Warrior Cat Names and Characters Reviewer [CLOSED]

[Arcaii]

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Image/Description: Short fur, white calico, with a long fur tail
Name: Tangletalon
Gender: Female
Clan: Windclan (but her dad was a thunder-shadow clan cat, and her mom was a wind-river clan cat)
Rank: Warrior
Personality/Skills: Brave, Hasty, Happy, Serious, Determined, Kind.
Important Notes: She left windclan for a bit and went to a city far away from the lake territory, and secretly had a kit there (father was a street cat) when she returned to the lake, she had the two cats that lived in the two-leg house in shadowclan territory protect her kit. The kits name was Tormen and was part of a later prophecie.


Ps. Can you think of a good warrior cat name that starts with Bat?

OOOOOOOOOOOOOOH SOMEBODY'S FINALLY USING BAT-!!!!!
can you tell i love that gorram name because i do

Name Rating: 5/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: Tangle-'s been addressed on here before, but I'm not gunna send you back through the pages to find it, so I'll give you the skinny: Tangle- does not describe a cat in a way that is useful. The purpose of a prefix, in my book, is to describe the cat's appearance, since they get this name at birth. Tangle- doesn't say anything other than "messy fur" (which isn't much of a compliment, haha).
As for -talon, it's already covered by -claw and -fang for any purpose it might actually have (which I will assume is fighting). Short report on that one, but that's all that really needs explaining.
Alternative Name: Patch-heart/Cherryheart. Patch- will more accurately describe her coat pattern, while Cherry- has to do with a "white, ginger or tortoiseshell cat" - which I combined for a calico color. The reasons I picked -heart are below.

Character Rating: 7/10
Character Reasoning: Tangletalon (Or Cherryheart, or Patch-heart) is a little muddied with her personality. She's brave, hasty, happy, serious, kind, and determined. Happy and serious are conflicting, and so are hasty and determined. I'll put forth that you need to organize exactly who she is. My suggested suffix, -heart, has to do with what I recommend.
A -heart cat has a strong belief in themselves, their goals, justice, and doing what's right. It takes a lot of nerve for a cat to leave their home and then come back hiding their own kit. I would use this for or against her - she's left her home, had a kit with a loner, and then came crawling back. How does she feel about that? Is she conflicted; ashamed? Does she sneak off regularly to visit her son (And, if I were you, I'd give him a more warrior-esque name, like Acorn or Tern or something instead of Torment - it's not a nice name for him or for anyone, and it's a bit cruel)? Think about the effects these decisions have on her, and play them out.

Now for the Bat-.

My personal favorite suffix to go with Bat- is -flower. Bat- is for a black or reddish black cat, and paired with flower it makes me think of this. And that ain't bad.

Of course, that would require them to be a motherly cat, or a fiercely protective queen. There's plenty of suffixes that could fit, but all of them have some personality and skill requirements. Do you have a cat's personality in mind? If you do, I'd love some more info; it's very helpful.

[Arcaii]

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Name: pineheart
Gender: Female
Clan: shadowclan
Rank: deputy
Personality/Skills: she is brave, strong-willed and intelligent

Name Rating: 9/10
Name Type: Semi-traditional
Name Reasoning: Pineheart is near perfection - except that Pine- covers a grey-brown cat, instead of a reddish brown one. I do like the sound of the name, and it's very close to being just right, so I suggest that you make the cat a greyish-brown instead of changing the name (for the record, grey-brown cats look like this).
Alternative Name: Alderheart. It's more brown-red than Pine-.

Character Rating: 9/10
Character Reasoning: She sounds like a great contender for -heart, which as we've all seen are also great deputies. I can't think of too much to mark her off for, other than suggesting some minor traits here and there (like phobias, dislikes, impatience or obnoxiousness, etc).

[Arcaii]

Bump.

[wolfsong-mapleflame]

sorry, but this helps with my thousands of charries, i'm writing a warriors book:
Name: nightstar (warrior name, nightfrost)
Gender: Female
Clan: shadowclan
Rank: leader
Personality/Skills: nightstar blends into the shadows. she is icy and cruel, and hunts in darkness.

