The Advanced Writer's Club

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Hey guys I really need some critique on This Story Please check it out if you have the time

[Make_a__Scene]

toujours., you're accepted, dear.

Looks like I've changed my username!
Old username: 1000 Umbrellas
New username: Make_a__Scene
Club Number: 11

[abandoned.]

I need to stop disappearing from this thread ._.

But I finally have something to work on ^-^ I've gotten 10 pages into it [not a lot, but this is a record for me, so shhhh] about to go on 11 ^-^

[breath.]

Hey guys I really need some critique on This Story Please check it out if you have the time

Some crit please

[indebted]

i'm so excitteeeed.
i have a new plot.
inspired by the ikea catalog!

[eden .]

hi I'm alive
ok so I'm writing this WWII story but I'm really nervous b/c I'll have to talk about war which I know nothing about I am a cushioned asian girl with a laptop how am I supposed to reenact this

[Rivkah]

hi I'm alive
ok so I'm writing this WWII story but I'm really nervous b/c I'll have to talk about war which I know nothing about I am a cushioned asian girl with a laptop how am I supposed to reenact this

pm me.

as a Jew I am an expert of WWII

I can help if you want

[wicked;]

Username:
acoustic.

Nickname:
Hmm, Sheerio works. (:

Writing Preferences (Poet, Novelist, roleplayer...):
I am a novelist, used to roleplay quite a bit, and also write songs.

Example (Can be anything; must be a good length):

“Got a secret, can you keep it? Sweat this one you’ll save,” the faint voice came from a nearby radio. It sat on the edge of the old wooden nightstand right next to a flickering lamp. The sound that came from it always came with static, but those with great ears would be able to make out the music rather well. Secret by The Pierces, right?
“Better lock it in your pocket, taking this one to the grave.” From underneath the bright red Umbrella, a face held a grim smirk as the figure worked around the tiny apartment. The apartment may have been quite small, and the space was thin, but that was because of how crowded it really was. Umbrellas and photographs were scattered everywhere.
“If I show you that I know you won’t tell what I said.” The figure’s printing was neat, but their handwriting was even neater. Quickly writing down the name ‘Candice’ on the envelope, they tucked it on top of the gift basket. How nice of me, the Red Umbrella thought. Welcoming someone new to Red Banks with a gift basket filled with nuts, tea, and candy….If only you weren’t allergic to nuts, Candice.
“Cause’ two can keep a secret if one of them is dead.” This time, the figure sang along to the lyrics. Their red lips were hidden along with the rest of their face by the big Umbrella. The apartment was dull, but the red Umbrella did make it livelier.
These next few months would be perfectly red.

I honestly shouldn't be showing you guys this. It is yet to be edited, but happens to be the beginning to a novel of mine. I hope to have the first book finished within the next year.

Links to stories / roleplays:
I do have one on Wattpad, although, I find the story to be quite rushed. I won't share unless I am asked to. :b

Other:
I've been into writing since I was seven. (: One of my first pieces was called 'Magic Weather.' It was a short, and VERY awful story of a boy named Soar who went through a series of weather changes just in his bed. The story had horrible grammar, and I can't even stand reading it. :b It made like, no sense at all! To this day, I find my writing has improved a LOT! That was a long time ago anyway, now I write properly!

[Roonil Wazlib]

hi I'm alive
ok so I'm writing this WWII story but I'm really nervous b/c I'll have to talk about war which I know nothing about I am a cushioned asian girl with a laptop how am I supposed to reenact this

If you're writing about people on the home front during the war, you should read the Molly series by American Girl. I know they're children's books, but they have really good information about life on the home front.
But if you're writing about life in Germany, READ THE BOOK THIEF BECAUSE IT'S THE BEST BOOK EVER. Sorry for the caps lock abuse, but seriously even if you're not writing about Germany you should read it.

But if you're writing about soldiers in the war, sorry I can't help you because I don't know much about it :/

@Christine
haha how did you get an idea from Ikea?

[eden .]

thanks for all the advice ^^
I mean of course I know the basics I've taken world history and stuff and of course I'm not going to just focus on the European half of WWII there's the Asian half to think about as well. but how do I write combat ????? -^-