description:

Name: Smudgepelt/leaf, depends on the rank
Gender: She-Cat
Clan: ScarletClan, yet I use her in many other clans
Rank: Warrior/Medicine Cat
Personality/Skills: Smudgepelt is a skilled hunter, climber, and is a good tracker. She is kind and gentle to all cats, especially kits.
Important Notes: Nope! c:

Sorry if this sounds blunt or rude, I had a sour evening.

Name Rating: 6/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: I think I've heard Smudge- somewhere on here, but I'm not sure. In any case, Smudge- usually refers to a patch of color on a white cat that looks like a smudge. Smudges look like this, though. They're very slight markings, not big splotches, like your cat has. Plus, it doesn't really describe enough; at best, it would really only say that this cat has a small marking of color, which could mean any color or any place of that color.
Now for -leaf. While it is for medicine cats exclusively, she doesn't really strike me as a -leaf. -leaf cats are extraordinarily talented at what they do; they have heightened intelligence and are usually the ones who create new cures, or at least knows how to use cures effectively and quickly at the drop of a hat. All -leaf cats are medicine cats, but not all medicine cats are -leafs.
She's a good hunter and tracker, and I think that she should be named for that. (As a medicine cat, she would probably spend more time tracking than hunting, and as a warrior vice versa.)
Alternative Name: Loonwhisker/Magpienose (Suffixes and prefixes interchangeable). Loon- and Magpie- refer to a black and white cat, and -whisker denotes hunting skill, while -nose indicates a good tracker.

Character Rating: 5/10
Character Reasoning: There isn't a whole lot to go on, but I'll do what I can. The first thing is that she seems to be pretty evenly leveled in all of the skills. I recommend sticking to one or two (like above, -whisker for a warrior, -nose for a medicine cat), because three's a little cluttered and unneeded.
The second thing is that she has a very typical female medicine cat personality. The sweet, kind and gentle molly who's particularly fond of kits (and for some reason didn't have her own). It's been played out way too often, and it's fairly basic without any work needed. Bland, I believe is the term.
My suggestion is to give her an overhaul. Make her sarcastic and passive-aggressive, or make her unattractive and a bad liar. She could be someone who can't stand interacting with anyone if it's not important, she could have no faith in StarClan because she never received any prophecies or omens, she can hate thunder and rain and refuses to go near water unless it's in a clump of moss. The list of possibilities is endless, and some of these can exist in the same cat. Subvert people's expectations, and more often than not the feedback is positive.

[Hush]

Image/Description: here Spottedcry is a large she-cat. She is really fluffy with her tail as the most fluffy part of her body. Her eyes are yellow and she is mostly white with some black and orange markings on the top part of her torso.
Name: Spottedcry
Gender: she-cat
Clan: Out of the 4 original probably Riverclan
Rank: warrior
Personality/Skills: She has a very seductive aura around her but don't let that fool you. She's a spitfire she-cat that will swat away anyone who try's to mess with her. She's the type that says the opposite of what she is really feeling so watch out. She can be a bit difficult to get along with but she still is kind to most everyone.
Important Notes: She is the only girl of a litter of 6 so that is something that effects her temperament

Name: Vampirefang/star
Description: Vampirestar is a large tom with long legs and short white fur. He has deep red eyes with a light grey nose. 
Important Notes: He is albino and is a rather unemotional cat. Has always been the leader of his siblings but has had conflict with his brother who has always fought with him since they were kits and always wins against him because his brother runs on emotions while he is always calm.

[Arcaii]

Image/Description: here Spottedcry is a large she-cat. She is really fluffy with her tail as the most fluffy part of her body. Her eyes are yellow and she is mostly white with some black and orange markings on the top part of her torso.
Name: Spottedcry
Gender: she-cat
Clan: Out of the 4 original probably Riverclan
Rank: warrior
Personality/Skills: She has a very seductive aura around her but don't let that fool you. She's a spitfire she-cat that will swat away anyone who try's to mess with her. She's the type that says the opposite of what she is really feeling so watch out. She can be a bit difficult to get along with but she still is kind to most everyone.
Important Notes: She is the only girl of a litter of 6 so that is something that effects her temperament

Name: Vampirefang/star
Description: Vampirestar is a large tom with long legs and short white fur. He has deep red eyes with a light grey nose. 
Important Notes: He is albino and is a rather unemotional cat. Has always been the leader of his siblings but has had conflict with his brother who has always fought with him since they were kits and always wins against him because his brother runs on emotions while he is always calm.

Though you put the name-only for the second cat, I'm inclined to do a full on review, since I have a lot of information required for it and...other reasons.

This got super long, my apologies.

Spottedcry
Name Rating: 5/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: Spotted- is more for a tortoiseshell or a dappled tabby than a calico, since it refers to smaller patches of color. A calico is majority white, with (usually) big patches of color, such as she has. It's a traditional name, but it just doesn't work for this cat due to how her coat works.
As for -cry, there's two major flaws with it. The first is that, at best, -cry would imply a cat that's good at screaming and yowling, which is fine if you want to scare the daylights out of someone, but it's not exactly a skill worth naming, and at worst, it implies a crybaby, which is most certainly not something good to be named for. The second is that there's no indication that she actually does either of them. Suffixes, at least on this thread, are geared towards giving a skill that's useful and that the cat can actually preform very well, so this suffix doesn't really have a use on her.
Alternative Name: Brightstorm/Gannetstorm. Bright- refers to a patched cat with a majority of white on their coat, and Gannet- is for a calico. -storm will be explained more thoroughly below.

