Yes, much better! Thank you! But I agree with the other user- the layout that they chose is easier to read. Especially for dyslexic people like me c; Loved the update! And that poor family :c First Hex's sister, and now him. Bad luck.
Phantomhive's Shadow wrote:It would help if you lay it out something like this.I hear the door open and I turn. Thorn is already rushing towards me, I meet him halfway. He's on the verge of tears, I can tell. He hugs me close to his chest. I peek around him at Colt, who is already sniffling. How can I leave them? Thorn opens his arms and I do the same. Colt slips into our hug and we stand there, holding onto each other. "I love you." I whisper, tears falling down my face. "I love you too." Colt and Thorn say together.
The door opens again and the Peacekeeper says, "Time's up." Thorn and Colt give me one last squeeze before they are practically dragged out of the room. The door slams shut and the sound echoes through my ears. I stand there, trying to accept the fact that I am going to die. I quickly wipe my tears away. No good for the Capitol to see me weak. Maybe I could actually make it past the first day. Then I realized I had too.....for my brothers.
No one else comes to wish me good bye. Which is fine with me. I never had friends, I was satisfied with my two brothers. Finally the Peacekeepers and the woman came to escort me to the car. I tuned out as the lady started to chatter about how honored we should be and what a treat it would be to us, visitng the Capitol. I did find out her name was Sparkle Waters. Interesting name, but very Capitol.
We made it to the car where we were driven to the train station. Sparkle was talking about how fast the train was and that we would be at the Capitol in no time. I was too busy looking out the window, at the faces and the orchards. The things I would never see again. I swallowed back more tears as the car stopped and we were pulled out by Peacekeepers. There was cameras everywhere and I knew in the Capitol our faces were plastered all over. I barely made it on the train, every sound was deaf on my ears. Hex was behind me as we walked into what looked like the dining car.
I have never seen so much food in my life! There was pastries, meat, fruit, bread, cookies. Anything you could imagine! Hex was as stunned as me. I look at the blue-carpeted floor. Everything seemed to be blue. The walls, except they were more of a steel blue. I look at the table and chairs, which are mahogany. The buffet table and the four chairs that are for lounging are also mahogany. Except the chairs are outfitted in blue velvet.
Sparkle gently pushes us in. "Take a seat!" She says, motioning to the chairs. I sit down in the one closest to the window and Hex takes the one next to me. Sparkle sits across from Hex and starts talking about everything that will happen. I think Hex is the only one listening, I stare out the window at the passing trees.
Soon District 11 is far behind us. Thorn and Colt are behind us. Life itself is behind us. The Captiol is ahead. The Hunger Games are ahead. Death is ahead...
Leave a line space between paragraphs, so we won't get lost x3
Gravity Falls wrote:I loved that update! And the romance c; Nice, Hex, he he.
Can't wait for the next update!
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