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[Lileevine]

Username: .:!~Lemurs~!:.
What we will call you: (a maximum of four.) Lemur
Will you critique other's work?: (yes, no, or possibly.) possibly...
Links to your story if you have any: http://www.chickensmoothie.com/Forum/viewtopic.php?f=57&t=1831886&p=56760914#p56760914 I JUST started, so no shouting at me for how short it is >.<
Anything you want us to know?: Nope, I'm good ^u^


This is awesome OuO

[Rolly-chan]

Opinion do you mind?
This has been brewing in my mind for a couple
days now and I need some assistance! Okay so it
starts out with a girl named Noel Hampton, blonde
fourteen, a bit tall, and very quirky. She has always
been the type of 'class clown' but soon discovers
most of the students despise her, by hearing
an interesting gossip tale when Noel was in the bathroom
{teehee} Now in the beginning a stunning news report happens.
The rocket that they had just launched into space
was coming down fast, after a few malfunctions. The two
pilots are dead. One unfortunate detail is that the large
rocket is aimed at Noel's hometown. It nearly destroys everything
killing hundreds. Noel's home is obliterated in the chaos.
Two of her dearest friends die, including her crush. Noel
finds it hard to live on, all of her and the remaining survivors
are huddled inside an abandoned barn. They are trapped, the
rocket left a huge mess that sent scraps of metal, cars, and whole
houses that are now blocking all ways into her town.
This book will be called October, seeing as the setting
is in fall. <3

That's kind of the plot. Any critique? I hope this sounds 100%
original...

There are such stories out there. I've seen at least one movie like that. It wasn't a rocket, but a meteorite, but the residents of the town were trapped somewhere inside the town and had to find a way out. I don't remember the title or what else was in the movie because I haven't watched it from start to finish ^^°
I'm not trying to be mean, but nothing you or anyone (including me) can come up with could be 100% original (just think about the single elements you have in the story: people trapped in a town - has been done; an unpopular teenage girl - has been done; a teenager who lost one or more loved ones - has been done; etc... no story nowadays could be 100% original. More like around the 50% mark). But I haven't seen such a story around that focuses on a teenager :3 It's a good idea, probably with no end of possible conflicts ^^

[MacGyver]

“Spion! Hinter ihm her, schnell!”

Sam Denver dodged around the corner of the building just as machine gun fire rang out and he heard the bullets slam into the edge of the bricks, barely missing him. It wasn’t every day he got shot at and was trapped inside a secret Nazi headquarters. Well, almost not every day. Another barrage of gunfire caused Sam to crouch low and run for better cover. The only thing available seemed to be the Major’s staff car. He ducked and rolled to one side of the car, just out of sight of the soldiers. Dirt scattered as more bullets rained down, trying to close in on their target.

His alert brown eyes scanned the immediate area quickly and thoroughly. The wrought iron gates leaving the Nazi headquarters were still open! They must not have had time to send any men down to secure it yet, Sam pondered. There was only one small problem. Lying between himself and freedom were at least five solders armed with pistols and submachine guns. He had lost his own pistol after escaping from Major Deur’s men. There had to be another way out. Same tried to remember the layout of the mansion and grounds that he had been required to memorize for his mission.

And what a mission it was! Infiltrate the suspected Nazi headquarters and gather all the information he could. He had been posing as a Gestapo captain by the name of Erich Roehm. After all, what Nazi would dare question the authority of a Gestapo officer? His alternate identity had served him well for the first two days; but on the third, Major Deur started asking questions. By the looks of things, he had gotten some answers. Same was called to the Major’s office that morning where he was confronted and charged with espionage. That was before Sam had escaped from the two guards who had been assigned to take him to a holding cell.

Bingo! Sam allowed himself a small smile when he spotted the row of motorcycles. He knew for a fact that most of the soldiers on the compound left the keys in the ignitions in case of an emergency which required immediate action. Taking a deep breath and saying a quick prayer, he made a beeline for one of the motorcycles. Again, bullets were raining down seeking out their target; some of them very nearly finding it.

His heart plummeted when he reached the first motorcycle. No key! A bullet pinged against the exterior of the bike and Sam ducked again. He made for the next motorcycle and was rewarded with a key this time. In record time he started it and revved the engine as he aimed it for the gate. By now the others had been alerted of the prisoner’s escape and there were two men beginning to close the gate.

