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[DunkMasterSolas]

Hi there! I hope I'm not breaking into your story too much but I do want to comment on this.
I am thoroughly enjoying this. Your writing style is clean, simple, but still descriptive and captivating. I have chuckled more than one at this. I love how you're able to hint at certain points in a character's personality without needing to put in too far into the open. For example, when you talked about Linden's sister's favorite expression I almost instantly knew it was "don't you dare" and I laughed out loud. (Honestly I got a couple looks from the people around me. I need to stop reading clever stories in libraries! Always make me seem a little odd.)

I have to say that I am becoming endeared to most (if not all) of these characters, which is a rarity for me. However I think that way you're coming at this and allowing us to get inside all of the character's head is what makes me like them all so much. I have to admit that my favorite (so far) is Oscar. He won me over with, "Great. I get to meet my new housemates with a head full of shrubbery. It looks like we’ve been eloping..." I also really like Marie, who is such a breath of fresh air from the normal "shy girl" because we (as I said) get to see what's going on inside her head.
Sorry if I'm rambling I just had a lot of thoughts after reading this. Haha. There are a couple minor things like some misplaced words, but they do not mess up the flow of the writing and are easily spottable if you ever feel the desire to go back and edit it. Actually I'm surprised that you haven't done much editing because it flowed very well!

One question, Oscar and Hannah obviously knew/know each other, but it also seems that Anne and Hannah knew/know each other as well. However Oscar was not aware that Anne knew Hannah. Was that right? The relationships between those three were a little confusing and though I'm sure more light will be shed on the subject, I want to make sure I got that right so far.

I can't wait to see where this goes. Really good job and I look forward to reading more!

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*blushing rather madly right now* Someone likes my writing! Yay!

I'm glad that my first person writing is not that bad, it's the first time I've ever written in it. Oscar and Marie are my favorites, I wasn't sure about starting off with Linden because he's so negative but the first three parts contain so much foreshadowing that I needed those three...
Yeah I shall go back and sort those words when I edit, and I think I'm going to turn my autocorrect off to try and stop that problem.
Ah gosh you make me feel so happy, I'm glad that the flow of it works well, you got funny looks for laughing, I'm getting funny looks because I'm grinning from ear to ear.

Yes, that's right, and it is a little confusing right now but light will be shed on the subject later on.

Thank you again!