{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ } LOCK! NEW THREAD

[~willo o' wisps~]

I'd read it. Great job

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I've gotten chapter two up c:
I'd love some feedback or reads.

I love it!
It really drew me in and chapter two is definitely a real cliffhanger. It's really interesting how you set the call up. Him drawing the card and then..... You know.
Will be reading!

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Yay!
Chapter 2 Out
From
The War

[Silent Mist]

Was I accepted into this thread?

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Was I accepted into this thread?

It's auto-accept. So long as you posted a form you're all set!
So welcome to Inklings! :)

[Silent Mist]

thank you(: I'm excited to be here

[Zalia]

thank you(: I'm excited to be here

Do you have any writing to share at the moment? I am in the mood for reading, haha.

[Zalia]

The beast cannot be tamed, my soul is to be forever framed.
Framed within the cage that holds my memories of love, of hate.
Father, you tried to help...but were much to late.
Is this to be my eternal fate?
I walk among the crowd, their voices echoing in my mind.
Oh, how I wish everything could rewind.
My mind wanders to childhood, the sweet and innocent bliss that my heart once knew.
When I used to dance under the sky so blue.
Mother cast her hand upon me, her desperate calls of help never to be heard again.
A life filled with sin, who would have known there was a desperate plea within?
I lay now in a room filled with white, strapped to a bed like a bird desperate for flight.
No, I will never see the light.


came up with this just now, I had a little burst of inspiration...like always. I wish I could just stay that way all day and I would most likely come up with hundreds of ideas. Oh well, my mind is stubborn.

[Silent Mist]

Okay, so I have had this idea for a while where a girl is new in town and she runs into the 'Original 6' (Snobby popular girls who have been friends forever, growing up together) who start off being her friend. The new girl ends up making friends with this less popular girl but she doesn't know how desperate this less popular girl is to get into the poplar crew. The less popular girl tries to hook up the newbie with one of the popular girls boyfriends while playing it cool like she is going to be this girls best friend. This gets the popular girls mad who are determined to make her life h***. In the process of doing that the less popular girl spills out all the newbies secrets to the original 6 who use them to their advantage. The new girl has no idea why she is getting bullied and discovers on her way home that the girl she thought was her friend is really behind all this. But before she could do anything the popular girls dispose of her like a piece of trash cutting the girls life short. The girl, though she is physically dead, isn't quite dead all the way. She haunts the girls until they dispose of themselves one by one and she leaves red pearls (Which would be stolen from her when she was disposed of. Well they would be white but you should get the red part.) The girl leaves her "friend" to be the last one to dispose of which she tries to say she isn't afraid of the new girl. The ghost of the girl drives her mad putting her in a mad house until she confesses to what she did and in the end she is left to live with what happened to all the girls.

Do you think this is a good story line? obviously I cant tell you everything that happens into detail but that is the run down basically. Thoughts? Suggestions?

[ShootingStarcatcher]

@Wild Horses
I really like the part about her 'friend' who manipulates her. It makes it much more interesting, instead of being just another story about popular girls vs. unpopular girls. One question though, why did they kill the main character? It seems really drastic, considering the main character didn't really do anything to them. Maybe you could give them more of a motivation?