{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ } LOCK! NEW THREAD

[Lilysplash]

Can someone tell me what
you think about my new story
try not to be to hard but give
me some pointers and stuff.

| | Teen | |

Hm. It's not really my type of book, but it could be enjoyable for others. After all, I'm not a chick flick reader. Anyway, there are a few basic grammar errors: lack of commas, homophone errors, spelling, punctuation/capitalization, etc. I only read a little, but it seems a bit stereotypical, so it's vital to toss in twists and unexpected moments to keep readers on track. After all, how many books with the love triangle have you read? It has promise, though, if you keep it exciting enough.

~Lilysplash

[Kodabomb]

I wrote a new song last night! I am very, very proud of this one, and like my other songs has a tune and everything. I will Practise it more and post it on SoundCloud soon. <3
Again, it's about a character from my book.

Burning Slow

Destiny, an inescapable thing
But does it really have to be this way?
Had my heart set on so much more than this
To have it crumble down and I'll say;

For flames come and flare out
In all directions I didn't wish them to go
I wanted brightness but I got darkness
And after all this I should know

None can escape the fire within them
Burning slow, burning slow
Takes full control and pulls at the mind then
Rise inferno, rise inferno
Burning slow

I didn't know just how far it would come
I swear I didn't mean to thrash so far
Just wanted power, didn't know how to stop
Too late; I know I started a war

For flames come and flare out
I was blind and I didn't know
I craved adoration but got desperation
And after all this I should know 

None can escape the fire within them
Burning slow, burning slow
Takes full control and pulls at the mind then
Rise inferno, rise inferno
Burning slow
Burning slow

None can escape the fire within them
Burning slow, burning slow
Takes full control and pulls at the mind then
Rise inferno, rise inferno
Rise inferno, rise inferno

Burning slow

[ceratosaurus]

Username: perspicacious.
What we will call you: Persp, Spic, Perspi, Pers.
Will you critique other's work?: Possibly, depending on if they ask for it!
Links to your story if you have any: N/A
Anything you want us to know?:

[Bear.]

Username: Bear.
What we will call you: Bear
Will you critique other's work?: Possibly
Links to your story if you have any:
A collection of related stories
Finner, my main story
A collection of unrelated stories
Anything you want us to know?: nope

[shiki,]

Previous Username: ochibi
New Username: - shiki
What you'd like to be called now: you can still call me chibi or eri :3

[sirène]

Stories of this remain a legend in very few novels, happening over decades of years ago. It is rumored that a certain type of hidden horror was alive. Guards of castles would send their own to track down a person with a fear; any fear. They would observe and try to read what they most feared in their lives, once they found the fear, they would observe one more day to conclude that it was certain. After this process occurred, they would capture the person, lock them in a place, with their worst possible fear. The victim was to stay in the so called "cell" and live with the fear for 5 years, if they happened to have a change of fear, the fear would change, but change for the worst, as time goes on, the victims fear got more intense, were the victim got to the break of insanity. This process made the victim quite a threat, as the guard kept the victim down in the "special" room where all the insane and transformed beings went. In battle, using them as weapons, the victims have learned to live like this, barley even controlling what goes on in their minds. There basically creations, transformed by their biggest fear.

Just a plot, what do you guys think, is it garbage, or should i actually make a story with it somehow?

[Cherry]

It sounds kind of cool. A little spooky. I think there's be some cases where they would conquer their fear, but sometimes not.

[Zalia]

When will this sickness be over?
I have waited for what seems like a century.
But this seems to be the end of my four leaf clover.
Please, don't leave my side.
I couldn't stand to be alone in this tragedy.
You told me to leave, but I could not abide.

Let me go now,
It's time to learn how.



♠










I lie in the darkness of the night.
Trying to remember the greatest memory,
But slowly loosing sight.
When I wake,
I hope to find you.
If you are not their,
my heart will surely Ache.

The pain from losing you,
just is too real.
How did you ever make it through this heart of steal?

Never, Never again will I see you.
Goodbye my friend. I will start my life anew.



♠





Friendship,
What does it mean?
I could have told you,
once upon a torn seam.

It is warm, and cold.
you go through hard times,
but you have to learn to be bold.

There are good times,
when the world seems as though it was made for you.
but soon you realize that you are growing old,
Even though we were once in our Primes.

It is the end now,
forget all the rest.
It is time to let go of the times that were the best.
♠

(Three poems I came up with while listening to ThisSong )

[sirène]

It sounds kind of cool. A little spooky. I think there's be some cases where they would conquer their fear, but sometimes not.

Sorry if it sounds spooky, I just thought it would be interesting for me to do a themed story about a legend. Also, I was thinking something similar, thanks for the feedback (:

[Small Child]

Previous Username: Maerorem Lestrange
New Username: Maerorem Calígo
What you'd like to be called now: Rorie, Mae, Cali