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Thank you~

[Len.]

I'm better with beginings than with plots. I can never get a really good one...
But I'm willing to help you if you wouldn't mind...

[Rolly-chan]

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out of curiosity;; Anyone got a Fanfiction account?

also Help, I have a story line yet I have no idea how to start the story.

I have one. Same name as here on CS :3 There's not much up, though, because most of my stories are in German, and I haven't finished the longer ones I'm writing in English yet (since I'm also working on my original project).

Don't know how to start as in what the first sentence and paragraph should be, or as in what should happen exactly?

Think of your story in scenes, which are the smallest portions of any story. Each scene is a story in miniature - they have a beginning, a point where things change, and a clear ending. And they all contain conflict. So you start at the beginning, write to the point where things change, and end shortly after the change, or keep going a little to obscure the real meaning of the scene.
For example, you start with a girl just doing grocery shopping (beginning) when she is dragged into a black car with tinted windows (change), that drives off with no one noticing what just happened (end).
Or you start with your character entering her house (beginning), noticing that something's missing and looking for what it is (change) only to get sucked into the mirror and vanishing completely, as if she's never been there (end).
Or you have a conversation between two characters where character 1 - let's say it's a girl - is talking about her new dress, while character 2 - a boy - is trying to tell her something important (beginning) which she disregards and keeps on talking about her dress and the school ball she wants to wear it to, and the boy suddenly stands and grabs her to make her pay attention (change), then tells her that it's urgent and that they don't have the time any more, before dragging her along with him (end).

The conflict in scenario 1 is obviously that the girl gets kidnapped - and who wants to get kidnapped?
Scenario 2 - something missing is irritating the character and she tries to find the source. Not being able to find the source while wanting to find it is the conflict.
Scenario 3 - boy vs girl: the boy wants to tell her something important while the girl wants to boast about her new dress.

And if you have trouble finding the right first sentence, look at all the first sentences of the books you own. Note them down to compare them and rate them according to which you like best, which you like less, which you don't like at all, etc. And then analyse what the author did. How the sentence was created. What it says, what its purpose is.
And then write several beginning sentences for your own story. ^^ Just try it once, even if you won't do it this way in the future at all.

Some of my beginnings:
1) Cold azure eyes stared up into the clear blue sky, unmoving.
2) A soft, mild night's breeze brushed through Kongou's fur and made the curly ends of her two tails wave in the air. (from a story I wrote for a contest on CS :3)
3) My father once told me that every ending is at the same time a new beginning, always, everywhere. (though that's only a short piece before the real beginning, which is: Unbearable heat pierced through her skin, black smoke crawled into her nose and irritated her eyes, orange and yellow light frantically danced before her eyes and blurred silhouettes of people scurried all across the place, disorganised like ants.)
4) When Haruka had tried to make him realize how great the risk was he would be exposed to, Kantarou just smiled. (fanfic)
5) Haruka landed in the middle of the graveyard, accompanied by the last sunrays. (fanfic)

[king boo]

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Thank you, I was asking for any FF acounts because My real life BFF Is flamekat and she is quite big on there~

Thank you for breaking it down, Its now alot easier now. Guys I may ask a lot of questions as I have only just started writing stories and my writing so far is very poor. I will post the intro once I have done it.

[Roonil Wazlib]

@Kaljina
It sounds really good, except I kind of find it hard to believe that she magically learned all she needs to be in eighth grade. Other than that, everything else sounds intriguing.

[Zalia]

I decided to post another poem I cam up with ^.^
please note that I am going to make it larger, but if anyone likes it like this I will just leave it. Thanks!





there you were, twirling and wirling in the sea of faces unknown.
But only if you existed, perhaps it would mean something in this hurricane that is my mind.

you sit in the sunlight, on a log next to the sea.
Hair waving in the wind. Maybe it isn't so impossible....to love one who is lost to me.
one who is lost in my broken mind. Your love is all that can truly set me free.

I can see you now...I can finally see you. Maybe my mind isn't broken, or perhaps you have just
fixed it. Thank you, thank you.

You sit picture perfect, finally a frozen picture in the mirror that reflects my memories.

[floki,]

Never once did it occur to me that I would be laying here. Laying on the cold, cracked ground, with a dagger protruding through my stomach. Warm blood stained my clothes, and more seemed to just pour out of the wound. Jolts of pain surged through my entire body, and I squirm around, trying my best to fight it. Trying my best to survive.
So this is what death is like. Painful, and unforgiving. I would have thought is as calming, and some what soothing. Or I would have thought that forty eight hours ago, before this all happened. Before we all decided to fight. To fight this higher being. But of course, we were all to weak. To weak to move.
I gaze out to the others. The others who had decided to fight beside me. To fight for our freedom, to fight for our survival. But we were foolish, for now we all are going to die. Bodies, lay limp around me, each soaked in the red liquid. Each unrecognizable, for there faces had been torn off. That is when I begin to worry, will I be next? Will I turn into one of them, the unrecognizable? Or will I bleed out before he can torture me any further. No, I will not die, I will not let him hurt me any longer. I must fight. I must win, for I am a Human, and we Humans don't give up to easily.

