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Re: The Artist Army

Postby tinydoodles » Tue Feb 04, 2014 2:58 pm

Kaishine: I don't have much to say anatomy-wise since not much is visible, but as far as I can tell her proportions look just fine. Her face, however, seems slightly lopsided to me. I'm not sure what your sketching process is, but I would suggest using some guidelines to center the eyes and nose and keep them positioned correctly.

Bluewolf: I think narrowing the wolf's muzzle a bit would work wonders, it looks a bit to thick right now imo. I'd also suggest speeding up the animation a bit too, because she's blinking rather slowly and with the number of frames you have it would flow better in a shorter time frame :>

Stonefly: That's looking great! I love the shading on his helmet and face. But his head seems slightly too big to me. I would also suggest angling the bridge of his nose farther back into his head, if that makes sense?? The line from his forehead to nose tip looks too straight.

gwen trix: Those look very cute C: On the linearts, I'd suggest making the paws a bit smaller. You might think about making the last bone on the hind legs lower on all of them, too.

I finished sketching this earlier today and I was hoping for some tips/critique on it. Redlines are ok if you'd like to, but I'd prefer not tbh :') Please ignore the sketchiness, the final will be cleaner.
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Re: The Artist Army

Postby EmberWolf » Tue Feb 04, 2014 3:15 pm

@gwen trix- I love your style! very very cute and nice and smooth c: the only thing I think I can critique on is that your back legs seemed to be a bit too spread out at times, as if the one further from us is on some different level of ground than all the other paws. Other than that, really nice!

@tinydoodles- aah that's pretty uwu I'm not that knowledgeable with human stuff so I can't see much wrong, but I think your feet are a bit small/short. A human foot is the same length as their forearm (which seems so weird to me but I mean I tried it with myself, from my elbow to my wrist is the same length as my foot). So maybe lengthen the feet(shoes) a bit?? Other than that, really really nice, and I can't wait to see it finished if you ever do ^u^
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Re: The Artist Army

Postby PFDC » Tue Feb 04, 2014 3:31 pm

*BlueWolf*
Very good! But maybe move the eye so he's not looking up? And speed up the blink with more time between blinks, of that makes sense lol. It'll look more natural

Stonefly
.0. WOW! The one things is see are shading problems. Mainly the hair and eyes. Try (on seperate piece of paper) experimenting with different techniques to shade eyes and hair. They're hard, but make a drawing pop! Other than that amazing

Gwen trix
My canine anatomy is poop but those are great! The legs look well proportioned, and the poses are very natural

Tinydoodles
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You're too good you need to calm down your awesomeness
They're posed very naturally and it seems like you copied a photograph, IN A GOOD WAY! As in they look so naturally posed that they could have been doing that in real life and someone snapped a photo. A lot of couple drawings these days are too stiff, but this is amazing


A few things. You only need to help me one of course ^^
please don't tell me to fix my line quality it's my style and I won't be changing it


I don't want redlines on this one unless you think it's dire
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The rest redlines are very welcome ^^
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Re: The Artist Army

Postby Veins Of Opal » Wed Feb 05, 2014 9:57 am

Tinydoodles; Oh my gooooosh your style is so cute! I'm really liking it so far! One thing I see, however, is that you could probably make the feet a little longer, 'cause they're a bit short. But, otherwise, I'm in love with it! c:

Stonefly; The link you provided doesn't seem to work for me, do you possibly have another link?

[b]PDFC;[/i] I really like your use of colours in the first, they look very soft and pleasant. c:

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Just finished a bust of my new character, and I was wondering if anyone had any advice/critiques? I tried adding some pinks to his skin so that it would seem more realistic, because I'm desperately trying to draw more realistically.
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Re: The Artist Army

Postby bluefire887 » Thu Feb 06, 2014 10:52 am

@stonefly - I know Im going back a bit in the conversation but i made a few notes for you http://www.ezimba.com/work/140206C/ezim ... 685300.png sorry its so minimal and unclear I did it in five minutes, message me for a more in depth tutorial on anything if you'd like



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Re: The Artist Army

Postby PFDC » Thu Feb 06, 2014 1:25 pm

Veins of Opal: the cheekbones look off, but other than thatWOW!(sorry on mobile)
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Re: The Artist Army

Postby tinydoodles » Sat Feb 08, 2014 6:16 am

Thanks for the feedback guys!! I've finished the picture. I'm not looking for any more critique since I won't be doing any more editing, I just wanted to share.

PFDC: I noticed that your muzzles (particularly on the first two pictures) seem to be drawn as rectangles. I'd suggest narrowing them towards the nose in profile. Other than that I don't have much to critique, other than I think you should shorten the lower part of the hind legs on the second and third pictures. I really like your use of color in the second picture, though !! It really adds to the mood, and looks very nice.

Veins of Opal: That looks very good, and it's looking pretty realistic!! However, I would suggest making his right cheekbone stick out more, since it looks a bit too flat. I think you should also change the eye shape, since eyes are hardly ever perfect almond shapes, especially in 3/4 view.
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Re: The Artist Army

Postby The_Tide_Keeper » Sat Feb 08, 2014 12:08 pm

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Re: The Artist Army

Postby capone. » Wed Feb 12, 2014 12:35 pm

@stonefly- the link seems to be broken ._.

@gwen trix- I'm in love with that poodle's design, and I really like the first lines, especially the smoothness and quality! (I can't see the second.)

@tinydoodles- ahhhh, it's so cute! I really love how it turned out!

@PDFC- The first was very well done, it's definitely my favourite, though I may be biased because they're kias. On the third one, I would say that the left (my left) back leg/paw looks a bit awkward, but other than that I really like them all!

@Veins of Opal- I would agree that the cheekbones look a bit off, but other than that it's very well done!



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Re: The Artist Army

Postby Mortikat » Wed Feb 12, 2014 4:31 pm

@Gwen trix; I absolutely adooooore them! I like it just the way they are and have no crits because I like em just like that :)

@Tinydoodles; I love how it turned out! It looks wonderful~

@PFDC; I chose to help you on this one alright?
The first few things that pop out of me are the muzzle, back legs, and wings.

The muzzle looks a bit thick to me. Unless he's meant to have a thicker muzzle, like a mixed breed or some sort of heavier jowled type, it needs to be thinned out a bit.

The back legs are to tiny for the body size. :) Just make em a little bit bigger next time and you're good. Their shape looks fine though.

The wings, unless meant to be that small, are to small to support your character in flight. They'd have to be much larger. Their shape is also not correct. The wing usually consists of two rows of lerger, more visible feathers until the end, where a third comes into play. Break it down into something like this when sketching it out, and it'll help. Mine are by no meansperfect either, but it helps you get a better understanding. Also, study photos of wings, if you want to get better at them. Take time and do nothing but sketch a page or two of wings here and there, in different positions and patterns of flight. It'll help. :)

Otherwise, it looks pretty good overall, I love it.

@Veins of Opal; That looks wonderful! I adore the lips like crazy, I can't do lips to save my life, even after practice :l

@Capone; For your first try at shading it looks wonderul! It looks like you followed a natural light source and you kept it consistent. I'll tell ya, I still have troubles getting my shadows to fall correctly. <3

Annnnnd, here's mine! I know the wings aren't perfect (I hardly draw them all that much) and my shadows don't fall exactly where they should, but I'm still happy with it. Any comments/crits welcome. :)
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