[Pie=Yum55]

girl: it was all my fault...
mom:what was?
girl:his death.
mom:no it wasnt.
girl:YES IT WAS!!!!!
mom:how was it your fault?he was murdered.
girl:it was because to protect me from those-those gangsters he therw himself in the way so he would get shot instead of me...it was my fault... YOU JUST GOT A SNEAK PEEK OF A BOOK THAT IM WRITING CALLED ALONE... (probaly not getting published though )

[corn nerd]

If that is the style of writing for your book, I'd change it.

And for the drawing, I suggest using layers, a bit of smoothing, and lock alpha.

[inezfryburger]

wow! i would TOTALLY read that story!!!!!! it sounds so intense!!! i wanna read it now...

[Pie=Yum55]

yeah it is intense it is : those are the emotions in my book
P.S. i draw way better on paper than on oekaki thats why it looks weird.

[corn nerd]

May you add me to color in? I'd like to clean it up a bit for you

[ojoku]

If you are going to write it as a book, your may want to change it. This is script form. Below is book form.

girl: it was all my fault...
mom:what was?
girl:his death.
mom:no it wasnt.
girl:YES IT WAS!!!!!
mom:how was it your fault?he was murdered.
girl:it was because to protect me from those-those gangsters he therw himself in the way so he would get shot instead of me...it was my fault...

"It was all my fault..." the young girl sobbed, wiping tears away with her slender fingers.
"What was?" her mother asked, watching her with concern burning in her eyes.
"His death." she whispered in response, hardly able to choke out the words.
"No it wasn't."
"Yes it was!" the child screamed.
"How was it your fault? He was murdered." her mother talked lightly, gently, even after being screamed at.
"It was to protect me from those... those gangsters. He threw himself in the way so he would get shot instead of me... It was my fault."

On the concept of the art, it looks very nice. I like the hair, the way it looks, and the lamp. The glow makes it look like it's really light.