Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer [CLOSED]

[Arcaii]

Could I do another cat? I posted one yesterday so yeah ^^ If you say yes, I'll edit this post with my second cat c:

Send in as often as you'd like! You can just make another post, though. That would probably be a little easier for me while I get the rest of these cats done.

[Arcaii]

Image/Description:
Name: Blackheart
Gender: She-cat
Clan: PineClan
Rank: Warrior
Personality/Skills: Serious but can be funny. She would die for Laurelpaw though.
Important Notes: See Laurelpaw's post....

Image/Description:
Name: Birdpaw
Gender: She-cat
Clan: MapleClan
Rank: Apprentice
Personality/Skills: She is aggressive and smart but she will try and attack her clanmates if they underestimate her or tease her. She is a great fighter, and no cat could doubt it. But she is a terrible hunter, and she can barely catch a mouse.
Important Notes: Her mom, Firestrike is her only kin alive as of now. Her father, Nutclaw, died from a monster and her littermates died when they were born.

Image/Description:
Name: Firestrike
Gender: She-cat
Clan: MapleClan
Rank: Warrior
Personality/Skills: Rough, and hates her daughter. She is like this because her mate died. She loves to fight and is very good at it.
Important Notes: See Birdpaw

Blackheart
Name Rating: 7/10
Name Type: Semi-traditional
Name Reasoning: Black- fits her like a glove, and I have no issue with that. My only problem is that she doesn't really have the traits of a -heart cat (a strong sense of justice, desire to do what's right, going out of their way to make things fair, etc).
Alternative Name: Blackpelt/Blackfur. She doesn't appear to have any extraordinary skills, so she's left with either -fur or -pelt.

Character Rating: 7/10
Character Reasoning: There isn't too much to her here, and I think you could elaborate on her a little more. Maybe she's serious most of the time, but has a talent in subtle sarcasm that goes undetected by others. She could have some disdain for the others; not being very social and preferring to do mostly everything alone. Laurelpaw just happened to crack through the ice.


Birdpaw
Name Rating: 3/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: Bird- is far too broad of a name; there are dozens, if not hundreds of birds the cats would come in contact with daily - from a name like that, it's hard to tell what she would look like! It's sort of like Feather- or Dog-; at once far too descriptive and not descriptive at all.
I'll also give you a warrior's name, just in case.
Alternative Name: Daisyclaw/Thriftclaw. Both describe a light ginger cat, and -claw is for her skills in fighting.

Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: There isn't really anything I could detract from her, but I suggest going a little more in-depth and seeing what parts of her can be quiet and peaceful. Maybe it's swimming, or sleeping in the sun, or the company of someone she holds dear. What makes her so aggressive, as well? Does she fear that she'll die like her kin if she's weak? Is she trying to impress her mother? How does she feel about her mother's hatred of her? Ask yourself these questions, and you'll have a deeper character quick enough.


Firestrike
Name Rating: 6/10
Name Type: Semi-traditional
Name Reasoning: Fire- is fine for her; Sand- could also work, but I don't think her prefix needs to be addressed.
Like I said with Eaglestrike, whatever -strike wants to cover is done by -claw and -fang, so there's no real point to having it.
Alternative Name: Fireclaw. She's a good fighter, thus earning the -claw suffix.

Character Rating: 9/10
Character Reasoning: A cat that turns bitter from the loss of her beloved kin isn't too unrealistic. I always stress that death is a regular part of Clan life, but cats can still be affected by it. Something like this - her mate getting killed rather tragically, the majority of her kits dying - is certainly enough to embitter anyone. Keep in mind how this affects others, particularly her only daughter, and see if she's redeemed by the end of everything, or if she stays not good and isn't forgiven.

[Morningpaw11]

{ C h a r a c t e r . R e v i e w

Basics
name; stormstrike
age; 29 moons
gender; tom
rank; warrior
clan; mountainclan

Description
fur colour; gray, white, black
fur length; short
markings; white paw-tips
scars; one on haunches, one
along back
eyes; yellow
body build; broad, strong
strengths; fighting, strength
weaknesses; hunting, agility

Important Notes
Thanks! xD Nothing really, it's
pretty fun to make these! I'm
mostly just basing them off a
character that I actually role-
play, but changing it up a bit.
Sorry if it's really long!