He revved the engine once more and, just as the gate was about to close, squeezed past the shouting guards and sped farther away from the shots that were being fired at him.

I'm not exactly sure where I want to go with this. But here goes.
Any, ANY, critique at all is appreciated since I'm a bit of a beginner. Please? OuO
Anything at all! Even, "It stinks!" XD

[Huntress13]

Hey Guys, I had a day out today at a Country fair (Don't judge, the right ones are actually good fun). For the first time ever I saw a professional sport called 'Horse Boarding', suprising for me since I'm a huge horse fan but I'd never heard of it before.Its where there's an obstactle course of which a rider takes a horse round at usually a gallop/canter and bit like a wakeboarder, there ia guy on a mountain board (on wheels) behind, if you don't know what the sport is. I felt inspired and in the form of a passing thought, came up with an idea for a book and was wondering if you guys felt it was worth considering having a go at.

A girl, that comes from a horsey family helps her friend every now and again with her horse boarding team, first because it helped her friend out and then because she enjoys being with the horses. There is a guy she likes who is a professional board rider for another team and she really likes him but he's basically a really cool, popular, typical stuck up, player kind of guy that only has eyes for the professional popular girls. Wanting to get noticed she takes on the sport with the help of her friend and her friend's brother. As they go up towards Championship standurd, she gets more noticed by the guy she likes but she and the brother are gradully falling in love without reliesing it themselves, she might end up going out with the player girl and only then reliesing she has feelings for the brother but by that time she's already hurt him. Of course to make things more interesting there will be sabotage, horse gets injured or escapes pen, accidents, parents hating the girl doing the sport since its dangerous, a fight over the girl etc

Does this sound any good or should I just ditch the idea?

[MacGyver]

Congratulations, Brittle! ^^

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What are your guys' thoughts on espionage stories?

[I'm Not The Only One]

Attention All Members

after our lovely moderator retired, I asked for those of you who would be interested in helping with moderating the thread to send me a PM. It was a hard decision to make, but I have come to a conclusion as to who is going to run Inklings alongside me for this next go round. Please give congratulations to...

Brittle!

Congratulations Brittle

[amber.]

Attention All Members

after our lovely moderator retired, I asked for those of you who would be interested in helping with moderating the thread to send me a PM. It was a hard decision to make, but I have come to a conclusion as to who is going to run Inklings alongside me for this next go round. Please give congratulations to...

Brittle!

Congratulations Brittle!

You definitely deserve it. I'm always intrigued by your questions! :3

[Rolly-chan]

Congrats Brittle! :3 Have fun managing this alongside Rose ^^

[nobodyyouwouldknow]

Username: destiel~five ever
What we will call you: (a maximum of four.) livi
Will you critique other's work?: (yes, no, or possibly.)yep
Links to your story if you have any:http://phillysmom.livejournal.com/630.html (it's a WIP)
Anything you want us to know?: nope nothing i can think of :

[Huntress13]

Congratulations Brittle

Hey Guys, I had a day out today at a Country fair (Don't judge, the right ones are actually good fun). For the first time ever I saw a professional sport called 'Horse Boarding', suprising for me since I'm a huge horse fan but I'd never heard of it before.Its where there's an obstactle course of which a rider takes a horse round at usually a gallop/canter and bit like a wakeboarder, there ia guy on a mountain board (on wheels) behind, if you don't know what the sport is. I felt inspired and in the form of a passing thought, came up with an idea for a book and was wondering if you guys felt it was worth considering having a go at.

A girl, that comes from a horsey family helps her friend every now and again with her horse boarding team, first because it helped her friend out and then because she enjoys being with the horses. There is a guy she likes who is a professional board rider for another team and she really likes him but he's basically a really cool, popular, typical stuck up, player kind of guy that only has eyes for the professional popular girls. Wanting to get noticed she takes on the sport with the help of her friend and her friend's brother. As they go up towards Championship standurd, she gets more noticed by the guy she likes but she and the brother are gradully falling in love without reliesing it themselves, she might end up going out with the player girl and only then reliesing she has feelings for the brother but by that time she's already hurt him. Of course to make things more interesting there will be sabotage, horse gets injured or escapes pen, accidents, parents hating the girl doing the sport since its dangerous, a fight over the girl etc

Does this sound any good or should I just ditch the idea?