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[Arcaii]

sorry, but this helps with my thousands of charries, i'm writing a warriors book:
Name: nightstar (warrior name, nightfrost)
Gender: Female
Clan: shadowclan
Rank: leader
Personality/Skills: nightstar blends into the shadows. she is icy and cruel, and hunts in darkness.

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No issue! I love reviewing names.

Name Rating: 8/10
Name Type: Canonical/Traditional
Name Reasoning: Night- is a good prefix for a black cat, so I have no issue with it. I am going to pick on -frost a little.
The way I define a name is by prefix and suffix - the prefix describes the cat's coat color, and the suffix describes a skill, personality trait, or appearance if they aren't too special. So what I can assume from -frost is that it denotes her cold personality.
This is not a good thing.
The suffix is used to describe a good trait of a cat, not a bad one (with the exception of renames, like Tornear or Lostfoot, and even then that's a good naming system). Cold and cruel is not a good thing to be named after, especially for a leader.
Alternative Name: Nightwhisker. The -whisker suffix means a cat who is skilled at hunting, which I believe your cat to be. Hunting in darkness and melting into the shadows are excellent traits for a cat, and I see no reason why she shouldn't be an immensely talented hunter and ambusher. (Of course, she'll keep the -star when she becomes leader)

Character Rating: 7/10
Character Reasoning: A villainous cat like yours (which she sounds like) if going to have to be manipulative to make her way to the top. Having her be the head of a Clan? Not at all an issue. But how did she get there? If she's naturally aloof and mean, why would the leader pick her? Was it when she got to power that this started getting to her head and she began showing this coldness? Or was she just an excellent actor with the favor of the leader (romantically, or blood-related, etc)?

[Arcaii]

Bump.

[wolfsong-mapleflame]

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Name: frozenclaw
Gender: Female
Clan: shadowclan
Rank: warrior
Personality/Skills:she is a great hunter, and swimmer. she is ambitious but can also have a sense of humour and discipline.

[Arcaii]

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Name: frozenclaw
Gender: Female
Clan: shadowclan
Rank: warrior
Personality/Skills:she is a great hunter, and swimmer. she is ambitious but can also have a sense of humour and discipline.

Name Rating: 6/10
Name Type: Canonical/Lyrical
Name Reasoning: There are names having to do with cold weather that describe a white cat - Frozen- not being one of them. The reason: a cat's fur can look like snow, or a blizzard, or frost. It can't look like frozen. Frozen is a state of being, not a physical object.
-claw is traditional, but I wouldn't say it fits on your cat. It's used for a cat who's skilled at fighting, and she's probably just average at that. Her talent is in swimming and hunting, so she should be named for that.
Alternative Name: Frostwhisker/Icestream. Frost- sounds similar to Frozen-, and -whisker indicates she's good at hunting. Meanwhile, Ice- is another way to say Frozen-, and -stream shows that she's good at swimming. They can be mixed together how you see fit.

Character Rating: 8/10
Character Reasoning: I don't think there's too much wrong with her, but I'd say reword her personality a little. Something like "Ambitious and strict, but has a sense of humor in her down time". That cleans it up a little, haha.

[Joe Kerr]

:Image/Description:
Sleek Darker brown tabby
with white paws on back legs,
and white legs up to elbow
on front legs. Hazel eyes,
black whiskers, white
chin.

:Name:
Hawktalon

:Gender:
Tom

:Clan:
Windclan

:Rank:
Warrior

:Personality/Skills:
Rough around the edges. Stern to
Apprentices, but not overly so. His
mother died in childbirth, and his
father was killed in battle, so he
doesn't open up to very many cats.
Once he does, his whole personality
changes towards that particular cat or
group of cats. He is easygoing, helpful,
he's even been known to crack a joke or
two when he's in a good mood.