Personality & Skills
Stormstrike is known for his strength, skill at fighting, and ambition. The prefix 'storm' in his name comes from his mostly-gray pelt, like a storm cloud. The suffix 'strike' comes from his skill at fighting, like the strike of a tiger. Right from the beginning, you will understand that Stormstrike has a preference for fighting. His body is packed with muscles, good for jumping high and giving a hard blow. However, his large body makes hunting harder for him, because prey tends to run around in circles and such; his speed is also a problem. He is very ambitious and wants to become deputy, maybe even leader if he is lucky - but he tends to be very headstrong and doesn't like listening to others' opinions. Stormstrike is good at talking in front of other cats and getting his ideas heard, but if he feels that another's idea isn't as good, he won't listen. So, you could say that he is stubborn, but he just wants the best for his Clan.

[Arcaii]

I've tried to keep each of them short, so sorry for the overload. |D

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Name: Strikingstream
Gender: Female
Clan: Mistclan
Rank: Warrior
Personality/Skills:
Quick and to the point.
Tends to climb trees and jump down onto her prey/enemies.
Is a decent swimmer.
Is kind and desires to be a queen.
Important Notes: She also has a bullet hole in one of her ears. ouo

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Name: Windstep/Windstar
Gender: Male/Tom
Clan: Mistclan
Rank: Warrior/Deputy/Leader
Personality/Skills:
Carefree
Light on his feet
Occasionally bossy
Tends to be the 'vengeance/justice must be served' guy.
Important Notes: His sister, Miststar, the founder of the clan, died and he became quite depressed after he took her place.

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Name: Wavesong
Gender: Female
Clan: Jayclan /from an rp/
Rank: Medicine Cat
Personality/Skills:
When you first glance at Wavesong- you expect her to be kind and helpful, being a medicine cat and all. Well, she can be like that most of the time. She can be cocky and arrogant at times, and is pretty stubborn. But she does try to be caring and kind to her patient's, and keeps her temper cool with most of the clan. Yes, her bad side does show occasionally, and you certainly shouldn't push it when it does, but over all she does try her best. /copied from the rp I made her in~/
Important Notes: None.

Name: Owlpaw
Description: A white and ginger cat with tabby fur and no ears. (A scottish fold cat. x3)
Important Notes: None.

Name: Twilightpaw
Description: A white cat with grey patches and a v-shaped nick in her ear.
Important Notes: None.

Well, at least you didn't send in 10 cats, haha. I'll get these taken care of right quick.

Strikingstream
Name Rating: 2/10
Name Type: Creative
Name Reasoning: When a cat is born, they're named for their appearance; a ginger cat named Fox-, a tortoiseshell named Brambling-, a black cat named Soot-. A kitten can't really look like a striking, and they're incapable of doing so at birth. Even if she was named for her talents in surprising enemies, that would be for her suffix, not her prefix. Talent isn't really enough to warrant a name change, unlike an injury.
On top of that, she isn't much of a -stream cat, either. Cats with the -stream suffix are impeccable swimmers, and she's only a decent one. As such, she doesn't really deserve that name. She sounds like a very agile cat to climb trees quickly, so that should be mentioned in her name!
Alternative Name: Firtail/Cranetail. Crane- I suggest more, because it works better for a grey cat with darker markings, and -tail shows off her climbing skills.

Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: I don't think there's much to critique - which is what I should mention. You ought to go deeper into her character and figure out more about her, like her favorite time of day, if she has trouble sleeping, if she can be a little too rambunctious and adventurous, if she races apprentices to the top branch and wins every time, etc.


