Heheee~ it's okay it's always hard the first time.
Okay tip one , instead of put -'s around actions put "s' around words so that your post will look like this instead.
Ex. showing what I just said:
"Oh well well well what do we have here? This is not expectable, no not at all," Takes scythe out ," I guess I shall be stopping you, a soul eaten is not good at all. Gives us more work to do and no one likes work." Gets ready to make a hit.
Okay and besides this though it is very nice now , I personally like adding more detail as to how the charater is feeling , adding more emotion.
Ex. Showing what I just said:
"Oh well well well what do we have here? This is not expectable, no not at all", I say with a low growl taking out my scythe ," I guess I shall be stopping you, a soul eaten is not good at all. Gives us more work to do and no one likes work." I smirk slightly holding my scythe out in an intimidating manner.
I hope that made some sense ;u;
okay anyhow this would be my response to the post you made:
{{Daemon is the name of the demon okay .u.}}
Daemon laughs holding out an already bloody looking knife. "You truly think you can stop me?", he asks almost in an innocent way , you wouldn't expect some one who looked like him to be a demon , nice blonde hair and a noble look about him.
He still smiling looked at the human trembling in front of him ,"He's doomed to die anyway , I'm simply here to eat~", he says with a smile thrusting the knife forward and with a clean flick of the wrist kills the man. He snickers slightly covering his mouth with a bloodied hand ,"~Opps , sorry about that.", he says grinning wickedly ,"I suppose I should finish what I started huh?', he says , though his question needs no answer. Of course he shouldn't not from the reapers point of view , though from his own , the only reason he came was for the part that was yet to be done , the eating of the soul.