Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

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MACI!!!!
6
40%
Jamie
3
20%
Dustin
4
27%
Other
2
13%
 
Total votes : 15

Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby LuvFinnick123 » Sun Jan 06, 2013 11:46 am

Thanks! :D
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"We're all a little broken. Then one day someone shows up with the missing pieces and puts them together. And that's what we call love."
Song of the moment. Waiting for Superman -Daughtry
Catchphrase of the moment. Bless your soul.
TV show/Movie of the moment. Frozen

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I'm currently writing a Fantasy Fiction story called Undiscovered Worlds. It is about three teenagers who are transfered to a school for magic. Evil is arising though, and the teens may be the only ones who can save the school and the world from the peril that arises! Here is the introduction if you're interested! If you want to read more please PM me!!!
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby Blargh-Pc » Sun Jan 06, 2013 11:59 am

Bump
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby LuvFinnick123 » Sun Jan 06, 2013 2:31 pm

bubump!
Quotes of the moment.
"We're all a little broken. Then one day someone shows up with the missing pieces and puts them together. And that's what we call love."
Song of the moment. Waiting for Superman -Daughtry
Catchphrase of the moment. Bless your soul.
TV show/Movie of the moment. Frozen

.......

I'm currently writing a Fantasy Fiction story called Undiscovered Worlds. It is about three teenagers who are transfered to a school for magic. Evil is arising though, and the teens may be the only ones who can save the school and the world from the peril that arises! Here is the introduction if you're interested! If you want to read more please PM me!!!
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby LuvFinnick123 » Sun Jan 06, 2013 5:44 pm

bump
Quotes of the moment.
"We're all a little broken. Then one day someone shows up with the missing pieces and puts them together. And that's what we call love."
Song of the moment. Waiting for Superman -Daughtry
Catchphrase of the moment. Bless your soul.
TV show/Movie of the moment. Frozen

.......

I'm currently writing a Fantasy Fiction story called Undiscovered Worlds. It is about three teenagers who are transfered to a school for magic. Evil is arising though, and the teens may be the only ones who can save the school and the world from the peril that arises! Here is the introduction if you're interested! If you want to read more please PM me!!!
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby LuvFinnick123 » Mon Jan 07, 2013 4:22 am

bump
Quotes of the moment.
"We're all a little broken. Then one day someone shows up with the missing pieces and puts them together. And that's what we call love."
Song of the moment. Waiting for Superman -Daughtry
Catchphrase of the moment. Bless your soul.
TV show/Movie of the moment. Frozen

.......

I'm currently writing a Fantasy Fiction story called Undiscovered Worlds. It is about three teenagers who are transfered to a school for magic. Evil is arising though, and the teens may be the only ones who can save the school and the world from the peril that arises! Here is the introduction if you're interested! If you want to read more please PM me!!!
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby Blargh-Pc » Mon Jan 07, 2013 6:22 am

Bumpers C'mon people! You don't know what you're missing out! L(._.L)
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby LuvFinnick123 » Mon Jan 07, 2013 10:05 am

Awww.... Thanks!
Quotes of the moment.
"We're all a little broken. Then one day someone shows up with the missing pieces and puts them together. And that's what we call love."
Song of the moment. Waiting for Superman -Daughtry
Catchphrase of the moment. Bless your soul.
TV show/Movie of the moment. Frozen

.......

I'm currently writing a Fantasy Fiction story called Undiscovered Worlds. It is about three teenagers who are transfered to a school for magic. Evil is arising though, and the teens may be the only ones who can save the school and the world from the peril that arises! Here is the introduction if you're interested! If you want to read more please PM me!!!
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby kiodi » Mon Jan 07, 2013 10:09 am

I think you have a good idea, but you need to go through and fix mistakes in punctuation or grammar that you may have missed, maybe even twice. I have seen a lot of people pass over stories with great plots because these problems can be a huge deterrent to serious readers, which is a group you don't want to lose!
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby LuvFinnick123 » Mon Jan 07, 2013 12:12 pm

Thanks for the advice!!! :)
Quotes of the moment.
"We're all a little broken. Then one day someone shows up with the missing pieces and puts them together. And that's what we call love."
Song of the moment. Waiting for Superman -Daughtry
Catchphrase of the moment. Bless your soul.
TV show/Movie of the moment. Frozen

.......

I'm currently writing a Fantasy Fiction story called Undiscovered Worlds. It is about three teenagers who are transfered to a school for magic. Evil is arising though, and the teens may be the only ones who can save the school and the world from the peril that arises! Here is the introduction if you're interested! If you want to read more please PM me!!!
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Re: Undiscovered Worlds- LOOKING FOR CRITIQUE!!! <3

Postby LuvFinnick123 » Mon Jan 07, 2013 1:50 pm

bump
Quotes of the moment.
"We're all a little broken. Then one day someone shows up with the missing pieces and puts them together. And that's what we call love."
Song of the moment. Waiting for Superman -Daughtry
Catchphrase of the moment. Bless your soul.
TV show/Movie of the moment. Frozen

.......

I'm currently writing a Fantasy Fiction story called Undiscovered Worlds. It is about three teenagers who are transfered to a school for magic. Evil is arising though, and the teens may be the only ones who can save the school and the world from the peril that arises! Here is the introduction if you're interested! If you want to read more please PM me!!!
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