Windstar
Name Rating: 3/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: Wind carries a lot of different colors that it could, metaphorically, be - blue, light blue, grey, yellow, green, white, etc. But for cats, wind is invisible. It's a force of nature that they cannot see. No cat should be named for something that can't really be properly looked at.
His warrior suffix, -step, also bears some problems. The -step suffix has two very specific rules that make it a rare treasure: the cat's prefix must correlate with the suffix, and the cat must walk like the prefix. Finchstep hops a little and makes quick movements, Foxstep treads carefully and slinks, etc. Wind doesn't really step, haha.
Alternative Name: Thymeheart/Nettleheart. Both describe a grey cat, and -heart is suggested for his streak of justice.

Character Rating: 7/10
Character Reasoning: His traits kind of contradict - he's carefree and light on his toes, but he has a fierce devotion to righting wrongs and he can be pretty bossy. I'd say get rid of the lightness and the carefreeness, and emphasize the latter traits.


Wavesong
Name Rating: 2/10
Name Type: Lyrical
Name Reasoning: Waves come in a variety of colors, such as white, blue, and sea-green. The one I haven't seen is grey. I don't think that really requires any more explanation, haha.
Cats are also not aware what a song is. Humans have songs. In all of the books we've never heard the warriors play music, or write sonnets, or lullaby their kits to sleep. It's just not a thing for them.
Alternative Name: Stonestorm/Juniperstorm. Both describe a grey cat, and -storm is for her temper.

Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: A medicine cat with a temper isn't really a bad thing, but I would remove the "most of the time being soft and kind" thing. She could be a very cranky cat that doesn't want to deal with anyone if they don't have a dream to share or a wound to treat. She could be quiet and focused while she's working, of course, but the rest of the time be cross and argumentative.


Owlpaw
Rate: 5/10
Type: Canonical
Reasoning: Owl- cats tend to be brown. She's a white and ginger cat, so it doesn't really fit. I'm not sure of her or Twilightpaw's traits, so I'll just give them a prefix this time.
Alternative Name: Plumpaw/Chervilpaw. Chervil- is for if she's mostly white with a few ginger spots, and Plum- is for if she's equal parts ginger and white, as it covers both a white cat and a ginger one.


Twilightpaw
Rate: 5/10
Type: Creative
Reasoning: Twilight is a time that, if it tried to be descriptive, would already be covered by Dawn-, Dusk-, Evening-, and Morning-. As well, she's a white and grey cat - hardly fitting for the colors that Twilight- would cover.
Alternative Name: Ternpaw/Shrikepaw. Both cover a grey-and-white patched cat.

[Arcaii]

{ C h a r a c t e r . R e v i e w

Basics
name; stormstrike
age; 29 moons
gender; tom
rank; warrior
clan; mountainclan

Description
fur colour; gray, white, black
fur length; short
markings; white paw-tips
scars; one on haunches, one
along back
eyes; yellow
body build; broad, strong
strengths; fighting, strength
weaknesses; hunting, agility

Important Notes
Thanks! xD Nothing really, it's
pretty fun to make these! I'm
mostly just basing them off a
character that I actually role-
play, but changing it up a bit.
Sorry if it's really long!

Personality & Skills
Stormstrike is known for his strength, skill at fighting, and ambition. The prefix 'storm' in his name comes from his mostly-gray pelt, like a storm cloud. The suffix 'strike' comes from his skill at fighting, like the strike of a tiger. Right from the beginning, you will understand that Stormstrike has a preference for fighting. His body is packed with muscles, good for jumping high and giving a hard blow. However, his large body makes hunting harder for him, because prey tends to run around in circles and such; his speed is also a problem. He is very ambitious and wants to become deputy, maybe even leader if he is lucky - but he tends to be very headstrong and doesn't like listening to others' opinions. Stormstrike is good at talking in front of other cats and getting his ideas heard, but if he feels that another's idea isn't as good, he won't listen. So, you could say that he is stubborn, but he just wants the best for his Clan.

Name Rating: 7/10
Name Type: Semi-traditional
Name Reasoning: Storm- is just right for a dark grey cat, however, -strike is already covered by -claw.
Been gettin' a lot of "strikes" today. Mighty high coincidence. Hmm...
Alternative Name: Stormclaw, for the reasons above.

