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by princess pudding » Thu Jun 06, 2013 10:19 am
Rolly-chan wrote:witch. wrote:@Brittle Script. Besides writing I don't know how to run a movie or cast.
So if you remember a few of you commented on whether I should switch my novel's tense. I'm not sure yet, but I do want opinions on the plot. It's mostly biblical reference with a modern twist; the main character also starts out the 'villain' as a demon himself. Long story short, the demon ends up protecting the angel he was sent to take out and steal the soul of, not having the heart to kill what turns out to be a kid without a memory of heaven or how he got on Earth to begin with. In the process he ends up on the "good" side, fighting to protect the world and the soul that could ultimately lead to its destruction. I won't say anything else otherwise I'll end up giving it away, but I really need to know if the plot would interest anyone enough to pick it up and read it.
I'm also looking for biblical angel and demon names. I have the main characters, Cercial and Sifer, but that's about it. Any help is appreciated.
I'm kind of in love with angel / demon stories with twists, so yeah, I'd pick it up *g*
If you still want many of those names tomorrow evening (it's late in the evening for me right now), I could give you a whole list of probably two pages with biblical angel and demon names because I once made one for one of my own stories xD I did some extensive research back then, and I don't have the time to do so now, but I'm back home tomorrow and can look for the list.
Well, and then there's
this. Google-fu skills are very useful sometimes.
I really love how the plot is coming along, especially since it's original and not too cliche for angels and demons. Good to hear it has some interest. c: Any names you have, I'd love to see, considering I'm on vacation and don't have much recourse atm.
I'll check the link out as well, thanks so much!


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by freddie101 » Thu Jun 06, 2013 10:47 am
a m b e r . wrote:Brittle wrote:I have a question for anyone viewing this;
If your book was published and two years after someone approached you because they wanted to produce it, and then they gave you the choice....What would you be? {only one!}
A. Executive Producer
B. Casting
C. Play a character!
Or D. Script!
I'd definitely write or help write the script. I think it'd be much easy for others to find characters or produce a movie if it had a good script. At least then nothing could be changed without my permission. I'd still want to help with casting and such but if I had to only pick one I'd pick writing the Script.
I personally would chose casting because when I read a book and then the movie leaves out a character or their appearance is different than in the book it really bothers me because a character is written to look a certain way for a reason
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by celestiaa » Thu Jun 06, 2013 11:06 am
Username: sea-salt.
What we will call you: Sea
Will you critique other's work?: Yes, of course!
Links to your story if you have any: None at the moment, though I may start posting things here in the future.
Anything you want us to know?: I enjoy writing fantasy and realistic fiction, the latter of which I've just picked up an interest in. I used to write a ton of horror, but decided to try my hand at some other genres. My worst habit when it comes to writing is abandoning stories when I get stuck at a certain point in the plot. Sometimes, I think I'm just too lazy to work the tough parts out :c. On CS, I do one x one's with other players to improve my writing. c:
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by amber. » Thu Jun 06, 2013 12:23 pm
freddie101 wrote:I personally would chose casting because when I read a book and then the movie leaves out a character or their appearance is different than in the book it really bothers me because a character is written to look a certain way for a reason
I can agree with that. Characters are very important and often times casting is kind of rough. Characters don't appear how you imagined them is often times troubling. But I hate it worse when the plot line is destroyed when transferred over to a movie. Yes, some movies do a very nice job of capturing the novel they are based off of. To me, writing would be the primary concern but I do see your view as well. There's nothing worse than a person playing a character incorrectly.
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by MacGyver » Thu Jun 06, 2013 1:11 pm
.:: MacGyver ::. wrote:This is one of the prologues I've been playing with for the western juvenile fiction ive been working on. Im not completely satisfied with this one but Im still thinking. The man who talks to the boy (Scotty Murrow [name is subject to change]) is the Bill Horman, the leader of the gang who killed the man and woman and burned the farm.
I wasn't in an angst-y writing mood, so I'll probably be redoing this.
I would LOVE any critique, no matter how harsh. ;3 I want to learn to better my writing since im still a beginner.
Western Story wrote: He saw the dark plume of smoke reaching up to the sky before the sharp smell of smoke met his nose. The fishing pole was carelessly tossed aside as he jumped up and ran as fast his legs could carry him back to the Murrow farm. Twigs and underbrush scratched his face and legs, but he ran on.
A gunshot and a woman’s scream stopped him dead in his tracks. Ma! His heart raced madly as he continued his desperate race to his parent’s homestead.The ten-year-old boy broke from the woods into the field beside the farm. Breathing hard, he halted and was met by a sight that would haunt him for the rest of his years. Five men on horseback were sitting astride their mounts in the front yard as the small cabin, that had once been the Murrow home, burned to the ground. The cornfield had been reduced to ashes and all that remained of the barn was a black skeleton, telling the tale of the horror that had taken place.
Then he saw the bodies of two people lying beside the house. “No! Ma, Pa!” The boy, disregarding the men on horseback, started to run towards the bodies of the man and woman.
He was cut off when one of the men, blocked his path. The boy tried to go around but was again cut off. Tears streamed down his freckled face now. “No, I’ve gotta help them,” he choked as a sob threatened.
The man dismounted and held the boy by the shoulders. “Nothin’ can help ’em now, boy,” he said, looking the young Murrow boy in the eyes.
“But I gotta try!” He struggled to break free from the stranger’s grip. “Lemme go!”
“They’re gone. You hear me? They’re gone, son.”
"You killed them!”
"It was vigilantes. My boys and I just happened to see the smoke.”
The boy wiped roughly at his eyes and turned his frightened brown eyes toward the stranger‘s face. “They’re...they’re really dead?”
"’Fraid so.” The man stood, one hand still resting on the young boy’s shoulder. “I’m sorry...”
I want to change Scotty's name too! In the book, he will be 15.
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by ~Demonic Moon Curse~ » Thu Jun 06, 2013 1:25 pm
Man, that's depressing, .:: MacGyver::.
Oh me! Oh life! of the questions of these recurring,
Of the endless trains of the faithless, of cities fill’d with the foolish,
Of myself forever reproaching myself, (for who more foolish than I, and who more faithless?)
Of eyes that vainly crave the light, of the objects mean, of the struggle ever renew’d,
Of the poor results of all, of the plodding and sordid crowds I see around me,
Of the empty and useless years of the rest, with the rest me intertwined,
The question, O me! so sad, recurring—What good amid these, O me, O life?
Answer.
That you are here—that life exists and identity,
That the powerful play goes on, and you may contribute a verse.
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by MacGyver » Thu Jun 06, 2013 1:40 pm
~Fang~ wrote:Man, that's depressing, .:: MacGyver::.
And I thought there wasnt enough angst xD.
Near the climax of the story, he discovers his parents weren't the ones who were killed. (I still need to figure out who they should've been. The man could be the hired hand but I don't know about the woman. Suggestions?)
After an unsuccessful robbery, the gang escapes while Scotty is captured. A local rancher takes him out to live at his ranch in an attempt to reform him. Scotty was told by Horman that his family farm was burned and his parents were killed by vigilantes (in this case, ranchers who don't want homesteaders settling), so Scotty doesn't like cattlemen.
Anyways, the rancher turns out to be Scotty's uncle (this wont be revealed until the end.) Of course, certain confrontations and incidents will occur throughout the book.
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