Character Rating: 5/10
Character Reasoning: Here's the thing, real talk: this does not seem like the kind of cat anyone would want in a Clan. She's a liar, bad-tempered, and a very difficult person to interact with. A good Clan cat has pretty much the opposite of those traits - the Clan needs someone who can be trusted, can be interacted with easily, and won't start picking fights for no reason. It seems to me that a lot of people forget that these cats live together throughout their lives - the Clan is more than a community, it's a family, and how someone acts will affect their relationship with everyone.
What I would suggest is toning some of this down, and adding some more desirable (for lack of a better word) traits, which brings me to -storm. A -storm cat has a rather dynamic, unpredictable nature, with an upswing personality (which is extroverted and energetic), and a downswing personality (which is calm and more introverted). The main thing to note about -storm is that these cats swing from these personalities over the course of days or weeks, and eventually calm down and become their downswing personality entirely. What exactly these two personalities entail is up to you, but the basic rule is that a -storm cat will be energetic and fiery in their upswing, and calm in their down.
To my main point: This cat has the possibility to be a very good -storm cat. Her up personality could be loud, flirtatious, energetic, stubborn, and quick to anger, while her down personality could be thoughtful, lax, open to different mindsets, and steadfastly confident. Of course, that's just an example, but I think you get the picture.



Vampirefang
Name Rating: 2/10
Name Type: Lyrical
Name Reasoning: I've been wondering when I'd get a mythical creature name. Right about time, too, I was about to post something about those kinds of names. (knuckles crack)
The biggest problem with names like Vampire-, Dragon-, or some other third name is that these are human creatures, not cats. Cats would have no idea who these guys are, because their mythology is centered on their own ancestors, not some pretend beings that humans concocted. The second biggest problem is the wild variation of these creatures. Even if cats knew about them, there are so many types of dragons around the world - green ones, two-legged, brightly colored and furry, giant, small, a part of nature or created with metal, etc - as well as so many types of vampires - you can read here for the entire list. The coats would be too wildly varied to say anything about the cat. It'd be like naming them Dog-. There's also the fact that most vampires are humans, aka a creature that cats don't want to interact with, much less read up about.
Meanwhile, over at -fang, this suffix doesn't suit him. A -fang cat has skills in both hunting and fighting, while not particularly excelling at either, but definitely being above average. He doesn't appear to have either skill be notable, so there's that.
Alternative Name: Sloecloud/Lightcloud. Sloe- and Light- refer to a white cat, and -cloud is for a particularly calm cat, which will be elaborated on much like -storm below.

Character Rating: 6/10
Character Reasoning: First thing I want to get to: an albino cat is completely white, without a single marking. Albinism is when there's a complete lack of color in the pigments, which is what makes albino animals completely white with those classic pink or red eyes. There would be no grey marking anywhere on this cat if he was a true albino, and his eyes would either be a very light pink or a very light, nearly purple blue, and most certainly not deep red.
That said, let's get to his personality.
A collected, calm cat is fine, but unemotional is pushing it. Logic and coldness do not automatically win over anything, and a very distant, cold cat is not someone you would want in a Clan, much less as a leader, because the Clan is, again, all about a family that needs to be close and work together. I don't know about you, but if I was a leader and I had to pick between a passionate, energetic cat who is naturally social and a distant, aloof, cold cat, I would without a doubt select the one who is more likely to connect with their future charges on an emotional level and be compassionate to others' plights.
So here's my suggestion.
Make him a calm, collected, and ultimately relaxed cat who keeps a level head no matter what. Someone who stays steady and takes charge in an emergency is someone that the leader is going to notice. These cats tend to be patient, understanding, and objective, and will dissipate a fight without getting riled. A -cloud cat can be lazy and occasionally apathetic, but what stands out is their levelheadedness, and combined with a natural leadership quality, this would be a very ideal leader.
Emotions are not a bad thing for a leader to have in the least. What matters is how they handle these emotions.

[Hush]

Name: Harley (I can never seem to think of a clan cat name for him so just Harley)
Description: Harley is an enormous fluffy Tom. His fur is what really makes him look big though, he is actually quite muscular under all that fluffy fur. His legs are long but look shorter because of his fur. He has a black pelt with white legs that are different lengths, the shortest his toes the longest his entire leg. He has a white spot on his chest that covers most of it and goes to his belly, his eyes are a nice grassy green. Half of his muzzle is white while the other half gets smaller as it curls around his top lip.
Important Notes: Harley is a kind Tom who treats all cats with the same respect because of his unknown origin. He is particularly fond of kits and loves to play with them mostly because of his younger adoptive siblings. He's also apart of the siblings group. He usually enjoys helping apprentices train even if they aren't his. He'd always help his more determined siblings train growing up because of his enormous size.

I understand where you're comming from their personalities are in the works when I write what they are instead of how they actually are. It's weird for me to keep a static character. Vampirefang even had an incident where he went a little crazy which was fun but not something I wanted.