{ ＩＮＫＬＩＮＧＳ } A Thread For Writers

[AninaAna]

Traumatic backstories can help readers connect to their characters. I don't mind them, as long as they're not constantly rehashed and angsted about.

I really want to write a book/story with unorthodox methods, like deliberately uncapitalized words and backwards sentences. The intent is to be very dreamlike, but I feel like it would just annoy the heck out of the readers.

? i am where
. dark here is it
. scared very so scared am i
. monster comes here
! scared
!

there were a m i l l i o n tiny pieces and i stooped down to pick them up
they g l i n t e d in the sun
my dream f r a g m e n t s

Something like that, I suppose. What do you think? Should I go for it?

Know what? I think you should, it seems quite cool, I like reading books that aren't quite in the usual form

[skrundle]

I don't think it is, but there's a lot of people now... That was just my suggestion to why there were no girls in society, Lol.
If anyone wants to read a series about overpopulation, check out "The Shadow Children by Margaret Peterson Haddix."
It's really cool. Basically, the world is running out of food, it's supposedly overpopulated. So the government makes it illegal to have more than 2 kids. (Take that, wellfare abusers!)
They do... stuff to make sure the women don't have more than two kids (they don't go into detail because this is a kid's book) but sometimes it doesn't always prevent it, so their illegal child is called a "shadow child." They have to go into hiding. They try to make the kids legal again after a while, and I'm not sure how the series ends since I've only read up to book three.

GEHE! I can't believe someone actually mentioned that! I love that book x3

Okay, here's a question: Have any of you ever stood in the mirror and put on your character's usual expression -- for any reason?

Yes, I do that all the time. But only when I'm sure that no one will walk into my room xD

[wolves+horses]

Wow, that seems really cool! I love different, weird, original things! <3 And yes, I think (more-so with the top one, but maybe it's just me) that the way that was written does make it seem more dream-like, because we get feelings in dreams without them being rational thoughts, yet we still understand everything that's going on. (Sometimes we even think like that in reality, with just a bunch of jumbled up ideas that still somehow makes sense. It's always bothered me in books that are written very nicely and poetically, and the author makes the character's thoughts have the same sound to them. People don't actually think that way!) Really interesting take on it! I really do love it! So... new.

[Bunnie++]

{//@ ;abstract

Yes, somewhat. I make their expressions I'm thinking of. But do you know what I do?
I think of them battling and get all fidgety in my chair
and start moving and flinching and mouthing out words and making their expressions during it.
In school.
*Sigh* People think I'm insane.
I really need to stop it but my story is based around a war.//}

[Azalaya]

@abstract
yes all the time. Even at school when im writing...Its pretty fun getting in your character's shoes

[NE0N-UMBR30N]

So guys


I wrote a new story




Swaying Song Pack

"Daddy's Little Girl"
Part Three


"Explinations"

-Everyone was rushing around the clearing,panic clear on their faces. Snow looked over to see her grandpa's face distrought with pain,Tambra trying to comfort him.Sparks was following behind Star,both carrying more herbs as they raced towards the medicence den.Ocean,Derek,and Estella stood beside Ashalia,her mother,trying to comfort her.It was then,when Snow saw her mother,saw her sobbing into Dereks fur,Snow knew what had happened.

"NO!"A sense of dread swept over her then,eyes widening sadly,and fearfully.She couldn't bring herself to comprehend any of it.Star had said he had more time,she'd said he was better.This wasn't supposed to happen!Running frantically through the crowd,Snow made it to Star's den,shoving past everyone and skidding to a stop in the den.

She stood there,unable to move,shaking when she saw her father's lifeless form laying on the ground.Sparks glanced at her sister for a second,her eyes sympathic,before leaving the den to give Snow some time.Snow finally edged forward,closer to Iggy.She vertured out a paw,and prodded his shoulder lightly.When she got no response,her ears pulled back,and she dropped to the ground,tearing up,slowly breaking down.

"Papa I'm sorry!"She pleaded,thinking maybe if she did,just maybe he would come back."Just please come back,you have to!You can't leave!"She broke off then,loud sobs echoing from the den then.She started to hiccup lightly.-


"Snowbell!"A sharp voice jarred Snow awake from the the terrifying dream,the white wolf bolting upwards as she shook her head."Ah,what what?!"She called frantically,blinking the sleep out of her eyes as she looked towards whom had awoken her.