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"Amber, lets just get the damn things and go." sighed the agitated man next to me. His hand rubbed the temples, and then quickly smoothing back his sleek brown hair. Stubble covered his chin, and cheeks. A sign of needing a shave. But of course, there was no time for that.
"Hold your horses Aiden. Its going to take a little longer than a few minutes to get these things." I growl as I reach up for the door handle. "We need to make sure none of 'them' are in there." My hand twitches as I twist the knob and open a small crack in the door. My eyes peer through the hole as I glance around the small shop we were about to enter. There was no movement form inside, a good sign. But, our eyes can be deceiving.
"Hand me the dog meat." I instructed as my hand flies next to Aiden. He began to grumble and pulled out a small slab of meat and placed it in my hand. A soon as the slimy meat touched my hand, I through it through the crack of the door and waited. Silence fill the store, and then the sound of scuttling. I held my breath as I watched two humanoid creatures appear from the dark and lunge at the meat. Both of their sharp teeth barred, and began to rip the meat to shreds. But once they had finished the slab, they lok up, straight through the crack and at me. Their faces had been torn off, only leaving their mouth.
I jump and close the door. Quickly I turn to Aiden. "There's two of 'them'." I sigh shaking my head. "But, nothing we can't handle."
Aiden flashed a toothy grin and reached out for the only weapon we had with us at the time. It was a small dagger, no bigger than the size of your hand.
"You idiot, I told you to bring the revolver." I hiss as I look down at the puny knife.
"What? This is my lucky knife! It saved my life you know." he responded with a smirk.
"Great, now were screwed. Do you really think that think is going to kill off both of those things?" I open the door just a crack to be jumped at by one of 'them.' He knocked me over and I hit the ground with a loud thud. A warm feeling trickled down my neck, causing the thing to go mad. He attempted to claw the living daylights out of me, but I manage to push him off and crawl away. A sudden shrill scream echoed through the area and I glance back to see Aiden stabbing the creature with the knife. When I turned away to get up, I was yet again knocked over by the second one. His teeth sunk into my neck, which made me the one to scream. Blood spilled over me, and I tried to push this one off as well. But he wouldn't budge. He wouldn't get off of me.
"Aiden!" I scream as I tried to get his attention away from the creature he was currently after. But the creature wouldn't die, so he continued on.
I then glance around, looking for anything to be able to get him off of me. That is when I saw it. A rock that laid no more than three feet away from me. If i could just reach it, I might be able to smash it over his head. Quickly, my hand extended towards the rock. My finger tips grazed the end of it lightly, it was to far.
"Aiden, help!" I scream once more as I try to reach for the rock. As soon as my finger tips grazed the rock again, I felt a weight lifted off me. I peer up to find the creature gone, and Aiden over me, protecting me. His shirt was stained with green, and red blood. I watch him silently kill off the other creature before kneeling down to me. He placed a hand gently on my neck, trying to stop the blood flow.
"Amber, its okay. Everything is going to be okay." he whispered gently as he picked me up. "I'm going to take you back and have James look at you."
All I could do was give him a small nod of my head. My vision began to fail, and straight lines became wavy, blurry ones. Then my lights went out.

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"Amber, Amber do you hear us?" called a voice from beyond. I could hear the distress it was in. Slowly I began to open my eyes, revealing the tinted baby blue coloring. Blinding lights filtered through, causing me to squint as I looked around. Ever so slowly was I able to make out figures. Tall people that is.
"Good god Amber, scaring us like that." hissed a males voice that I instantly recognized as my friend Aiden's.
"Aiden, calm down. You both have the blame in this one." called out another.

Hey guys, I was wonder how does this story sounded so far

[Greenleaf]

I have a FFN account as well. I am known as Nearing Midnight on there, but at the moment I have nothing worthwhile for you guys to read, haha ^-^
@Mrs.Dean.Winchester, that sounds quite intriguing! As a matter of fact, I want to know what happens next x3

[Lilysplash]

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Thank you, I was asking for any FF acounts because My real life BFF Is flamekat and she is quite big on there~

Thank you for breaking it down, Its now alot easier now. Guys I may ask a lot of questions as I have only just started writing stories and my writing so far is very poor. I will post the intro once I have done it.

I don't have an account yet, but read all the time! Wow! You know flamekat? c: I heard that she's really good.

[nutella ♥]

Hello c:
I'm writing this story for this thing, and I've just finished writing the rough draft. I've read over I a few times and think its ready to be critiqued before submitted to the thing. So would anyone be interested in reading through it? It's roughly 5000 words, and I cried a little at the end as I was writing it. XD just shoot my a PM if you're interested
Thanks!