★ Cho - Story of a CS Dog ♥ / you may post!

[cookies.]

OMG. This sounds just like "Coraline"! D: I want this to be published into a short book!

[Thunder.]

OMG. This sounds just like "Coraline"! D: I want this to be published into a short book!

Yeah! Publish only [insert number of fans here] so that it'll be rare and everyone will want it!

[cookies.]

I don't think the fans of this story is going to be countable! D:

[ri bird.]

thank goodness. I am at a party and still checking every five minutes. I am so creeped out..i ...i love it. ~~

I hope I didn't keep you from having fun at the party! I went to bed, but the next chapter is coming out today.

Seriously, my eyes hurt when I read about them.

No, it's a compliment. No story's ever made my cringe and wince before.

When I was writing about the 'stalker' I actually creeped myself out- I was at home alone when I was writing that part and I was scaring even myself, lol.

Great chapter! that was so surprising when she opened the box.

Thanks! It was a shocker, wasn't it?

OMG. This sounds just like "Coraline"! D: I want this to be published into a short book!

While I was writing I realized it sounded an awful lot like that, so I'm trying to add a twist that didn't happen in the book. Just so things don't get predictable.

Yeah! Publish only [insert number of fans here] so that it'll be rare and everyone will want it!

I'm actually thinking about trying to get this published somewhere after I finish it- once you see it on the shelves you can be the ones to say I read it before it was published!'

I don't think the fans of this story is going to be countable! D:

I'm hoping it gets to that!

[[Braveheart]]

keeping me from having fun?


YOU GAVE ME THE FUN.

And it's a family party. So there is no getting arrested from cops. ^^

[ehsmithy]

Keep writing You left us on a cliff hanger!!!

[[Braveheart]]

hurry up and write please it's killing me!!!!



Simba pounces on his dad and growls: You promised!

I pounce on you and growl: "You promised!"

[ri bird.]

I'm so sorry, mom's just being really difficult. She insists on reading each chapter as soon as I write it (and throwing a fit if I don't let her ) and I just had a hard time getting her off my back to give me some space on the computer, so I didn't have time at all to write the chapter. I promise it'll be up tomorrow though!

Edit: Now that she's off my back, I was able to get up Chapter Sixteen. ^^ A promise is a promise, like Simba says

[ri bird.]

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I rolled the pair of eyes around my paws casually, avoiding their gazes. I need
to make some sort of bargain - but what could I possibly have that they'd want?
Think, Cho. They'd want something that would be difficult to get themselves...
something rare. Finally, I took a deep breath and looked up. "I want to make a deal,"
I announced.

Mother laughed. "What sort of deal?"

"One where I give you something you want, and in return you let me do something."

"Oh? But what could you possibly have to offer that we would want?" She tipped her
head, amused.

"My eyes."

Mother caught her breath; she stared at me with narrowed eyes, the whole room
tense with silence. I forced myself to meet her gaze.

She laughed softly, but I sensed a surprised edge to it. "Why would we want your
eyes?"

"Because they can see things normal eyes can't." I hesitated, careful with my words.
If my guess was wrong, I'd lose more than just my eyes. "You tricked Mrs. Rohr and
Nora - you do it with your eyes."

Something flashed through her eyes; surprise? She had no idea I caught on.

"And you tried to trick me too, didn't you?" I continued. "But it didn't work - not on
mine. And Mitch could see through you," I said, turning towards Father. "Even when
you tried to trick him with your eyes the same way Mother did to Mrs. Rohr, it still
didn't work. We can both see through your tricks. For some reason, Mitch's eyes are
like mine. You said so yourself."

I paused, the black eyes in my paws swiveling upwards to peer at my face. "My eyes
would be useful to you, wouldn't they? Being able to see everything. Nothing would
be able to get past you." It was a wild guess I had made on the spot; I had tried to
piece together things I had noticed, but I doubted my eyes would still be any value
to them. For who would risk trying to deceive them? I held my breath, hardly daring
to hope.

"You're a clever girl, aren't you?" Mother pushed herself off her chair, and it skidded
across the kitchen, slamming into the counter. I flinched. She stalked toward me
until she was a foot away from my face, her pale red eyes examining my face. "But
even then...whatever you ask from us, you'll still end up as a part of this family."
Her eyes burned into mine, smug and devious. "So what do you want?"

She knew I had trapped myself in my own offer; I'd still have to use the black eyes
after all since my end of the deal was to give my own pair up. "I don't want these
eyes," I said coolly. "I want a different pair. Give me a week to find some eyes that
I like."

Mother's eyes gleamed, and a smile tugged at her lips. "Oh, but it doesn't work like
that. You can't just choose any pair you fancy- these eyes were prepared specially
for you."

I shuddered. The eyes in my paws wriggled, and I knew it trying to catch my gaze.
Quickly, I changed my strategy. "How do I know they're safe?" I challenged. "What
are they going to do me?"

"They're going to change you into one of us, that's all. Ask Nora- it didn't hurt her a
single bit."

My eyes flickered toward Nora. She leered at me, and I swallowed. So they didn't just...
hypnotize her, like they did to Mrs. Rohr. They replaced her eyes too. "How do I know
that?" I said firmly. "Since Nora's one of you now, I'm not guaranteed the truth from
her."

Mother shrugged. "So what is it that you want? And choose something fast- I'm
running out of patience," she warned.

"Let me try them on someone else. Give me a few days to find someone that I can
test them on, just so I can make sure they don't hurt."

"So is that what you're asking from us? A few more days, just to test out your new
eyes?"

I nodded fervently.

"Three days is all you get."

"It's a deal."

The moment Mother stepped back looking satisfied, I knew she had gotten the
better end of the bargain.

[MO(PleaseDelete)]

No! Don't put the eyes in! Don't give your eyes! Burn the black ones! NOOOOOOOOOOO............