~

His talents include;

Hunting
{8/10}
{Very few can match his abilities}

Battle
{7/10}
{He can sometimes be impatient, and
not strategize before leaping into battle. Once
he's fighting, his sleek body is hard to catch,
and he can jump out of the way faster than
you can say 'mouse tails'.}

Herbal
{2/10}
{He's never been a fan of going to the medicine
cat, and has always preferred attempting to take care
of his own wounds before giving in and paying a visit
to the medicine cat. Herbs bore him.}

Strategic
{5/10}
{He can be extremely impatient. This particular
quality has caused many unnecessary hardships on the clan.}

Nurture
{4/10}
{He'd much rather be out hunting than paying attention
to kits. They make him uncomfortable}

:Important Notes:
*Orphaned at a young age. Mainly took care of himself, as
he has no siblings.

*Comes off as unsocial, because of his rough demeanor.

*Follows the Warrior Code strictly, and despises anyone who doesn't
take it as seriously as he does.

[Arcaii]

:Image/Description:
Sleek Darker brown tabby
with white paws on back legs,
and white legs up to elbow
on front legs. Hazel eyes,
black whiskers, white
chin.
:Name: Hawktalon
:Gender: Tom
:Clan: Windclan
:Rank:
Warrior
:Personality/Skills:
Rough around the edges. Stern to
Apprentices, but not overly so. His
mother died in childbirth, and his
father was killed in battle, so he
doesn't open up to very many cats.
Once he does, his whole personality
changes towards that particular cat or
group of cats. He is easygoing, helpful,
he's even been known to crack a joke or
two when he's in a good mood.

~

His talents include;

Hunting
{8/10}
{Very few can match his abilities}

Battle
{7/10}
{He can sometimes be impatient, and
not strategize before leaping into battle. Once
he's fighting, his sleek body is hard to catch,
and he can jump out of the way faster than
you can say 'mouse tails'.}

Herbal
{2/10}
{He's never been a fan of going to the medicine
cat, and has always preferred attempting to take care
of his own wounds before giving in and paying a visit
to the medicine cat. Herbs bore him.}

Strategic
{5/10}
{He can be extremely impatient. This particular
quality has caused many unnecessary hardships on the clan.}

Nurture
{4/10}
{He'd much rather be out hunting than paying attention
to kits. They make him uncomfortable}

:Important Notes:
*Orphaned at a young age. Mainly took care of himself, as
he has no siblings.

*Comes off as unsocial, because of his rough demeanor.

*Follows the Warrior Code strictly, and despises anyone who doesn't
take it as seriously as he does.

Made small for the convenience of everyone.

Name Rating: 4/10
Name Type: Canonical
Name Reasoning: Hawks do not appear in England, where the Warrior-verse is set. They're strictly North American animals, and besides that, they come in many different sizes and colors (Red-tailed and Goshawk don't look too similar). If your cat was in North America, even then I would not allow it for that reason.
As for -talon, -claw and -fang would cover anything that this suffix would attempt to, so there we go.
Alternative Name: Mudfang/Tigerfang. Both cover a dark brown tabby cat, and the -fang suffix is for a cat that's above average with hunting and fighting.

Character Rating: 6/10
Character Reasoning: Death is a normal part of life for Clan cats - they kill to eat, they get killed protecting their Clan, they get poisoned or sick or injured, etc. Death is a regular thing, is the point, and it will affect your cat, but it shouldn't affect him like it does. The truth is, every cat will see their mother and father die - Sandstorm did, Ashfur did (and he was pretty normal until Erin Hunter destroyed his characterization), Brambleclaw did, and so will every cat that's born in a Clan with Clan-born parents.
Besides that, I'm never too fond of the "gruff and aloof but sweet and helpful once you get to know them" trope, because it's very overdone and, frankly, lazy. People will have some core characteristics that are permanent no matter how they act, and if your cat is very distant, then keep him distant. If he's close to someone, let it be a mild affection, nothing more. He should look and act indifferent if he acts like that with everyone, and if someone gets through that, he'd probably still latch onto being that way a little. Either that, or make him sweet and helpful no matter who he's talking to. Don't try to juggle both without reason.