~Many Coffins Before a Crown~Looking for Feedback!
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Re: ~Many Coffins Before a Crown~Looking for Feedback!
by Silence of Birds » Tue Jan 01, 2013 11:06 am
First Post. *sigh*
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→Wind howled through the night carrying a scent that would change the world.-Eragon
Folk in those stories had lots of chances of turning back. Only they didn't. Because they were holding onto something.-Lord if the Rings.
A little, silent lurker, hiding in the shadows.
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Folk in those stories had lots of chances of turning back. Only they didn't. Because they were holding onto something.-Lord if the Rings.
A little, silent lurker, hiding in the shadows.
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{ Account becomes silent in summer. Sorry! This just means I don't contact anyone and only do a few events. Account "returns" in the winter usually.(this also means that if you order something from me, nothing happens.)
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Re: ~Many Coffins Before a Crown~Looking for Feedback!
by Silence of Birds » Tue Jan 01, 2013 11:10 am
First Post
Last edited by Silence of Birds on Fri May 24, 2013 12:38 pm, edited 1 time in total.
→Wind howled through the night carrying a scent that would change the world.-Eragon
Folk in those stories had lots of chances of turning back. Only they didn't. Because they were holding onto something.-Lord if the Rings.
A little, silent lurker, hiding in the shadows.
Signature Shop
{ Account becomes silent in summer. Sorry! This just means I don't contact anyone and only do a few events. Account "returns" in the winter usually.(this also means that if you order something from me, nothing happens.)
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Signature made by cece. For Shieldmaiden only.
Folk in those stories had lots of chances of turning back. Only they didn't. Because they were holding onto something.-Lord if the Rings.
A little, silent lurker, hiding in the shadows.
Signature Shop
{ Account becomes silent in summer. Sorry! This just means I don't contact anyone and only do a few events. Account "returns" in the winter usually.(this also means that if you order something from me, nothing happens.)
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Signature made by cece. For Shieldmaiden only.
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Re: ~Many Coffins Before a Crown~Looking for Feedback!
by Silence of Birds » Tue Jan 01, 2013 4:38 pm
First Post
Last edited by Silence of Birds on Fri May 24, 2013 12:38 pm, edited 1 time in total.
→Wind howled through the night carrying a scent that would change the world.-Eragon
Folk in those stories had lots of chances of turning back. Only they didn't. Because they were holding onto something.-Lord if the Rings.
A little, silent lurker, hiding in the shadows.
Signature Shop
{ Account becomes silent in summer. Sorry! This just means I don't contact anyone and only do a few events. Account "returns" in the winter usually.(this also means that if you order something from me, nothing happens.)
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Signature made by cece. For Shieldmaiden only.
Folk in those stories had lots of chances of turning back. Only they didn't. Because they were holding onto something.-Lord if the Rings.
A little, silent lurker, hiding in the shadows.
Signature Shop
{ Account becomes silent in summer. Sorry! This just means I don't contact anyone and only do a few events. Account "returns" in the winter usually.(this also means that if you order something from me, nothing happens.)
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Signature made by cece. For Shieldmaiden only.
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Re: ~Many Coffins Before a Crown~Looking for Feedback!
by suzhay » Tue Jan 01, 2013 6:21 pm
I like it so far. It has a good plot and you have added a good amount of twist to keep me guessing a certain points, but not totally sure. It does need a bit of editing with the spelling, but that wasn't a major obstacle. However, for me, I felt that the plot went a little too fast. Like having the first encounter with Azdrine and then the battle with him in the same chapter. I felt you could have left a little cliffhanger when the scream happened and then moved on to the whole battle in the next chapter. All in all, I really like it. On my scale, it is a 17/20.
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