"Oh Uncle Xavier."She said,earning a grin from the normal rude wolf." 'Ey kiddo."He said,and tilted his head,looking at her with concerned eyes."Ya look terri kid."He murmured softly,flicking his ears for a second."Tell me ya got some sleep Snowball."His nickname for her was one that had settled early on,and only he got away with it.Along with the few small exeptions of Kodi.Snow rolled her eyes,mock glaring at him.

"What is it?"She asked,standing up and streching.Xaiver gave her an amused smile."Ah nothin',yer dad just asked to see ya."Snow's eyes brightened up immediatly,a grin gracing her lips."Really?He's still okay?!"She asked in a hurried,happy voice.Xaiver chuckled at his great nieces reaction."Yea I'z guess he's 'bout rite as rain."His accent was an unusual one,but then again not many wolves had an accent." 'T leas' he was when I'z checked on 'em."Snow wagged her tail at hyper-speed.Not waiting for another word from him,she darted out of the den past him,piledriving towards Star's den in which her sick father was residing,leaving her uncle with a loud,"Thanks uncle Xavi!" before she left the den.

She padded quickly to Star's den;she was the healer of the pack. Her father was staying there for her to keep an eye on him due to a breathing sickness he had caught only who knows when.Snow's ears folded back,her eyes slightly wide."Dad?"She called softly before peeking in the den. Upon hearing a raspy,"Come in",Snow ducked throw the briars and walked slowly into the den. Snow bit back tears when she saw her father,sprawled out on the den floor. She could see his ribs;the disease had also made him like this. He hardly ate anymore,and when he did,it never made a difference.

"Hey Snow."Iggy mummbled weakly,raising his head slowly to look at his daughter.

[come sail away]

advice needed!
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hey guys!
i like telling a story by taking pictures and building a story line around it. i am a new member to chickensmoothie and i decided that i wanted to submit a story earlier on rather than later. so here is the dilemma.... i took a picture of a staircase. basically the view is what you would see if you were looking up to the top of the steps while you stand at the bottom.

anywhooo, my theme for my story is "you have to start and the bottom if you want to get to the top." basically, i want to create a short creative story and not having a solid idea on what i exactly want to do has been driving me crazy. since its the chickensmoothie community going to be reading my story i was wondering if anyone had anything that they could run by me. just simple ideas is all i am looking for.

i have been trying to write this for about a week and a half now and i can't find anything to spark my imagination. if any of you have any ideas please either pm me or post on this thread.

thanks guys! :**
- sail.

[Roonil Wazlib]

@sail
Maybe a celebrity starting as a nobody and become a super-famous actor? Singer? Hope I helped :)

[phenomenon]

I feel like in a mood to critique some stuff now. xD

@sail; That's a great way to get inspiration. c:
Taking pictures and figuring out how you could write about that scene with a fitted plot.

Now, the theme for your story is great. I like that a lot. It goes with your photo.
I understand your problem here. Writer's Block at the beginning is horrible. :c
Maybe I can help get your muse up a little, eh?

So, let's think here. "you have to start and the bottom if you want to get to the top" is a good quote to develop into a story.
The first step is not to think too hard. If you think too much on it, your mind will either just shut down or throw in too many options. After that, all your inspiration is gone and you have to take a break.
So, keep it simple. When someone mentions "you have to start and the bottom if you want to get to the top", the first thing I think is careers. You know, jobs.
Because to become a doctor, for example, you have to study hard and go to medical school.
Or maybe you want to become a singer. You must have a good voice (obviously), practice keeping your voice smooth, and whatnot.
Anyway, my point is, maybe you could have the main character chasing after her/his dream job?

Or like Electra Heart said, the story of how a simpleton (an average person) became famous.
Maybe he/she discovered a hidden treasure or he/she did something heroic?
The choices are practically endless, but I hope this somehow sparked some imagination.

- Phenomenon c;

[abbie-sama]

@Phenomenon: In the mood to critique, you say?
*squee*
Maybe this? It's kind of long, though, which explains why no one has critiqued it yet. Or maybe it's just my horrible habit of posting something right before a new page. >_<
It's the last one on the page. >>>Clickzies<<<