Betrayal and Regret - An MLP Fanfic

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Betrayal and Regret - An MLP Fanfic

Postby synthwave » Tue Dec 04, 2012 5:21 pm

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"I wonder what it feels like to have someone that you love so dearly be pulled away from your life in an instant?"

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After breaking out of his stone statue, with the help of his daughter Screwball's love, chaos once again reigns over all of Equestria.
He took over the places of Celestia and Luna, hypnotizing ponies into believing he was the real ruler. The king. He became boastful about it, using his power for a little too much. He forgot about his dear Screwball. Their relationship went downhill, and Screwball began to realize it. She tried her best to talk him out of it, but nothing worked the way she hoped. Everything just... changed.

"I miss you Daddy."

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Prologue

The moonlight shone down on the garden, small grey pieces sparkling underneath the light. The garden was covered in a layer of soft mist.
Scattered around a large stone display was small bits and pieces from shattered stone, hidden in the green grass. They were covered in dirt and soot, even the display.
The display had a small plate on it, which read "Discord - The Master of Chaos."
"Daddy!" A voice echoed through the garden. "You're alive...!" It appeared to be a slight pinkish pony, who went by the name Screwball. The spiral eyed pony grinned from ear to ear, staring up at the draconequus who stood above her.
"Screwball!" Discord smiled like he'd never did before. They were reunited once again, and nothing meant more to him than that. Other than ruling Equestria, of course. "I'm free! Once again!" He cheered. Screwball flew into his arms for a long sweet hug. "Now, what do you say to a Ponyville of chaos? Or should I say, 'Chaos'ville?"
"Why not? Ponyville has been so boring ever since you got locked up!" Screwball said with a growl at the word "ponyville."
Discord opened his arms to let Screwball down. She jumped down, but stopped in mid-air. The propellers on her hat whizzed around, letting her float. She laughed as she bounced up and down in the air, Discord laughing along with her, a bit raspy. She stopped to look at him, noting his laugh.
"Sorry. Being in that stone... thing for so long gave me a bit of a raspy laugh." He snickered. "Now come on, you little rascal." He said jokingly, grabbing her and giving a soft noogie to the head before they headed off to Ponyville.
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After a long travel, they soon came upon the path into Ponyville. Celestia's sun had just about risen by this time, the sunlight crossed over the land.
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Work in progress~
Last edited by synthwave on Wed Dec 05, 2012 1:13 pm, edited 3 times in total.
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Re: Betrayal and Regret - An MLP Fanfic

Postby minigoogle » Tue Dec 04, 2012 7:13 pm

i really hope you keep writing this cuz me like!!! 8-)
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Re: Betrayal and Regret - An MLP Fanfic

Postby synthwave » Tue Dec 04, 2012 7:33 pm

Thanks! ^^
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Re: Betrayal and Regret - An MLP Fanfic

Postby ғoх » Wed Dec 05, 2012 3:17 am

I love it!! KEEP WRITING <33
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Re: Betrayal and Regret - An MLP Fanfic

Postby Tatzel » Wed Dec 05, 2012 9:11 am

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Re: Betrayal and Regret - An MLP Fanfic

Postby synthwave » Wed Dec 05, 2012 10:51 am

Thanks guys! C:
I'll start writing more of the prologue and maybe get to making the first chapter, so keep your eyes peeled! ^^
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Re: Betrayal and Regret - An MLP Fanfic

Postby Ditzy Doo » Wed Dec 05, 2012 1:53 pm

Nice!
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