Character Rating: 10/10
Character Reasoning: His character is just fine, and I don't think that there's really anything that needs to be taken care of. Good job!

Also, I'm aware that this was an awful short review. I think I got all written out with the 11 other cats today, and a couple territories to do next in my other thread

[Morningpaw11]

Haha, that's fine, thanks! I just want a little review to see how I'm doing with names and such ^^

[Arcaii]

You're doing pretty good so far! I do have some links for traditional naming up in the first page if you need further help there. Come again if you have more cats that need some help!

[DragonFlower]

I thought this was a really cool idea. :3
Now I have a place / person to test my names on. Thank you! ^^;

Name: Morningsong
Description: Morning song is a dark orange tabby cat with a white under pelt, paws, muzzle, and blaze. She has pale green eyes.
Important Notes: This name was originally Morningstar, but I wanted to test a warrior version.

Name: Pinestar
Description: A large, long-haired molted brown tom with light green eyes
Important Notes:

Name: Petalnose
Description: A pale gray and sandy cream calico she-cat with yellow eyes and a soft pink nose.
Important Notes:

[Arcaii]

I thought this was a really cool idea. :3
Now I have a place / person to test my names on. Thank you! ^^;

Name: Morningsong
Description: Morning song is a dark orange tabby cat with a white under pelt, paws, muzzle, and blaze. She has pale green eyes.
Important Notes: This name was originally Morningstar, but I wanted to test a warrior version.

Name: Pinestar
Description: A large, long-haired molted brown tom with light green eyes
Important Notes:

Name: Petalnose
Description: A pale gray and sandy cream calico she-cat with yellow eyes and a soft pink nose.
Important Notes:

All right, a regular!

Morningsong
Rate: 7/10
Type: Lyrical
Reasoning: Morning- is a traditional prefix, but it's more for a paler ginger cat than this one. If she was lighter, or even a dilute tortoiseshell, she could easily fit this name, but I'm not inclined to suggest that you keep it unless you want to redesign her.
-song doesn't pass, for a couple reasons: cats do not know what music is (we've never heard them talking about it or preforming it), and even if they did, I'm not sure that -song would be an acceptable suffix. Suffixes are used to describe a useful skill the cat has (or just their appearance if there's nothing too special about them), and I don't know if the ability to sing or have a lovely voice would be too useful unless it was a very important part of their culture, like a story-teller or something.
Alternative Name: Honeyfur/Hollyfur. Both describe a darker ginger cat, and I'm not sure of her skills, so she gets -fur (or -pelt, if you prefer that).


Pinestar
Rate: 8/10
Type: Semi-traditional
Reasoning: Pine-, while a nice name, is actually for a dusky grey-brown cat. Your cat is just plain brown, but I think that a minor change would fix that problem just fine!
Alternative Suggestion: Make Pinestar a little more grey, and then he should be fine to keep his name.


Petalnose
Rate: 5/10
Type: Canonical
Reasoning: Petals, like feathers, come in many, many, many colors and shapes. It's never really any good naming a cat after one specific part of a plant or animal that isn't a cat, because, really, how are we supposed to know what that means? We don't know that Root- means that one specific root of an oak tree; or that Wing- means a dove's wing. It's far too broad a definition.
To couple this, she was only named for one specific part of her body. Her nose may look cute, but it's more than likely that it will be scarred or dulled over time and thus her name would mean nothing. The goal of a prefix is to define the entire cat, not just one little bit - like a black cat with white feet and tail tip being named Rook-, because, even though he has these white spots, he's still majorly black. See what I'm getting at?
Alternative Name: Lichen-nose/Pochardnose. I'm making an assumption that she's a good tracker, thus keeping the -nose part of her name. Lichen- and Pochard- are for a dilute tortoiseshell (which, if I'm correct, is what your cat is, not a calico. The difference is this and this, respectively).

[Arcaii]

Bump.